Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the ad and why it impressed you, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because / for instance). Keep answers to no more than five sentences and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes. A public service advertisement about family values impressed me when I was in primary school because it showed simple scenes of parents and children supporting each other. For example, one scene showed a father helping his child with homework, which made the message feel personal and emotional. Because of its warm visuals and clear message, it stayed in my memory.

Suggestion: Make your answer clearer and avoid unclear phrases. Begin with a direct yes/no and follow with concise supporting reasons and examples. Use linking words like "for example" or "because" and correct nouns (trains, buses, planes, seat backs).

Example: Yes. I often see advertisements on trains, buses and planes because companies place posters and screens on seat backs and in the aisles. For example, on long train journeys I notice large posters beside the doors and small ads attached to the backs of seats, which easily catch passengers' attention.

Suggestion: Give a full, fluent explanation and avoid trailing off. State your opinion clearly, then support it with one or two specific reasons and an example. Use linking words such as "because" and "for example" and finish sentences fully.

Example: Not really. I find many advertisements intrusive because they interrupt activities and are often repetitive. For example, when I open a music app I frequently get long ads that break my listening experience, so I usually pay for an ad-free version.

Suggestion: Be specific and use natural vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the type of ads you prefer, then give distinct benefits using linking words like "because" or "as" and provide a concrete example.

Example: I prefer public service advertisements because they promote social values and raise awareness about important issues. For instance, an ad campaign about recycling can both inform people how to recycle and encourage a positive community attitude toward the environment.

Suggestion: Remove repetition and use precise language. State your opinion, give one or two specific examples of where ads appear and explain why they annoy you. Use linking words (for example, when/so) and keep sentences concise.

Example: Yes. I see many ads on my phone and computer, and they often interrupt my activities. For example, when I start an exercise app a full-screen video ad sometimes appears and stops my workout, which is very annoying and makes the app hard to use.

× Yes, I remember when I was in the primary school, I watched, I watched the public service advertisement, the advertisement focus on the mini meaning of family and the family value the advertisement spouse of vocabulary family and explained it further.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was in primary school I watched a public service advertisement that focused on the meaning of family and family values and explained them further.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: unnecessary repetition ('I watched, I watched'), incorrect article use ('the primary school' -> 'primary school'), wrong verb form and tense agreement ('the advertisement focus' should be past tense 'focused'), and unclear noun phrases ('mini meaning of family', 'advertisement spouse of vocabulary family'). Combine clauses with relative pronouns ('that') and use plural pronouns ('them') for 'meaning and values'. Suggestion: remove repetitions, use correct past tense, simplify and clarify noun phrases.

× Yes, of course, when I take some high wispy tree or I will take airplane sometimes I often consider advertisement printing on a clothes in the front of the seat sit back it can it's usually can catch our eyes.

✓ Yes, of course. When I take a long-distance train or an airplane, I often notice advertisements printed on the backs of seats; they usually catch our eyes.

This sentence had many errors: incorrect vocabulary ('high wispy tree' unclear; corrected to 'long-distance train'), wrong article usage ('a clothes' -> 'the backs of seats'), tense and modal confusion ('I will take airplane sometimes I often' simplified to 'When I take... I often'), and awkward phrasing ('it can it's usually can catch our eyes' -> 'they usually catch our eyes'). Suggestion: choose correct transportation terms, use plural/pronouns consistently, and simplify clauses for clarity.

× Not really. I don't like them because nowadays with the commercial development, advertisement become a really part of the market. So no matter what you're doing where, what are you going to do? For example, if you want to open a music app and listen to some music, the advertisement will.

✓ Not really. I don't like them because, with commercial development nowadays, advertisements have become a real part of the market. So no matter what you are doing, for example, if you open a music app to listen to music, advertisements will appear.

Errors include subject-verb agreement and tense ('advertisement become' -> 'advertisements have become' using present perfect to show change over time), article and word choice ('a really part' -> 'a real part'), and an incomplete sentence at the end ('the advertisement will.' -> 'advertisements will appear'). Also pluralize 'advertisement' to 'advertisements'. Suggestion: use present perfect for trends, keep nouns plural where appropriate, and complete clauses with clear verbs.

× I think I like the advertise with more social service because it's not only beneficial to the people not only for relax their mind but also cultivate good the beneficial atmosphere in the society.

✓ I think I like advertisements about social services because they are not only beneficial to people and help them relax, but also help cultivate a positive atmosphere in society.

Problems include wrong word forms and order ('advertise' should be 'advertisements', 'more social service' -> 'about social services'), incorrect articles ('the people' -> 'people'), awkward parallel structure ('not only... not only... but also' incorrect) and unnatural phrasing ('cultivate good the beneficial atmosphere'). Use parallel structure with 'not only... but also' and correct adjective placement. Suggestion: use plural nouns, correct collocations ('about social services'), and ensure parallelism.

× Yes, of course, that's the worst thing. I hate the advertisement all around us because sometimes when I open my exercise app and try to exercise the advertisements just to jump out, just to pump everywhere, no matter in a video or in a music app, I feel really annoyed. It feel really annoying.

✓ Yes, of course. That's the worst thing. I hate advertisements all around us because sometimes when I open my exercise app to work out, advertisements just pop up everywhere, whether in a video or a music app, and I feel really annoyed.

Issues: article and plural errors ('the advertisement' -> 'advertisements'), incorrect verb forms ('just to jump out, just to pump' -> 'just pop up'), infinitive usage ('open my exercise app and try to exercise' -> 'open my exercise app to work out'), subject-verb agreement ('It feel' -> 'I feel'), and redundant phrases. Suggestion: use correct verbs for common collocations ('pop up'), maintain plural where needed, and ensure subject-verb agreement.