Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use a clear structure: start with a direct statement (topic sentence) and then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct tense and word choice (e.g. "majoring" or "I majored in") and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like "because" correctly to connect reason. Keep it to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

Example: I am a university student majoring in Sports and Recreation Studies. I have already completed an associate degree, so I hope to continue with a bachelor’s degree at Hong Kong Baptist University or the Chinese University of Hong Kong because they have strong sports programs.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "I work part-time as a skipping coach"). Then give one or two specific details using linking words (e.g., "because", "and") and avoid repetition. Correct grammar ("I teach students how to skip rope"), and avoid hesitation or filler words. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I work part-time as a skipping-rope instructor for children. I enjoy it because I can teach techniques and share my own experiences, and I feel proud when my students improve.

Suggestion: Start with a clear opinion (Yes/No + reason), then give one or two specific supporting points with correct vocabulary. Avoid unclear words like "roadskeeping" or "ferry"—use "skip-rope teaching" and "salary" if relevant. Use linking words ("because", "and", "so") to connect ideas. Keep it under 3 sentences.

Example: Yes, it's a good place to work because the pay is reasonable and I enjoy teaching skip-rope. I also learn a lot from my students and colleagues, which helps me improve as an instructor.

Suggestion: Give a direct reply then add one or two clear, specific reasons. Avoid vague or repeated phrases and correct collocations (e.g., "I feel relaxed there", "I can share my experiences"). Keep sentences short and coherent and use linking words like "because" or "so".

Example: Yes, I like working there because the atmosphere is relaxed and supportive. I can share my experiences freely with students and teach in a way that helps them learn.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your plan, then give one or two specific reasons or relevant background. Use correct grammar ("I plan to become a physical education teacher"), use linking words such as "because" or "because of", and provide specific examples of experience. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I plan to become a physical education teacher because I am an athlete and I have extensive practical experience in several sports. With my degree in Sports and Recreation Studies, I want to share my skills and inspire students to stay active.

× I am a student in university and I majored in sports and recreation studies and because I'm already finished my association degree and I'm prefer to have a degree in Hong Kong Baptist University or the Chinese University of Hong Kong to study sport.

✓ I am a university student. I majored in sports and recreation studies. I have already finished my associate degree and I would like to pursue a degree in sports at Hong Kong Baptist University or The Chinese University of Hong Kong.

This sentence contains multiple sentence structure and tense issues (Grammar problem type ID 26 and 6). It mixes present and past forms incorrectly and runs several ideas together without proper punctuation. Use separate sentences for clarity, change 'majored' to simple past for completed study, use 'have already finished' for completed action with present relevance, and replace 'I'm prefer' with 'I would like' to express preference. Also 'association degree' should be 'associate degree' and 'study sport' should be 'pursue a degree in sports'.

× Actually I have a part time about teaching students to learn how to skipping and I think it is a meaningful job because I like to teaching others how to learn rolls skipping and sharing my own experience to other and if they succeed I will fake I will feel I'm so proud of them.

✓ Actually I have a part-time job teaching students how to skip rope. I think it is a meaningful job because I enjoy teaching others how to do rope tricks and sharing my own experience with them. If they succeed, I feel very proud of them.

This contains sentence structure errors and incorrect verb forms (IDs 26 and 8). 'Part time' should be 'part-time job'. 'Teaching students to learn how to skipping' is incorrect: use 'teaching students how to skip rope'. 'I like to teaching' should be 'I enjoy teaching' (verb + -ing). 'Rolls skipping' is unclear; 'rope tricks' or 'skipping tricks' is better. Remove 'fake I will' which is meaningless; use 'I feel very proud of them'.

× Yes, definitely the salary is high for teaching roadskeeping and I enjoy the job instead of it has a high ferry and I can learn many experiences from others and learning the experience from the students, how can I improve myself. So I think it is very meaningful.

✓ Yes, definitely the pay for teaching rope skipping is good and I enjoy the job. It also offers many learning opportunities from others and from my students, which helps me improve myself. So I think it is very meaningful.

This has incorrect prepositions and vocabulary (ID 11) and sentence structure problems. 'Salary is high for teaching roadskeeping' is unclear: 'pay for teaching rope skipping' is correct. 'Instead of it has a high ferry' is incorrect word choice and preposition; likely meant 'also it has a high fee' or 'it pays well' — corrected to 'the pay... is good'. Use 'offers learning opportunities from others and from my students' and connect ideas with relative clause 'which helps me improve myself.'

× Yes, definitely yes. The place makes me feel relaxed and I can do anything what I want and I tell anything what I want to my students and I can share my own experience and teaching them what I learned before and sharing my own experience today to make them feel oh, my teacher is.

✓ Yes, definitely. The place makes me feel relaxed and I can do what I want. I can tell my students anything I want and share my experiences, teaching them what I have learned before and what I learned today so they feel connected to me as their teacher.

Problems include incorrect pronoun and relative clause usage (ID 12) and sentence structure errors. Use 'do what I want' not 'do anything what I want'. 'I tell anything what I want to my students' should be 'I can tell my students anything I want'. Use present perfect 'what I have learned' when referring to prior experience. Clarify final phrase to express students' feelings: 'so they feel connected to me as their teacher.'

× Actually my future work plan is being a physical education teacher as I am an athlete so I have a lot of experience about my sport and also my major is sport and I have many practical experience about different sport. So I want to share my experience to other.

✓ My future career plan is to become a physical education teacher. As an athlete with a major in sports, I have a lot of experience in my sport and practical experience in different sports. Therefore, I want to share my experience with others.

This original contains sentence structure errors and incorrect prepositions (IDs 26 and 11). 'My future work plan is being' should be 'My future career plan is to become'. Use 'major in sports' not 'my major is sport'. Use plural 'sports' and 'practical experience' (singular or 'many practical experiences'). Use 'share my experience with others' not 'to other'. The corrections fix verb form and preposition use and improve clarity.