Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct small grammar slips (e.g., "take my taking my time"). Use linking words to connect reasons (e.g., "because", "also").

Example: Yes, I love shopping because choosing new items makes me feel happy and satisfied. For example, when I’m in a good mood I like to go to the mall and spend time selecting clothes or small home decorations that fit my style.

Suggestion: Clarify and avoid mixed pronouns and awkward phrasing (e.g., "you save my money"). Use one or two concise reasons and a short example. Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" for coherence.

Example: Yes, I always compare prices because I want good value for money. For instance, if two stores sell the same item at different prices, I usually choose the cheaper one, so I can save money for other things.

Suggestion: Remove filler words (e.g., "Uh") and tighten sentences. Use clearer linking between reasons and consequence (e.g., "because... so..."). Be specific about what confuses you to strengthen the response.

Example: Yes, I often find it difficult to choose because I like many different products and compare their quality, colour and style, which confuses me. Therefore, I usually ask friends or family for opinions before deciding.

Suggestion: Fix word choice and grammar (e.g., "expressive" -> "expensive", "which means them more durable" -> "making them more durable"). Begin with a clear stance, give one strong reason, then contrast with an exception using a linking word like "however".

Example: I don’t think expensive products are always better, but they are often of higher quality because they use better materials and craftsmanship, making them more durable. However, some cheaper items can offer excellent value, so it depends on the brand and the specific product.

× I love shopping because buying things, buying new things makes me feel happy and also satisfied.

✓ I love shopping because buying new things makes me feel happy and satisfied.

Unnecessary repetition and punctuation: the phrase 'buying things, buying new things' is redundant. Use a single gerund phrase 'buying new things' to act as the subject/complement. This fixes clarity and maintains correct verb + -ing form.

× When I'm in a good mood, I enjoy going to the mall and take my taking my time to choose items that I really like such as clothes or small home decorations.

✓ When I'm in a good mood, I enjoy going to the mall and taking my time to choose items that I really like, such as clothes or small home decorations.

Parallel structure and participle use: 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund ('going' and 'taking') for parallelism. The phrase had duplication 'take my taking my' and wrong verb form 'take' after 'enjoy'. Use 'taking' and add a comma before 'such as' for clarity.

× I always compare prices where I shop because I want to get good value of money.

✓ I always compare prices where I shop because I want to get good value for money.

Incorrect preposition/quantifier phrase: The correct idiomatic expression is 'good value for money', not 'good value of money'. Replace 'of' with 'for'. (This matches quantifier/preposition usage.)

× If two shops sell the same products at a different price, I usually buy the cheaper one because they make me feel more satisfied and you save my money.

✓ If two shops sell the same products at different prices, I usually buy the cheaper one because it makes me feel more satisfied and helps me save money.

Subject-verb and pronoun agreement and pluralization: 'at a different price' should be plural 'at different prices' since two shops imply multiple prices. 'They make me feel' is mismatched: 'the cheaper one' is singular, so use 'it makes me feel'. 'You save my money' is incorrect pronoun and construction; 'helps me save money' correctly expresses the intended meaning.

× I often find it difficult to choose when I shop because I like many different kinds of products and I compare the quality, colour and style which confuse me.

✓ I often find it difficult to choose when I shop because I like many different kinds of products and I compare the quality, colour, and style, which confuse me.

Tense is OK; main issue is relative clause agreement and punctuation: the list needs commas and the clause 'which confuse me' refers to 'quality, colour, and style' (plural), so 'confuse' is correct. Add a serial comma and a comma before 'which' to separate the relative clause. Alternatively, for clarity, change 'which confuse me' to 'and that confuses me' if referring to the overall comparison.

× So I usually ask my friend and my family for their opinion before I decide.

✓ So I usually ask my friend and my family for their opinions before I decide.

Agreement in number and pronoun reference: 'friend and my family' implies multiple people, so 'their opinions' (plural) is more natural. 'Opinion' singular could be used if referring to a single collective view, but plural is better here.

× I think expressive products are often better than the cheaper ones because they usually use high quality material and have a better craftsmanship which means them more durable.

✓ I think expensive products are often better than cheaper ones because they usually use high-quality materials and have better craftsmanship, which makes them more durable.

Word choice and adjective/adverb forms: 'expressive' is incorrect word choice; should be 'expensive'. 'High quality' as a compound adjective needs a hyphen before a noun ('high-quality materials') and 'material' should be plural 'materials'. 'Have a better craftsmanship' is incorrect; 'have better craftsmanship' or 'are better crafted'. The relative clause must be 'which makes them more durable' (not 'which means them more durable').

× However, some cheaper products can offer better value of money.

✓ However, some cheaper products can offer better value for money.

Incorrect preposition/idiomatic phrase: Again use the idiomatic expression 'value for money', not 'value of money'. This fixes the article/preposition misuse.

× So it really depends on the brand and also specific item.

✓ So it really depends on the brand and the specific item.

Parallel structure and article use: 'brand and also specific item' is unbalanced. Use parallel nouns with appropriate articles: 'the brand and the specific item' or 'the brand and specific items'. This corrects sentence structure for clarity.