Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence stating your job, then add one or two relevant, specific details. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., "love my mom work") and repetition. Use linking words only if adding extra detail.

Example: I work as a tutor at Anchovy University. I’ve always wanted to be a teacher, and I enjoy helping students learn practical nursing skills.

Suggestion: Organize information logically: give the university name and location first, then one or two concise facts (commute, hours, workload). Remove filler words and correct grammar (e.g., "I travel about 13 kilometres daily").

Example: I work at JG University in Ahmedabad. I usually commute about 13 kilometres each way and my typical hours are from 9 a.m. to 5 p.m., so my schedule can be quite busy.

Suggestion: Give a clear reasoned response: start with a direct yes/no, then offer two specific reasons using linking words (because, so, whereas). Avoid repetition and fillers.

Example: Yes, it’s a very good place to work because the atmosphere is calm and supportive, and tutors are not burdened with administrative tasks, so we can concentrate on teaching.

Suggestion: Be natural and use correct verb forms: answer directly and give specific positive details. Avoid conditional phrasing when you already work there. Mention two concrete features and link them clearly.

Example: Yes, I like working there because the work culture is positive and the campus is pleasant — there’s a garden at the entrance and all classrooms are well ventilated and air-conditioned.

Suggestion: Structure your answer: start with your main plan, then add specific steps and reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid vague endings and incomplete phrases ("raise A").

Example: I plan to continue teaching nursing and train competent practical nurses. To do this, I intend to complete a master’s degree to improve my knowledge and then apply for a university-level teaching position where I can teach advanced students.

× I work as a tutor in Anchovy University and I love my mom work.

✓ I work as a tutor at Anchovy University and I love my mom's work.

Use 'at' for institutions; possessive for 'mom' requires apostrophe and 'work' needs to be possessive to show it belongs to your mother. Suggestion: use 'at' for workplace and add ''s' to indicate possession.

× I've always dreamed of being a teacher and I'm actually enjoying the feeling of being a teacher there.

✓ I've always dreamed of being a teacher, and I'm actually enjoying being a teacher there.

Redundant phrase 'the feeling of being a teacher' is wordy. Use present participle 'enjoying being' without extra nouns. Suggestion: simplify to 'enjoying being a teacher there.'

× I work at at a university named JG.

✓ I work at a university named JG.

Duplicate preposition 'at at' is incorrect. Use a single 'at' for location. Suggestion: remove the extra 'at'.

× Uh, I traveled almost like 13 kilometres per day to reach there and my timings are 9 to 5 most of the time.

✓ Uh, I travel almost 13 kilometres per day to get there, and my hours are usually 9 to 5.

Mix of past 'traveled' with present context; use present simple 'travel' for habitual actions. 'Almost like' is informal; use 'almost'. Use 'get there' or 'reach there' is less natural. Suggestion: use present simple for routines and natural phrasing 'usually'.

× I am very work loaded with all the teaching stuff.

✓ I am very overloaded with teaching work.

'work loaded' is incorrect word order; correct adjective is 'overloaded'. 'teaching stuff' is informal; use 'teaching work' or 'teaching duties'. Suggestion: use 'overloaded with teaching duties.'

× We only have to focus on teaching. Uh, unlike other universities, they give the admin work to the tutors, but in our university we only focus on teaching and uh.

✓ We only have to focus on teaching. Unlike at other universities, they give administrative work to tutors, but at our university we focus only on teaching.

Sentence ended with 'and uh' incomplete. 'Admin' should be 'administrative'. Improve preposition use 'Unlike at other universities'. Avoid trailing filler. Suggestion: complete the contrast and remove fillers.

× Yes, if I was and a tutor there for sure I would like the place I work because it has a very nice environment plus good work culture and this location is very nice.

✓ Yes, if I were a tutor there, I would definitely like the place where I work because it has a very nice environment, a good work culture, and a pleasant location.

Use subjunctive 'if I were' for unreal condition. 'and a tutor' is extraneous; word order fixed. 'for sure' is informal; use 'definitely'. Add 'where' before 'I work'. Suggestion: use 'if I were' for hypothetical situations and improve parallelism.

× They have a garden in front of the building and all the classrooms are well ventilated and have the air.

✓ They have a garden in front of the building, and all the classrooms are well ventilated and have air conditioning.

Phrase 'have the air' is incorrect; likely meant 'air conditioning' or 'ventilation'. Add comma for sentence flow. Suggestion: specify 'air conditioning' or 'good ventilation'.

× In future I would like to continue teaching as I work as a nursing tutor, so I would like to raise new good practical nurses.

✓ In the future, I would like to continue teaching as a nursing tutor, so I would like to train new competent practical nurses.

Add article 'the' before 'future'. 'Raise' is incorrect verb for training people; use 'train'. 'good practical nurses' should be 'competent practical nurses' for formality. Suggestion: use 'train' and add 'the' before 'future'.

× Surely I would gain more knowledge by doing the masters and then again I will reapply and join a university where I can teach and raise A.

✓ Surely I will gain more knowledge by doing a master's degree, and then I will reapply to join a university where I can teach and train students.

Use 'will' for future certainty consistently. 'the masters' should be 'a master's degree'. 'reapply and join' needs 'reapply to join' or 'reapply for'. 'raise A' is incomplete/unclear; replace with 'train students'. Suggestion: use 'a master's degree' and clarify the object as 'students.'