Stories— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: In your answer, try to use more natural phrasing and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of saying "I absolutely adore to sit down and listen to every story," you can say "I absolutely loved listening to stories." Also, avoid repeating "sit down" twice. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Example: Yes, I absolutely loved listening to stories during my childhood. At school, we often gathered to hear tales about various fantasies, which I found very fascinating.

Suggestion: Try to avoid starting multiple sentences with "But" and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, clarify your points more directly and avoid vague phrases like "it's basically the same thing."

Example: When I was young, I preferred listening to stories rather than reading them. However, as I grew older, I developed a love for reading books. Sometimes, I also enjoy listening to audiobooks to experience stories in a different way.

Suggestion: Avoid repeating "I used to" multiple times. Use varied sentence structures and linking words to make your answer more fluent and natural. Also, be more specific about what you wrote.

Example: Yes, I was very inspired by the stories I read and listened to as a child. I often pretended to be a writer and wrote my own stories, mainly focusing on romance and mystery genres.

Suggestion: Try to use clearer sentence structures and avoid awkward phrasing like "Even the plot and also once with the plot twists." Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about why you like those stories.

Example: Personally, I love romance stories, especially those that include mystery elements. The engaging plots and unexpected twists make them very interesting to me.

× Yes, I absolutely adore to sit down and listen to every story.

✓ Yes, I absolutely adore sitting down and listening to every story.

The verb 'adore' is followed by a gerund (-ing form) rather than an infinitive. Therefore, 'adore to sit' is incorrect; it should be 'adore sitting'. This is a common pattern in English where certain verbs are followed by gerunds.

× In my young age, I remember particularly in my school, we used to sit down and just listen to stories about different kinds of fantasies.

✓ In my youth, I particularly remember at school, we used to sit down and just listen to stories about different kinds of fantasies.

The phrase 'in my young age' is unnatural; 'in my youth' is the correct expression. Also, 'particularly in my school' is better expressed as 'particularly at school' to indicate location. Prepositions must be chosen carefully to convey the correct meaning.

× I used to sit down and pretend that I was also a writer myself, and I used to write about many romance books, mystery books and all of that.

✓ I used to sit down and pretend that I was also a writer myself, and I used to write many romance and mystery stories and all of that.

The phrase 'write about many romance books' is incorrect because one writes stories or books, not about them. Also, 'romance books, mystery books' can be simplified to 'romance and mystery stories'. This improves clarity and correctness.

× Me personally I loved romance, especially the ones with mystery in them.

✓ Personally, I loved romance, especially the ones with mystery in them.

Starting a sentence with 'Me personally' is incorrect because 'me' is an object pronoun and cannot be used as the subject. The correct subject pronoun is 'I', but here 'Personally' alone suffices to express the idea.

× Even the plot and also once with the plot twists they were really interesting for me.

✓ Even the plot and the plot twists were really interesting to me.

The phrase 'once with the plot twists' is unclear and incorrect. Also, 'interesting for me' should be 'interesting to me'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper pronoun and preposition use.