Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more natural: give a direct topic sentence, correct vocabulary and concise supporting detail. Replace hesitant fillers and incorrect word choices (e.g., “Measurement is biology”, “obsessed”) with precise phrases. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding a reason.

Example: I'm a biology student at Oxford University. I chose biology because I'm fascinated by how living systems work, and I want to pursue research in genetics.

Suggestion: Use correct grammar and more natural expressions. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct collocations (e.g., “part-time job”, “shifts”), and link to details about times and commute with linking words (e.g., “usually”, “then”). Keep it concise and avoid repetitive phrases.

Example: I have a part-time job at a cafeteria near my university. I usually work morning shifts, which take me about 30 minutes to get there, and after my shift I go home to study.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and use precise reasons. Give one topic sentence stating your opinion, then one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “because”, “so”). Replace vague phrases like “financial balance” with “to support my expenses”.

Example: Yes, it's a great place to work because the hours are flexible, which suits my studies, and the pay helps me cover my living expenses.

Suggestion: Answer directly rather than starting with “Because.” Use correct grammar (singular/plural) and avoid vague words like “almost good.” Provide specific examples of what you like about the place and use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I like working there. The café has a pleasant atmosphere, the décor is nice, and the manager and staff are friendly, which makes the job enjoyable.

Suggestion: Be concise and use correct terminology and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence about your career goal, then explain current studies and planned steps using linking words (e.g., “currently”, “so I plan to”). Use correct phrases like “machine learning”, “gain practical experience”, “internships”, and clarify timeline.

Example: I plan to become an artificial intelligence engineer. I'm currently studying machine learning and will seek internships to gain practical experience so I can work as an AI engineer at a tech company in the next few years.

× Umm, a student of Oxford University.

✓ Umm, I am a student at Oxford University.

Missing subject and auxiliary verb; 'a student of Oxford University' is a noun phrase, not a complete sentence. Use subject 'I' and appropriate verb 'am'. Use preposition 'at' for institutions. Suggestion: always include subject and verb and use 'at' with universities.

× Measurement is biology.

✓ My major is biology.

'Measurement' is incorrect word choice and construction. Use 'major' to describe field of study. 'is biology' needs a possessive determiner 'My' to indicate the student's major. Suggestion: say 'My major is biology' or 'I study biology'.

× I choose this field because I'm very obsessed in this subject, Uh.

✓ I chose this field because I'm very interested in this subject.

Tense and word choice errors: 'choose' should be past 'chose' if referring to a past decision; 'obsessed in' is incorrect collocation — use 'obsessed with' or better 'interested in'. Also remove filler 'Uh'. Suggestion: use 'interested in' or 'passionate about' for natural phrasing.

× I work part time job in a cafeteria near my university.

✓ I work a part-time job in a cafeteria near my university.

Missing article and hyphenation: use 'a part-time job'. Alternatively say 'I work part time at a cafeteria'. Include article 'a' and hyphenate 'part-time' when used as adjective.

× My ships are usually in the morning and it makes me about 30 minutes to get here.

✓ My shifts are usually in the morning and it takes me about 30 minutes to get here.

Multiple errors: 'ships' is a typo for 'shifts'. Use plural 'shifts'. 'It makes me' is incorrect; use 'it takes me' to express time required. Suggestion: check typos and use 'take' for duration expressions.

× I finished my shift and then I go home to study.

✓ I finish my shift and then I go home to study.

Tense inconsistency: speaker describes routine, so use simple present 'finish' rather than past 'finished'. Maintain present tense for habitual actions. Suggestion: use consistent tense for routines.

× Yeah, of course, it's really a good place and it's a very comfortable for me because I'm a student.

✓ Yeah, of course, it's really a good place and it's very comfortable for me because I'm a student.

Extra article 'a' before 'very comfortable' is incorrect; 'comfortable' is an adjective describing 'it', so do not use 'a'. Also repetition can be reduced. Suggestion: remove the extra article and avoid redundancy.

× So it's very comfortable and very helpful for me for my financial balance.

✓ So it's very comfortable and very helpful for my finances.

'For my financial balance' is awkward; use 'for my finances' or 'for my financial situation'. Also avoid repeating 'for me'. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'helpful for my finances'.

× Because this place is very beautiful and a beautiful atmosphere.

✓ Because this place is very beautiful and has a pleasant atmosphere.

Sentence fragment and repetition: 'Because' starts a dependent clause and needs completion; 'a beautiful atmosphere' duplicates 'beautiful'. Use 'has a pleasant atmosphere' to complete the idea. Suggestion: avoid starting answers with 'Because' unless you complete the clause.

× Umm, the boss are very, uh, friendly and it's almost good.

✓ Umm, the boss is very friendly and it's pretty good.

Subject-verb agreement: 'boss' is singular, so use 'is' not 'are'. 'Almost good' is unnatural; use 'pretty good'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject number and choose natural adverb.

× My future plan is to work as an Artificial Intelligence engineer.

✓ My future plan is to work as an artificial intelligence engineer.

Capitalization: 'Artificial Intelligence' need not be capitalized in a general job title; not a grammar category but stylistic. Sentence itself is acceptable; changed capitalization for style. Suggestion: use lowercase for fields unless proper noun.

× I am studying advancement the machines learning now and I am plan to gain participate experience through internships so that I can become an AI officer in a teach company in the next few.

✓ I am studying advanced machine learning now and I plan to gain practical experience through internships so that I can become an AI engineer at a tech company in the next few years.

Multiple errors: 'advancement the machines learning' is incorrect word order and choice — use 'advanced machine learning'. 'I am plan' should be 'I plan' or 'I am planning'. 'gain participate experience' should be 'gain practical experience'. 'AI officer' is incorrect; 'AI engineer' is natural. 'teach company' should be 'tech company'. 'in the next few' incomplete — add 'years'. Suggestion: simplify phrases, use correct collocations, and ensure completeness.