Watch— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct vocabulary (analogous → analogue/analogue watch), and refer to the watch with correct pronouns. Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word.

Example: Yes, I wear a watch. It is a Casio digital watch, and I find it very comfortable, so I wear it whenever I go out. Because it is digital, it helps me check the time quickly, which saves me time when I am busy.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct past/present tense and vocabulary (board → watch). Avoid vague phrasing; if describing a wish, use a clear conditional or present perfect. Add a brief reason to support your answer.

Example: No, I have never received a watch as a gift. I would like my father to give me an Apple Watch because it can track my fitness and receive notifications.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and two concise reasons linked with linking words. Avoid fillers and grammatical errors (Everyone have → Everyone has). Use more precise vocabulary (status symbol, craftsmanship, reliability).

Example: Some people wear expensive watches because they see them as status symbols and signs of good craftsmanship. Moreover, expensive watches are often more reliable and made of better materials, so they last longer.

Suggestion: Start with a direct opinion sentence, use correct verb forms (wanted → want, have track → keep track), and limit to two supporting details with linking words. Be specific about how the watch helps you.

Example: Yes, I think wearing a watch is important for me because it helps me keep track of time when I am out. For example, during exams I check my watch to manage each section and finish the paper on time.

× Yes, I do wear a watch uh, the brand of my watch is Casio.

✓ Yes, I do wear a watch. The brand of my watch is Casio.

Run-on sentence and missing capitalization after a full stop; also punctuation rather than grammar category 2: ensure separate sentences and capitalize proper nouns. Suggest breaking into two sentences: 'Yes, I do wear a watch. The brand of my watch is Casio.'

× That watch is very comfortable.

✓ That watch is very comfortable.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no pronoun error. Keep as is. (No change needed.)

× I always wear that whenever I'm going out uh, it helps me to save time and the thing that I like about her, it is not analogous.

✓ I always wear it whenever I go out; it helps me save time, and the thing that I like about it is that it is digital.

Problems: incorrect pronoun 'her' for watch and wrong adjective 'analogous' used instead of 'analog' or 'digital'; tense and form: use simple present 'whenever I go out' not 'I'm going out'. Suggestions: use correct pronoun 'it' for objects, use simple present for habitual actions, and use correct word 'digital'.

× It is digital.

✓ It is digital.

This sentence is correct as a short statement describing the watch. No change needed.

× I never got a board as a gift, but I wish that my father will give me an Apple Watch.

✓ I have never received a watch as a gift, but I wish my father would give me an Apple Watch.

Use present perfect 'have never received' for life experience up to now. 'Got' is informal and 'board' is wrong word; use 'watch'. For wishes about the future, use 'would' or 'could' rather than 'will' after 'I wish'. Suggest: 'I have never received a watch as a gift, but I wish my father would give me an Apple Watch.'

× Everyone have their own point of view, so I can not uh, comment on their uh, thinking, but the thing that I felt is that maybe because the watches are more reliable and lightweight, they are more umm uh, trustworthy than the normal ordinary watch.

✓ Everyone has their own point of view, so I cannot comment on their thinking. However, I feel that maybe some watches are more reliable and lightweight, and therefore more trustworthy than ordinary watches.

'Everyone' is singular and requires 'has' (subject-verb agreement). Use 'cannot' as one word. Avoid repetition 'normal ordinary'—use 'ordinary'. Use plural consistency: compare 'some watches' with 'ordinary watches'. Break into clearer sentences. Use 'feel' (present) rather than 'felt' for current opinion.

× For me it is really important to wear watches because whenever I'm going out, I wanted to have track on my time.

✓ For me, it is really important to wear a watch because whenever I go out, I want to keep track of my time.

Maintain present tense for general truths: use 'I go out' not 'I'm going out'. Use 'want' (present) instead of 'wanted'. Use correct phrase 'keep track of time' rather than 'have track on my time'. Also use singular 'a watch' when referring to the concept in general.

× I always see time and especially I like to wear watch during my exam time to see the timing to finish my paper as soon as it is possible to do.

✓ I always look at the time, and especially I like to wear a watch during exams to check the time so I can finish my paper as quickly as possible.

Use 'look at the time' rather than 'see time'. Use plural 'exams' or 'my exams' and 'a watch'. Replace awkward 'see the timing to finish my paper as soon as it is possible to do' with 'check the time so I can finish my paper as quickly as possible.' Use 'as quickly as possible' for natural phrasing. Also include articles where needed.