Party— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and unclear phrases like 'A1 per one place particularly'. Try to use more natural expressions and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I enjoy parties because they bring people together to celebrate special occasions. For instance, at birthday parties, my family and friends gather to have fun and share happiness. These events create a warm and joyful atmosphere that everyone appreciates.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit confusing and lengthy. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid grammatical errors. Keep your sentences simple and natural.

Example: When I was a kid, we usually had one big birthday party each year to celebrate all the birthdays together. It was a special day where family and friends gathered to enjoy quality time and have fun.

Suggestion: Your answer has good content but contains some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'mother and mother' and 'enjoyed by the'. Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details, and use appropriate linking words. Also, avoid repetition and keep your answer concise.

Example: Yes, I have organized a party for my parents' 25th wedding anniversary. We celebrated in a garden and invited their family and friends. Everyone enjoyed the event, and it was a memorable occasion for all of us.

× For example, birthday parties where my family friends come together and celebrate birthdays.

✓ For example, birthday parties where my family and friends come together and celebrate birthdays.

The phrase 'family friends' is incorrect here; it should be 'family and friends' to indicate two separate groups. This is a singular and plural issue as 'family friends' implies a single group of friends related to family, which is not the intended meaning.

× So it really attracts each and every person to A1 per one place particularly.

✓ So it really attracts each and every person to one place in particular.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unclear phrasing. 'A1 per one place particularly' is not grammatically correct. The corrected sentence uses proper word order and clearer expression.

× We had a birthday celebration in a year where each and every person who had their birthdays we could celebrate in a year a single day and also we had could enjoy with family, friends spending a good quality time to each other.

✓ We had a birthday celebration once a year where each and every person who had a birthday could celebrate on a single day, and we could also enjoy spending quality time with family and friends.

The original sentence has multiple singular/plural issues and awkward phrasing. 'Birthdays' should be singular when referring to each person's birthday. 'Had could enjoy' is incorrect verb usage. The correction fixes singular/plural forms and improves sentence clarity.

× We have organized a party for my mother and mother, anniversary of 25th anniversary.

✓ We organized a party for my mother on her 25th anniversary.

The original sentence incorrectly uses present perfect tense 'have organized' when simple past 'organized' is appropriate. Also, 'and mother, anniversary of 25th anniversary' is redundant and unclear. The correction simplifies and uses correct past tense.

× We celebrated in a garden where we had invited family and friends of father and mother and we really enjoyed by the.

✓ We celebrated in a garden where we had invited family and friends of my father and mother, and we really enjoyed ourselves.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incomplete ending 'enjoyed by the.' The correction completes the sentence properly and improves clarity and grammar.