Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use correct collocations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct phrasing: “looking for a job” and avoid repeating ideas.

Example: I’m currently a student who has just graduated. Because I’m between studies and full-time work, I’m looking for a job, preferably something related to hospitality to build practical experience.

Suggestion: Use correct grammar and a clear sentence structure: subject + verb + place/role. Avoid filler words and give a brief additional detail using a linking word.

Example: I work as a receptionist at a restaurant called A. I greet customers and manage bookings there.

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion sentence and then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers and unclear words (e.g., “blister,” “fuzzy”). Use adjectives accurately and mention specific positives like atmosphere, colleagues or facilities.

Example: Yes, it’s a good place to work because the atmosphere is cozy and the decor is attractive. Also, the staff are friendly and the manager is supportive, which makes shifts pleasant.

Suggestion: Answer directly and complete the sentence. Use linking words to explain why or why not, and provide one concise specific reason. Avoid unfinished thoughts.

Example: Yes, I would like to keep working there because I enjoy interacting with customers and the job helps me improve my communication skills.

Suggestion: Give a clear statement about your career goals, then add one specific step you will take to achieve them. Use correct vocabulary and avoid confusion between words (e.g., “tools,” “manager”).

Example: My plan is to build a career in hospitality management. To achieve this, I intend to gain experience at the front desk, take short courses in customer service, and eventually apply for a supervisory role.

× At the moment I am a student. I have recently graduated so I am currently in between studies and work. I am now looking for job opportunity.

✓ At the moment I am a student. I have recently graduated, so I am currently between studying and working. I am now looking for job opportunities.

The sentence uses present tense but contains awkward noun phrases and missing plural. 'In between studies and work' is unidiomatic; use 'between studying and working' to match present continuous context (present tense issue). 'Job opportunity' should be plural 'job opportunities' or 'a job opportunity' to match countable noun usage.

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

This is punctuation/formatting: the extra '>' character is not appropriate. The question is correct otherwise; remove the stray symbol.

× I am working in A at a receptionist at a restaurant.

✓ I am working at A as a receptionist in a restaurant.

Prepositions and role phrase are incorrect. Use 'at' for workplace location and 'as a receptionist' for job role. Place 'in a restaurant' or 'at a restaurant' for location. The original mixes 'in' and 'at' and repeats 'at' incorrectly.

× Yes, it is a good blister to overcome because it is a fuzzy and umm, uh, cozy and beautiful, uh, decoration, beautiful place with the decoration umm, and all uh, stuff and uh, uh, manager will also umm.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to work because it is cozy and beautifully decorated; the manager is also supportive.

Original sentence is disfluent and uses wrong words ('blister to overcome' is incorrect). Restructure the sentence to be clear and grammatical. Replace informal fillers and incorrect adjectives: 'cozy and beautifully decorated' and provide a complete clause about the manager.

× As I would like to do the place where I work because.

✓ Yes, I would like the place where I work because it is comfortable and the staff are friendly.

Original sentence is incomplete and uses incorrect verb phrase 'would like to do the place'. Provide a complete response matching question tense and intent: 'I would like the place where I work' is awkward; better 'I like the place where I work' or 'Yes, I would like to work there' depending on meaning. Also add a reason to complete the sentence.

× My tools are our plan is to be a good uh. Do we need the good uh manager?

✓ My future plan is to become a good manager. I want to develop the skills needed to be a good manager.

Original is confused and ungrammatical ('My tools are our plan'). Rearranged into clear future plan using 'My future plan is to become...' which fits the question about future work plans. Provided a second sentence clarifying intent and removing filler.