Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and directly state your role first, then give one or two specific responsibilities. Avoid repetition (e.g. "love what I do" twice). Use linking words to connect role and duties.

Example: I work as a registered pharmacist. In this role I dispense medications and provide patient counselling, so I make sure patients understand dosages and possible side effects.

Suggestion: Start with the company name and include a brief specific detail about your role or the workplace. Avoid repeating 'nearby' and combine ideas using a linking word (e.g. 'and').

Example: I work at Mercury Drug Corporation, one of the largest pharmaceutical chains in the Philippines, where I handle dispensing and customer counselling. It's only a five-minute drive from my home, which is very convenient.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like 'gives me joy' without an example—explain what about the people or environment you appreciate.

Example: Yes, it's a good place to work because my colleagues are supportive and professional. For example, they help each other during busy shifts, which creates a positive and comfortable atmosphere.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same idea. Add one more specific reason beyond convenience (e.g. learning opportunities or friendly team) and use a linking word.

Example: Yes, I like it a lot because it's very convenient—just a five-minute drive from home—and I also appreciate the learning opportunities from experienced pharmacists on my team.

Suggestion: Be concise and state a clear plan. Instead of repeating 'love,' describe a concrete future step (e.g. promotion, additional training, or taking more responsibility) and use linking words to clarify reasons.

Example: I plan to continue working at my current company, and I hope to take on more responsibility by training as a senior pharmacist. This would allow me to develop professionally while continuing the work I enjoy.

× I am working as a registered pharmacist, which enables me to love what I do and contribute my skills to other people.

✓ I work as a registered pharmacist, which enables me to love what I do and to contribute my skills to other people.

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