Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and some grammatical errors (e.g., 'lessen' -> 'reduces', 'whenever I don't have something to do' -> 'when I have free time').

Example: Yes, I enjoy shopping. For example, when I have free time and some spare cash, I like to visit local markets because browsing new items relaxes me and reduces my stress.

Suggestion: Improve clarity and grammar, and be specific: give one clear reason and a brief example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' for coherence, and correct tense/word forms (e.g., 'I value money', 'hard-earned').

Example: Yes, I compare prices because I am a student with limited income. For instance, I often check online and in-store prices so I can choose the most affordable option and save money for my studies.

Suggestion: Organize your answer: start with a direct statement, then give a concise reason and one specific example. Avoid redundant phrases and correct small grammatical slips (e.g., 'which is better, whether the one or the another' -> 'which option is better').

Example: Yes, I find it hard to decide when shopping because I'm naturally indecisive. For example, I often ask my mother which item looks better before buying, because I value her opinion and want to avoid regretting my choice.

Suggestion: Avoid absolute statements and support your view with balanced reasoning and examples. Use hedging language (e.g., 'often' or 'generally') and correct grammar ('expensive products often involve more careful material selection', 'they wouldn't charge more if the quality were poor').

Example: Not always, but often expensive products are better because manufacturers usually use higher-quality materials and stricter quality control. For example, a costly winter coat may last longer and keep you warmer than a cheap one, though some mid-priced items can still offer good value.

× Yes, I really do like shopping and I would say that it is one of my favorite pastimes since whenever I don't have something to do or like I don't have things to do in my schedule, I usually go shopping especially when I have money since I really enjoy it and it really lessen the stress that I have.

✓ Yes, I really like shopping and I would say that it is one of my favorite pastimes, because whenever I don't have anything to do in my schedule, I usually go shopping, especially when I have money, since I really enjoy it and it really lessens the stress I have.

Errors: redundancy and incorrect verb form 'lessen' for third-person singular subject 'it'. Use present simple 'like' instead of 'do like' for natural speech. Replace 'something to do or like I don't have things to do' with 'anything to do' to avoid redundancy. Use 'lessens' because the singular subject 'it' requires third-person singular verb. Use commas to clarify sentence structure and remove unnecessary words for fluency and correctness.

× Yes, I do compare prices from time to time, especially now that I'm a student and I don't have a stable income. And of course I valued the money since most of my the money that I have is from my parents and those are hard earned monies and I really do value that.

✓ Yes, I compare prices from time to time, especially now that I'm a student and I don't have a stable income. Of course I value the money because most of the money I have is from my parents and it is hard-earned, so I really do value it.

Errors: tense and pronoun misuse. Change 'do compare' to 'compare' for natural present simple. 'Valued' is past tense while context requires present 'value'. Remove extra 'the' in 'most of my the money'. Replace 'those are hard earned monies' with 'it is hard-earned' and refer back with pronoun 'it' to avoid pluralization error. Combine sentences for clarity and correct noun usage (use 'money' uncountable, not 'monies').

× I would say yes because as a person I'm really indecisive when it comes to making choices. And that also applies whenever I do shopping because I always ask my mom if which is better, whether the one or the another, and I really value the opinions of others when it comes to that.

✓ I would say yes because I'm really indecisive when it comes to making choices. This also applies when I go shopping because I always ask my mom which one is better, and I really value other people's opinions on that.

Errors: conjunction and clause structure. Remove redundant 'as a person' and join ideas smoothly. 'Whenever I do shopping' is unnatural; use 'when I go shopping'. 'Ask my mom if which is better, whether the one or the another' is ungrammatical; correct to 'ask my mom which one is better'. Use 'other people's opinions' instead of 'the opinions of others' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I do think that expensive products are always better than the cheaper ones because firstly, expensive products really exerts effort when it comes to choosing the fabric and the things they use to create the product. Secondly, they wouldn't price it higher if the quality is bad.

✓ No, I don't think expensive products are always better than cheaper ones, but some may be because manufacturers often put more effort into choosing fabrics and materials to make higher-quality products. Also, companies usually would not price items higher if the quality were poor.

Errors: incorrect quantifier/absolute 'always' used without justification and subject-verb agreement 'exerts' with plural subject 'products'. 'Exerts effort' should refer to manufacturers, not products. Corrected sentence adjusts stance to sound more reasonable and fixes verb agreement ('manufacturers put' or 'companies would not... if the quality were poor'). Use conditional 'were' in the contrary-to-fact clause and avoid 'the cheaper ones' redundancy.