Shopping— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because / and / also). Avoid repetitions and long run-on sentences. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., decorations, snacks, bubble tea) and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I enjoy shopping because it helps me relax and choose things I like. For example, I often buy home decorations and small gifts, and I also enjoy trying snacks or a bubble tea while I browse.

Suggestion: Organize your response: give a clear topic sentence, then a specific example with a linking phrase such as “for example” or “for instance.” Reduce filler words (umm, uh) and correct grammar (shops charge different amounts). Use precise phrases like “cheaper” and quantify differences if possible.

Example: Yes, I usually compare prices because shops often charge different amounts. For instance, when I buy skincare, I check Watsons and Guardian, and one store can be significantly cheaper, so I choose the more affordable option to save money.

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a direct statement, then give a specific explanation using linking words such as “because” or “so.” Use correct vocabulary (clothes, try them on) and remove duplicated words.

Example: I usually don't find it difficult to choose when shopping because I try on clothes to see what fits me best. If something fits well and looks good, I buy it; otherwise I move on to other options.

Suggestion: Give a balanced opinion with a clear topic sentence and one supporting example. Use correct grammar (products/ones, more comfortable) and avoid vague terms. Use linking words like “however” or “for example” to make your argument coherent.

Example: I think expensive products are not always better, but they can offer higher quality. For example, I once bought an expensive pair of shoes for about 1000 ringgit and they were much more comfortable and durable than the cheaper ones I had tried.

× Yes I do enjoy shopping because when I'm shopping I feel relieved because I can choose the clothes or I like to shop for the things that I like, like the decorations thing and beside this I also like to when I go shopping I also will find some good food or good drink like a milk tea that make me feel more happy so I enjoy shopping.

✓ Yes, I enjoy shopping because when I'm shopping I feel relaxed; I can choose clothes or buy things I like, such as decoration items. Besides, when I go shopping I often find good food or drinks like milk tea, which makes me happier, so I enjoy shopping.

The original sentence has awkward verb+ -ing use and repetitive phrasing. 'I do enjoy shopping' is acceptable but overly emphatic; 'feel relieved' is odd in this context so 'feel relaxed' is better. 'The clothes' should be 'clothes' (general noun). 'Decorations thing' is incorrect noun phrase — use 'decoration items.' 'Beside this' is incorrect preposition/phrase; use 'Besides.' 'I also like to when I go shopping I also will find' mixes structures; use 'when I go shopping I often find.' 'Make me feel more happy' should be 'makes me happier' (adjective comparative). Break into clearer clauses to improve readability.

× Yes, I usually compare prices because different shop offer different charge charge different amount.

✓ Yes, I usually compare prices because different shops charge different amounts.

Errors: 'shop' should be plural 'shops' to match 'different'; this is a singular/plural issue and quantifier context. 'Offer different charge charge different amount' is ungrammatical — use the verb 'charge' and plural 'amounts' to agree with 'shops.' Remove duplication. The corrected sentence uses plural nouns and the correct verb form.

× For example, when I buy a skin care product, I will often check the price at the Watson and Guardian.

✓ For example, when I buy a skincare product, I often check the price at Watsons and Guardian.

Minor issues: 'I will often check' is acceptable but present simple 'I often check' fits habitual action better. 'The Watson and Guardian' incorrectly uses the definite article and singular forms; brand/store names: 'Watsons' is the common name, and no 'the' is needed. Also 'skin care' is commonly written 'skincare' as a compound noun.

× And interestingly, umm, if one is, there will be one uh, more cheaper than the others.

✓ Interestingly, sometimes one store will be cheaper than the others.

The original is disfluent and ungrammatical: filler words 'umm' and 'uh' should be removed in writing. 'If one is, there will be one ... more cheaper' is incorrect structure and 'more cheaper' is a double comparative. Use 'cheaper' alone. The corrected sentence is concise and grammatically correct.

× And because I want to save money and the price difference is sometimes quite a bit like different.

✓ Because I want to save money, and the price differences are sometimes quite large.

Problems: 'the price difference is sometimes quite a bit like different' is ungrammatical. 'Quite a bit' is colloquial and needs a measure; 'price differences are sometimes quite large' is clearer. Use plural 'differences' when speaking of various shops, and avoid redundant filler 'like different.'

× For me, actually I don't really have much difficulty when I shop.

✓ For me, I don't really have much difficulty when I shop.

Remove unnecessary adverb 'actually' for clarity; not a strict grammar error but improves naturalness. Sentence is otherwise correct.

× For example, if I shop for a cloth, I will I will definitely choose like a a wide range of the clothes and then I will just go to try it and I can easily make a choice after I try it because I can see which fits me the best or which suit me the best.

✓ For example, if I shop for clothes, I will choose from a wide range and try them on; then I can easily make a choice because I can see which fits me best or suits me best.

'A cloth' is incorrect when referring to clothing items; use plural 'clothes.' Remove repeated 'I will.' 'Choose like a a wide range of the clothes' is ungrammatical — use 'choose from a wide range.' 'Go to try it' should be 'try them on.' 'Which fits me the best or which suit me the best' has subject-verb agreement: use 'fits' for 'which' referring to a singular item, or rephrase consistently; 'fits me best' or 'suits me best' suffices. Remove redundant 'the' and 'a' duplicates.

× I would say expensive product are not always better than cheaper one but most of them will be better than cheaper 1.

✓ I would say expensive products are not always better than cheaper ones, but many of them are better than cheaper ones.

Plural/singular mismatch: use 'products' and 'ones.' 'Cheaper 1' is incorrect; use 'ones.' 'Most of them will be better' is awkward — 'many of them are better' is more natural. Ensure nouns and pronouns agree in number.

× So for example I have the experience of buying a an expensive shoe which is the settlement which cost around like 1000 ringgit compared to the cheaper shoe where I used before it was the settlement shoe was definitely a have a better quality than the cheaper 1 is more comfort.

✓ For example, I once bought an expensive pair of shoes that cost around 1000 ringgit. Compared to the cheaper shoes I used to have, the expensive pair definitely had better quality and was more comfortable.

This sentence has many structural problems: duplicate articles ('a an'), incorrect noun forms ('shoe' vs 'pair of shoes'), incorrect relative clauses ('which is the settlement' unclear — removed), tense consistency ('cost' -> 'cost' or 'costs' but past event 'cost' is fine), and agreement ('was definitely a have a better quality' is ungrammatical). Use 'pair of shoes' and past tense 'had' for a past experience. 'More comfortable' is the correct comparative adjective.