Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence naming the ad and why it impressed you, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitations and correct basic grammar (e.g., "advertisement" singular/plural, "I loved to drink"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas.

Example: A clear response: "The Coca-Cola advertisement impressed me most as a child because of its catchy music and bright visuals. For example, the ad showed friends sharing a fizzy drink at a party, which made it feel joyful and memorable. Because of the music and happy scenes, I always remembered the brand."

Suggestion: Answer directly and add a specific example. Fix grammar ("ads are attached to the side of the train", "on public buses"). Avoid trailing off; finish the thought with a concrete detail about the types of ads or impressions they make.

Example: A clearer reply: "Yes, I see many advertisements on public transport. I often ride the Skytrain and there are large posters and digital ads attached to the train sides; likewise, buses often carry billboard-style ads. These ads usually promote movies or smartphones and are hard to miss."

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Correct grammar and use linking words: "because", "for example", "however". Use precise vocabulary ("misleading", "exaggerated").

Example: Improved answer: "No, I don't like most advertisements because they are often exaggerated and misleading. For example, some ads claim a product solves many problems, but in reality it only has minor benefits. As a result, consumers can be confused about what the product actually does."

Suggestion: Start with a concise topic sentence naming the preferred type, then give a specific reason and brief example. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Use linking words like "because" and "for instance" and correct phrasing ("short stories based on real life").

Example: Better response: "I prefer creative adverts that tell a short, realistic story because they engage me emotionally. For instance, an ad that follows a family preparing a meal can make the product feel relevant to daily life, so I pay more attention to it."

Suggestion: Answer clearly and give one or two specific details. Fix grammar ("I usually see ads while watching YouTube because I don't pay for Premium; ads pop up in the middle of videos and interrupt me"). Use linking words like "because" and finish the final idea (e.g., "interrupt me and make me close the video").

Example: Polished answer: "Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone when I watch YouTube because I don't have YouTube Premium. Ads frequently pop up in the middle of videos and interrupt my viewing, so sometimes I skip the video or wait until the ad finishes."

× I think one of the most memorable advertisement for me when I was a child is Coca-Cola.

✓ I think one of the most memorable advertisements for me when I was a child is Coca-Cola.

The phrase 'one of the' requires a plural noun after it. Using the singular 'advertisement' is incorrect. Change to the plural 'advertisements' to agree with 'one of the'. Suggestion: Use 'one of the most memorable advertisements' whenever you refer to one item from a group.

× It is the beverage because umm, when I was a child, I love to drinks like umm, sweet beverage, especially something fizzy.

✓ It is the beverage because, when I was a child, I loved to drink sweet beverages, especially fizzy ones.

Tense and verb form errors: 'love' should be past tense 'loved' to match 'when I was a child'. 'to drinks' mixes infinitive and plural; use the base form 'to drink' or simply 'drink'. 'beverage' needs plural or a modifier; use 'beverages' or 'ones'. Also 'fizzy ones' is natural English. Suggestions: Keep consistent past tense and use correct infinitive or base verb forms, and match singular/plural.

× I often travel by Skytrain and umm, The advertisement always attach at the side of the train.

✓ I often travel by Skytrain, and the advertisements are always attached to the sides of the train.

Preposition and verb form issues: use 'attached to' rather than 'attach at'. Also 'advertisement' should be plural to match general statement, and passive 'are attached' is natural here. Use 'sides' for both sides of carriage. Suggestion: Use 'attached to' for things fixed on surfaces and keep subject-verb agreement.

× Also on the umm public buses it's always like umm.

✓ Also on public buses, it's always the same.

The original sentence is incomplete and uses vague filler. Replace with a complete clause. 'It's always the same' or 'they're displayed there too' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Avoid filler words and complete the idea with a subject and verb.

× I think I don't like advertisement because most of them it just not realistic and sometime over like over advertised so it can make consumer umm confused about the real function or benefits of.

✓ I don't like advertisements because most of them are not realistic and are sometimes over-advertised, so they can make consumers confused about the real functions or benefits.

Multiple article and agreement errors: 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when speaking generally. Missing verbs: add 'are' before 'not realistic' and 'are sometimes over-advertised'. 'Consumer' should be plural 'consumers'. 'Function' should be plural to match 'benefits'. Also remove redundant words. Suggestion: Keep subject-verb agreement and consistent number (singular/plural).

× I like the creative one that like create a short story short story based on real life because I think it's attractive to me and can umm can make me spend time on focus that more than other thing around me.

✓ I like creative ads that create a short story based on real life because I find them attractive and they make me focus on them more than on other things around me.

Use plural 'ads' for general preference. Remove duplicate 'short story'. 'Like create' is incorrect; use 'that create'. 'It's attractive to me' should refer to 'them' (ads) so use 'I find them attractive'. 'Spend time on focus that more' is ungrammatical; use 'make me focus on them more than on other things'. Suggestion: Keep pronoun references clear and use plural when speaking generally.

× I usually see advertisement when I am watching something on YouTube since I umm does.

✓ I usually see advertisements when I am watching something on YouTube since I don't have YouTube Premium.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' for general statements. 'since I umm does' is ungrammatical; replace with a clear reason such as 'since I don't have YouTube Premium'. Suggestion: Provide a complete clause explaining why, and match number.

× I don't pay for YouTube premium so advertisement away pop up in the middle of the video and it is kind of umm interrupt me and make me.

✓ I don't pay for YouTube Premium, so advertisements pop up in the middle of videos and they interrupt me.

Verb forms and plurality: 'advertisement away pop up' is incorrect. Use 'advertisements pop up'. 'it is kind of umm interrupt me and make me' should be 'they interrupt me' or 'they are kind of interruptive'. Remove trailing incomplete phrase. Suggestion: Use correct verb conjugation and plural nouns when referring to multiple ads; finish ideas clearly.