Party— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như "adroit" và nên thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn về cảm xúc hoặc trải nghiệm của bạn khi tham gia tiệc.

Example: Yes, I like parties very much. When I was a child, my mom often organized birthday parties for me and my family. I enjoyed these occasions because they were a chance to meet relatives and have fun together.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt, có cấu trúc rõ ràng và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp. Tuy nhiên, bạn có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng thêm liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

Example: I used to have parties occasionally when I was a kid, mainly on special occasions such as birthdays and holidays. For instance, my family would organize gatherings with close friends and relatives a few times a year, which made those moments very memorable and exciting.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn chưa tập trung vào câu hỏi và có phần lạc đề khi nói về ước mơ trở thành nhà phát minh. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, giải thích lý do chưa tổ chức tiệc và có thể nói về kế hoạch trong tương lai một cách liên quan hơn.

Example: No, I have never organized a party because my family usually takes care of that. However, I hope to organize one myself in the future to celebrate special occasions with my friends and family.

× Yes, I do love parties when I was adroit, my mom has celebrated a lot of parties for me when it was my birthdays or, uh, some special days in my family.

✓ Yes, I loved parties when I was young, my mom celebrated a lot of parties for me on my birthdays or some special days in my family.

The sentence mixes present tense 'do love' with past time reference 'when I was'. The verb tense should be consistent with the past time frame, so 'do love' should be changed to 'loved'. Also, 'has celebrated' is present perfect which is not appropriate for a finished past action; it should be simple past 'celebrated'. 'Adroit' is incorrectly used; the correct word is 'young' or 'child' to indicate age.

× And I think that it is an occasion that people gathered and saying about their.

✓ And I think that it is an occasion when people gather and talk about their lives.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun use and incomplete phrase 'saying about their'. The verb 'gathered' is past tense but the sentence refers to a general occasion, so present tense 'gather' is better. Also, 'saying about their' is incorrect; it should be 'talk about their lives' or 'share about themselves'.

× I used to have parties quite occasionally when I was a kid, mostly on special occasions like birthdays or holidays.

✓ I used to have parties quite occasionally when I was a kid, mostly on special occasions like birthdays or holidays.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the past tense context, so no correction is needed.

× No, I haven't because most of my parties were celebrated by my mom and my family, so I don't have.

✓ No, I haven't because most of my parties were organized by my mom and my family, so I haven't.

The phrase 'so I don't have' is incomplete and incorrect in this context. It should be 'so I haven't' to indicate that the speaker has not organized parties. Also, 'celebrated by' is better replaced with 'organized by' to indicate who arranged the parties.

× I have never tried to do that and I hope that in the future I can do it because my dream is to become an inventor.

✓ I have never tried to do that, but I hope that in the future I will be able to because my dream is to become an inventor.

The sentence mixes present and future tenses. 'I hope that in the future I can do it' is better expressed as 'I hope that in the future I will be able to' to clearly indicate future ability. Adding 'but' improves sentence flow.