Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition and fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Remove hesitations like "uh" and correct unclear phrases (e.g., "to drop my career").

Example: I am currently a student preparing for the IELTS exam. I quit my nursing job six months ago to concentrate on studying so I can achieve the scores needed to advance my career abroad.

Suggestion: Provide a clear, correctly structured sentence and avoid repetition. Use linking words to add a specific detail about the hospital rather than repeating numbers. Correct grammatical errors and keep it brief (max 3–4 sentences).

Example: I work as a nurse and have worked in a hospital for almost 12 years. The hospital is a large facility with around 750 beds and more than 20 departments, so I gained experience in several specialties.

Suggestion: Answer directly and finish your thought. Avoid ambiguous or culturally sensitive expressions like "God fearing people." Use specific reasons and linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Remove hesitations and complete the sentence with a clear point.

Example: Yes, it is a good place to work because the administration and management treated staff with respect and provided fair working conditions, so morale among employees was high.

Suggestion: Keep sentences natural and grammatically correct. Use present tense for ongoing feelings and avoid mixed tenses. Be specific about what you liked (e.g., teamwork, support) and use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I liked working there because the workplace had a supportive atmosphere and friendly colleagues, and the department heads were kind and helpful, which made my job enjoyable.

Suggestion: Respond with a clear plan and correct grammar. Use linking words (first, then, so) and avoid vague phrases like "grade up my." Give one or two specific steps and finish the final idea. Keep within 3 sentences.

Example: My immediate plan is to pass the IELTS, which is the first step toward moving abroad with my family. After that, I plan to apply for nursing positions overseas to advance my career and gain international experience.

× At present, I'm a student as I'm preparing for my IELTS examination.

✓ At present, I am a student because I am preparing for my IELTS examination.

Use 'because' instead of 'as' to clearly express reason in spoken English here; also expand contractions for clarity. This is a present continuous action describing an ongoing plan, so 'I am preparing' is correct.

× I quit my job six months ago just to focus on, uh, the IELTS, uh, to prepare well and to bring good marks in that to drop my career.

✓ I quit my job six months ago to focus on the IELTS and prepare well so I could improve my career prospects.

The original mixes awkward phrasing and incorrect infinitive purpose. Use past simple 'quit' (correct) and then a clear purpose clause 'to focus on' plus a result 'so I could improve my career prospects.' 'Bring good marks in that to drop my career' is ungrammatical and unclear.

× As my profession is nursing, I have been working in a hospital for almost 12 years.

✓ My profession is nursing, and I have been working in a hospital for almost 12 years.

Beginning with 'As' can imply cause; better to join two related facts with 'and' for clarity. The present perfect continuous 'have been working' is appropriate for an action continuing up to now.

× The hospital which is about 750 bedded bedded hospital which has 720 plus departments too.

✓ The hospital has about 750 beds and more than 720 staff and departments.

Original repeats 'bedded' and has a confusing relative clause. Use a clear noun phrase: 'has about 750 beds' and 'more than 720 departments' or 'staff and departments' depending on intended meaning. Avoid repeating words and mismatched numerals.

× As an employer, I definitely, I will say yes, it is a good place to work because the administration and the management was quite, uh, humble and God fearing people.

✓ As an employee, I would definitely say yes; it is a good place to work because the administration and management are humble and God-fearing people.

The speaker is an employee, not employer. Use conditional 'would' for polite opinion and plural verb 'are' to agree with 'administration and management.' 'God-fearing' needs a hyphen as a compound adjective.

× So they always, uh, respect each and everyone and especially there is no.

✓ They always respect everyone, and especially there is no discrimination.

Original sentence is incomplete. Provide a clear ending such as 'no discrimination' to complete the thought. 'Each and everyone' is redundant; use 'everyone.'

× To be honest, yes, I love the place where I work because that was, uh, that gives gave me, uh, that gave me a beautiful environment, uh, until the day when I leave.

✓ To be honest, yes, I love the place where I work because it has given me a beautiful environment up to the day I leave.

Mixing tenses ('love' present, 'was' past, 'gives gave' wrong forms). Use present perfect 'has given' to show an effect from past to present. Use 'up to the day I leave' for time reference.

× The colleagues were friendly and all the head of the departments were kind and very much respective people.

✓ The colleagues are friendly and all the heads of the departments are kind and very respectful people.

Maintain present tense if speaking generally about current workplace: use 'are.' 'Head' should be plural 'heads of the departments.' 'Respective' is incorrect here; use 'respectful' to describe people who show respect.

× As he said, I am preparing for the IELTS examination.

✓ As I said, I am preparing for the IELTS examination.

'As he said' incorrectly refers to a male third person; the speaker should say 'As I said.' This is an incorrect pronoun/reference issue.

× This is one of the first step for my future plan as I'm planning to move abroad with my family.

✓ This is one of the first steps in my future plan, as I am planning to move abroad with my family.

Use plural 'steps' after 'one of the' and 'in' rather than 'for' to collocate with 'plan.' Present continuous 'am planning' is correct.

× This is the first step I have to complete for my career growth.

✓ This is the first step I have to complete for my career growth.

Sentence is acceptable but to be clearer: keep as is. No change needed.

× So once I done this, I will move to the abroad and grade up my.

✓ So once I have done this, I will move abroad and advance my career.

Original misses auxiliary 'have' for present perfect in a time clause ('once I have done this'). 'To the abroad' is incorrect; use 'abroad.' 'Grade up my' is incomplete and unidiomatic; use 'advance my career.'