Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, fix subject-verb agreement and article use, and keep to 2–3 sentences. Use one linking phrase to add detail.

Example: I work as a nurse at a hospital. I enjoy helping patients, and seeing them recover makes me feel fulfilled and happy.

Suggestion: Organize into a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail with a linking word. Correct small grammar issues (articles, run-on sentence). Use specific examples of duties to add credibility.

Example: I work at a general hospital where I've been employed for 12 years. Because I regularly coordinate care with doctors and support patients directly, the work is very rewarding.

Suggestion: Combine into 2–3 coherent sentences, fix agreement and verb forms, and use linking words for clarity. Provide one precise example and explain its effect.

Example: Yes — it's a good place to work because the atmosphere is friendly and professional, and my colleagues are very supportive. For example, my supervisor gives regular feedback, which helps my professional development and motivates me to improve.

Suggestion: Avoid comma splices by using separate sentences or conjunctions, correct plural/singular forms, and be specific about what teammates do. Keep it natural and concise.

Example: Yes, I love working there because I have many friends and the staff are very supportive. For example, my teammates always help with difficult tasks and share useful advice.

Suggestion: Start with a single clear topic sentence, remove repetition, and connect two ideas with a linking word. Add one specific step or timeframe to show planning and make your answer more concrete.

Example: My future plan is to work in the US to experience a different culture and meet people from diverse backgrounds. I also hope to work with more advanced medical technology there, and I am preparing by researching US licensing requirements so I can apply within the next two years.

× I work as a nurse in the hospital. I love my job because I love I enjoy helping people.

✓ I work as a nurse in the hospital. I love my job because I enjoy helping people.

The sentence contains a repetition ('I love I enjoy') and an incorrect structure. Remove the duplicated phrase and keep the correct verb + -ing form 'enjoy helping' to express liking an activity. Suggestion: say either 'I love my job because I enjoy helping people' or 'I love my job because I like helping people.'

× Caring for patient and seeing them recover make me very feel very fulfilled and happy.

✓ Caring for patients and seeing them recover makes me feel very fulfilled and happy.

'Patient' should be plural ('patients') when speaking generally. Subject 'Caring for patients and seeing them recover' is a compound subject functioning as a singular idea; use singular verb 'makes'. Also remove the extra 'very'. Suggestion: use plural for general groups and match verb number: 'makes me feel'.

× I work at a hospital and I've been there for 12 years. It's a very rewarding job because I deal with patients and collaborate closely with doctors and I enjoy helping people and being part of medical team.

✓ I work at a hospital and I've been there for 12 years. It's a very rewarding job because I deal with patients, collaborate closely with doctors, enjoy helping people, and being part of the medical team.

Missing article before 'medical team' ('the medical team') is an article error (There be/Article). Also sentence is long and needs commas to separate parallel verb phrases. Added 'the' for specificity and commas to improve clarity.

× Yes, it is. I enjoy working at the hospital because the atmosphere is friendly and professional and my colleague are very supportive.

✓ Yes, it is. I enjoy working at the hospital because the atmosphere is friendly and professional and my colleagues are very supportive.

'Colleague' should be plural 'colleagues' to match 'are' (singular/plural issue). This is an incorrect use of number; use plural when referring to multiple coworkers. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'colleagues are'.

× For example, my supervisor provide regular feedback which helps me, helps my career development and motivate me to improve.

✓ For example, my supervisor provides regular feedback, which helps me, helps my career development, and motivates me to improve.

'Supervisor' is third person singular and requires 'provides' not 'provide'. Also verbs in the coordinated list must agree in number: 'helps' and 'motivates'. Added commas for clarity. Suggestion: ensure third person singular verbs end with -s.

× Yes, I love the place I work, I have many friends there and everyone is very friendly and supportive.

✓ Yes, I love the place I work; I have many friends there and everyone is very friendly and supportive.

This sentence is grammatically correct regarding articles, but the punctuation needed improvement: replace the comma splice with a semicolon or period. No article change required. Suggestion: avoid comma splices by using a semicolon or separating into two sentences.

× For example, my teammate always help me with difficult tasks and share useful advice.

✓ For example, my teammate always helps me with difficult tasks and shares useful advice.

'Teammate' is third person singular and requires verbs with -s: 'helps' and 'shares'. This falls under subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms. Suggestion: when the subject is he/she/it, add -s to present simple verbs.

× My future work My future plan is to work in the US because I want to experience a different culture and meet people from diverse backgrounds.

✓ My future plan is to work in the US because I want to experience a different culture and meet people from diverse backgrounds.

The phrase repeats 'My future work My future plan' which is a sentence structure/repetition error. Remove the duplicated fragment. Suggestion: state the plan once and keep the sentence concise.

× I also hope to learn about and work with more advanced technology in my field, which will help me grow professionally.

✓ I also hope to learn about and work with more advanced technology in my field, which will help me grow professionally.

This sentence is correct. No grammatical change needed. Note: ensure 'more advanced technology' is clear; articles are not required before uncountable 'technology.'