Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), and give one or two specific reasons for seeking a job. Use linking words to connect ideas (because, so, and).

Example: I am currently an upper-intermediate student. I am looking for a part-time job because it will help me improve my communication skills and support my family financially.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid repeating information. Use one clear sentence to say you don't work, then add 1–2 specific reasons. Reduce hesitation and use linking words (so, because, and) to make it coherent.

Example: I don't work at the moment; I am still a student. I am searching for a job to develop my communication skills and gain work experience so I can better support my family.

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons. Avoid uncertain phrases like “I don't know” if you can form an opinion. Replace vague words (novel) with clearer ones (rewarding, meaningful).

Example: Yes, I think a coaching center would be a good place to work because teaching is a rewarding job. It allows me to help students improve, develop my communication skills, and build experience in education.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and be concise. Give a clear reason why you would like the workplace and provide one or two specific aspects you enjoy (environment, colleagues, tasks).

Example: Yes, I would like my workplace because it has a friendly atmosphere and supportive colleagues. I enjoy the daily routine and the opportunity to learn from others.

Suggestion: Provide a clear chronological plan with fewer hesitations. Use linking words (first, then, after that) and correct terminology (enroll in a master's program, complete a PhD). Be specific about desired job or country if possible.

Example: First I plan to complete my undergraduate degree, then I will enroll in a master's program and later pursue a PhD. After finishing my studies, I hope to find a suitable job abroad and settle in another country.

× I am a student but I am looking for a job, uh, basically I am a student in uh.

✓ I am a student, but I am looking for a job; basically, I am a student.

Redundant and incorrect use of 'in uh' after 'student' is unnecessary. Also missing comma before 'but' and need for clearer punctuation. Suggest removing the dangling 'in uh' and use commas to separate clauses.

× I uh, I am student of intermediate, upper level, upper intermediate level, uh, but I'm looking for a job to secure myself, to improve myself and also uh, to help myself and support my family.

✓ I am a student at the upper-intermediate level, but I'm looking for a job to secure myself, to improve myself, and to support my family.

Use 'a student at' or 'a student in' with level; 'student of intermediate' is incorrect. 'Upper level, upper intermediate level' is redundant—use 'upper-intermediate level'. Combine repeated phrases and remove 'help myself' which is vague. Add commas in a list.

× So basically, I don't work, I study, uh, now I'm uh, last year I have completed my uh, upper intermediate level and now I'm looking for a job to gain a social, my social uh, to gain social communication skill and to gain my uh, uh, my development skill and to support my family.

✓ So basically I don't work; I study. Last year I completed my upper-intermediate level, and now I'm looking for a job to improve my social communication skills, develop professionally, and support my family.

Tense and phrasing issues: 'now I'm, last year I have completed' mixes present and present perfect awkwardly. Use simple past 'completed' for last year. Use plural 'skills' and clearer phrase 'develop professionally' rather than 'gain my development skill'. Remove filler words.

× I don't know, but if I have to say if there I was in the job, I would say it would be the, it would be a coaching center because teaching is a novel profession, I think, and teaching the students to how to do.

✓ I don't know, but if I had to say where I would work, I would choose a coaching center because teaching is a noble profession, I think, and teaching students how to do things.

Conditional form: use 'if I had to say' not 'if I have to say'. 'If there I was in the job' is ungrammatical—use 'where I would work'. 'Novel' is wrong word choice; 'noble' is intended. 'Teaching the students to how to do' should be 'teaching students how to do things'.

× And it is a good, it is a noble profession for me and I think it is a good place to work wherever it is.

✓ It is a noble profession for me, and I think it is a good place to work wherever it is located.

Redundant 'good' and awkward final clause 'wherever it is' needs 'located' or 'situated'. Use commas to join clauses.

× Yeah, I'd like the place where I work. If I didn't like the place, then I I will never work there. I wouldn't never work there.

✓ Yes, I'd like the place where I work. If I didn't like it, I would never work there.

Mixed conditional/modal errors: 'If I didn't like the place, then I I will never work there' mixes past conditional with future 'will'. Use second conditional: 'If I didn't like it, I would never work there.' Also remove double negative 'wouldn't never'.

× So that's why I have to say that I like the work. I like the environment and the atmosphere of the place and I enjoy every day wherever I'm in my workplace.

✓ So that's why I have to say that I like the work. I like the environment and atmosphere of the place, and I enjoy every day at my workplace.

Preposition issue and word order: 'enjoy every day wherever I'm in my workplace' is awkward. Use 'enjoy every day at my workplace'. Remove redundant 'the' before 'atmosphere' and add comma.

× Uh, my future plan is to, uh, uh, completing my, uh, graduation and then I, I will, uh, admit myself as a masters and I, after completing my PhD, then I'll look for a job as I, if I get a suitable job for me, then I will be settled in, uh, another country.

✓ My future plan is to complete my graduation, then enroll in a master's program. After completing my PhD, I'll look for a suitable job and, if I find one, I will settle in another country.

Gerund error: 'is to completing' should be 'is to complete' (infinitive). 'Admit myself as a masters' is incorrect—use 'enroll in a master's program'. Simplify and correct conditional: 'if I find a suitable job, I will settle in another country.' Remove fillers and fix tense consistency.