Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, correct tense and article use. Avoid repetition and include one or two specific tasks you do. Use linking words for clarity (e.g., “and” or “so”).

Example: I work as a medical office administrator in a dental practice and have been there for five years. I handle patient appointments and process insurance claims, so I’ve learned how to communicate effectively with patients and insurers.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence naming the branch, give one or two specific details (number of branches, community facilities), and avoid filler and repetition. Use linking words (e.g., “and”, “also”) to connect ideas.

Example: I work at the Oakville branch of a dental clinic that has four other branches. It’s located in a friendly local community and has all the necessary facilities, such as parking and a waiting area.

Suggestion: Give a clear reason in a topic sentence, then add specific supporting points without hesitation or repetition. Use linking words (e.g., “because”, “for example”) and precise verbs (help, handle, refer).

Example: Yes, it’s a great place to work because the team is supportive and I’ve gained useful skills. For example, I handle insurance claims, communicate with patients about treatment plans, and arrange referrals to specialists.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear opinion sentence, then support with two specific details. Remove hesitations and correct word choices (e.g., “quiet area”, “equipment”). Use linking words such as “because” and “also”.

Example: Yes, I like my workplace because it’s located in a quiet area and is very clean and well-organized. Also, all the equipment is kept in order, which makes my job easier and less stressful.

Suggestion: Start with a clear future-plan sentence, then give specific details about current preparation and preferred field. Avoid repetition and correct phrasing (e.g., “pass my exam”, “work in a good hospital”, “medical-surgical or cardiology field”).

Example: I plan to become a registered nurse and am currently studying for the licensing exam. After I pass, I hope to work in a reputable hospital in the medical‑surgical or cardiology department to gain clinical experience.

× I'm working in a dental office as an A medical office admin.

✓ I work in a dental office as a medical office admin.

Use simple present 'I work' for a regular job. 'I'm working' (present continuous) suggests a temporary action; use simple present to describe permanent employment. Also remove the extra article 'A' before 'medical' and duplicate words.

× I'm working over there for from five years and I really like my job because I I learned so many things over there like to how to deal with a patient and insurance companies.

✓ I have been working there for five years and I really like my job because I have learned so many things there, such as how to deal with patients and insurance companies.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been working' or present perfect 'have learned' to express an action that started in the past and continues. Remove redundant words 'over' and 'from'. Use plural 'patients' for general meaning. Use 'such as' or 'like' followed by noun phrases, not infinitive 'to how to'.

× I'm working in a dental office as a medical dental admin.

✓ I work in a dental office as a medical-dental admin.

Use simple present for regular employment. Combine 'medical dental' with a hyphen or choose one descriptor 'medical-dental' to avoid repetition.

× I my office have like 4 to 5 branches.

✓ My office has about four or five branches.

Subject 'office' is singular, so use 'has'. Spell numbers under ten in words in formal speech and use 'about' or 'approximately' instead of 'like'.

× I'm working in the Oakville branch.

✓ I work in the Oakville branch.

Use simple present to state where you work regularly rather than present continuous.

× So it's a very good branch. It it is a very it is a very good branch. It is in a local community like all the facilities are.

✓ It is a very good branch located in a local community with all the facilities nearby.

Remove repetitions and combine ideas into one clear sentence. Use 'located in' and 'with' to connect the location and available facilities.

× Yes, it is a good place to work because I learned so many things over there, like my staff, uh, staff members are over there very nice and they help each other in any difficult situation.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because I have learned so many things there. My staff members are very nice and they help each other in difficult situations.

Use present perfect 'have learned' for experiences up to now. Remove filler words and place adjectives correctly before nouns. Use plural 'situations' for general cases.

× I, I learned over there how to deal, how to deal with insurance companies, how to communicate with the patients and how to, how to give referrals to the patient.

✓ There I learned how to deal with insurance companies, how to communicate with patients, and how to give referrals to patients.

Use past simple or present perfect depending on context; here past simple 'learned' is acceptable if referring to training. Remove redundant repetitions and use plural 'patients' for generalization. Place 'how to' only once before a series of verbs.

× Things are like the place where I'm working, umm, it is so quiet.

✓ The place where I work is very quiet.

Use concise subject-verb-object structure. Avoid filler words and incorrect word order 'Things are like'.

× It is located in a quieter. It is good located in a quiet reason.

✓ It is located in a quiet area.

Use 'area' not 'reason'. Use correct adjective order 'located in a quiet area'; remove comparative 'quieter' unless comparing.

× And there are all the facilities over there, uh, like it's a very clean and tidy place.

✓ There are many facilities there, and it is a very clean and tidy place.

Avoid awkward placement of 'all'. Use 'many' or 'all the' appropriately. Replace filler and ensure pronoun 'it' correctly refers to 'place'.

× Like in my office, all the equipments are in proper place.

✓ In my office, all the equipment is in the proper place.

Use uncountable noun 'equipment' (not 'equipments') and singular 'is'. Use article 'the proper place' or 'their proper places' if plural items.

× I'm going to work as a registered nurse.

✓ I plan to work as a registered nurse.

'I'm going to work as' is understandable but ambiguous; 'I plan to work as' or 'I intend to work as' is clearer for future career plans. Alternatively, 'I am planning to become a registered nurse' if referring to qualification.

× I'm preparing for my exam right now.

✓ I am preparing for my exam right now.

Original is acceptable; minor correction to use full 'I am' for clarity. This is present continuous to describe an action in progress.

× Whenever my exam is cleared, I want to work with the uh, uh, I want to work with a good hospitals because I am interested, interested in the interesting in, in the medical surgical field cardiologist.

✓ Once I pass my exam, I want to work in a good hospital because I am interested in the medical-surgical field, particularly cardiology.

Use 'pass my exam' or 'once I pass' rather than 'exam is cleared'. Use 'work in a hospital' not 'with a hospital' and singular 'a good hospital' or 'good hospitals' consistently. Remove repetition and choose proper field name 'medical-surgical' and 'cardiology' rather than 'cardiologist' which is a person.