Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Correct grammar and make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy (e.g., "I do am"), and limit to around 3–4 sentences. Add a linking word to connect the reason and an example. Replace casual fillers like "you know" with more precise language.

Example: Yes, I enjoy shopping, especially for clothes. In the past two years I have bought over 20 dresses because I like trying new styles. For example, I often browse shopping apps when I have free time, which helps me relax and discover good deals.

Suggestion: Fix minor grammar and make linking clearer. Use a clear topic sentence and a logical connector (e.g., "because" → "because I'm on a tight budget"). Be slightly more specific about how you compare prices (apps, websites, or stores). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I always compare prices because I'm on a tight budget and want to avoid overspending. I usually check several online retailers and use price-comparison apps, and if I find something affordable and practical I feel satisfied.

Suggestion: Improve grammar, clarity and vocabulary. Avoid repetition and unclear words (e.g., "online refuse", "design de decision"). Use linking words like "because" or "when", and give a specific example of what you compare (price, quality, reviews). Keep to 3–4 clear sentences.

Example: Yes, I often find it difficult to choose, especially when comparing familiar products with new ones. Because of that, I spend a lot of time checking prices, product quality and online reviews before making a final decision. For instance, when buying a new pair of shoes I read customer reviews and compare materials and prices.

Suggestion: Soften absolute claims and add nuance. Avoid fillers and provide a balanced view with linking words like "however" or "generally" and a brief example. Use more formal phrasing in part of the answer.

Example: Generally I think more expensive products can be better because they often use higher-quality materials and last longer. However, this is not always true, so I usually read reviews and compare warranties before paying more, which can save money over time.

× Yes, I do am kind of a shopaholic and I'm particularly into buying clothes.

✓ Yes, I am kind of a shopaholic and I'm particularly into buying clothes.

The sentence incorrectly uses two auxiliaries 'do' and 'am' together ('I do am'), which is ungrammatical in English. Use a single appropriate auxiliary or the main verb. Here the correct form is the present simple continuous 'I am kind of a shopaholic'. Suggestion: avoid adding 'do' when the verb 'be' is used as the main verb.

× It's often hard for me to make choice when I am choosing between products I usually buy and completely new ones.

✓ It's often hard for me to make a choice when I am choosing between products I usually buy and completely new ones.

The noun 'choice' needs an article when singular. Use 'a choice' for one decision. Suggestion: use 'a' before singular, countable nouns when referring to one item or instance.

× So I spend a lot of time comparing deal prices, quality and online refuse before making a final design de decision.

✓ So I spend a lot of time comparing deal prices, quality and online reviews before making a final decision.

The word 'refuse' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'reviews'. Also 'design de decision' appears to be a typo and should be 'decision'. Ensure correct nouns are used: 'reviews' (plural) matches 'online' and 'decision' is the correct noun. Suggestion: proofread for typos and choose appropriate countable/uncountable nouns.

× You know, it will save your money in the long term.

✓ You know, it will save you money in the long term.

The phrase 'save your money' is awkward; English uses 'save you money' to indicate something will reduce costs for someone. 'Save your money' can mean 'keep your money' but isn't idiomatic here. Suggestion: use the structure 'save someone money' to express cost savings.

× Yeah, it's mainly because that I am on a tight budget nowadays, so I need to find things that I can actually afford.

✓ Yeah, it's mainly because I am on a tight budget nowadays, so I need to find things that I can actually afford.

Using 'because that' is incorrect; 'because' should be followed by a clause without 'that' in this context. Remove the extra 'that'. Suggestion: use 'because' + clause (because I am...) or 'the reason is that...' if you want to use 'that'.

× In fact, over the past two years, I've probably bought more than 20 dresses.

✓ In fact, over the past two years I've probably bought more than 20 dresses.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but the comma after 'years' is optional; keep it or remove for smoother flow. No major grammatical error beyond punctuation preference. Suggestion: keep as 'In fact, over the past two years I've probably bought more than 20 dresses.'

× So I spend a lot of time comparing deal prices, quality and online refuse before making a final design de decision.

✓ So I spend a lot of time comparing deal prices, quality and online reviews before making a final decision.

Also ensure parallelism: 'deal prices, quality and online reviews' are parallel items. Remove repeated suggestion duplicates and correct typos. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure in lists and correct spelling errors.