Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a clear, direct topic sentence that answers the question, avoid repetition and incorrect word choices, and add one or two specific details about the ad that impressed you (what it showed, why it stuck in your mind). Keep the answer to 2–4 sentences and use correct tense and simple linking words (for example, “because” or “so”).

Example: Yes. One advertisement that impressed me as a child was a cartoon cereal ad on TV because it used a funny mascot and a catchy song. I remember the bright colors and the jingle, and it made me want to try that cereal because it looked fun and tasty.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use clear, grammatical sentences. State whether you see many ads now and then give a reason or contrast with the past using linking words such as “but” or “however.” Avoid filler phrases and be specific about where you used to see ads and why they are less common now.

Example: In the past, I often saw many advertisements on buses and trains. However, now there are fewer ads because the city has regulations that limit advertising on public transport.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid hesitations. Give a clear opinion and support it with one or two concise, specific reasons. Use linking words (for example, “because” and “so”) and concrete examples of how ads help (compare brands, show prices, or introduce new products).

Example: Yes, I do. I like advertisements because they help me compare products and find the best price. For example, an ad once told me about a new phone model and its features, so I could decide whether to buy it.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence naming the types of ads you prefer, then explain why with specific reasons or examples. Use correct vocabulary (for example, “cosmetics” not “cosmetic products at vessels”) and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

Example: I prefer advertisements for cosmetics and electronics because I often buy those items. Cosmetic ads show product benefits and reviews, and electronics ads explain specifications, which helps me choose the right product.

Suggestion: Answer directly and briefly, then add one specific detail explaining why you see more ads on your phone and why you avoid ads on your computer. Use correct grammar for contrast (use “but” or “however”) and avoid emotional phrases like “I hate.”

Example: Yes, I see many advertisements when I scroll on my phone because many apps and websites show targeted ads. I rarely see ads on my computer because I use ad blockers and prefer websites without pop-ups.

× Yes, there are married of advancements.

✓ Yes, there were many advertisements that made an impression on me.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'married of advancements' is incorrect word choice and structure. Correct by using 'there were' (existential 'there be' past tense) and 'many advertisements' (plural quantifier). Use 'that made an impression on me' to match the question's meaning.

× I remember that when I when I were a child, I saw a lot of advertisements on TV or mobile phone and.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, I saw a lot of advertisements on TV and on my mobile phone.

Use past tense 'was' for first-person singular (subject-verb agreement) instead of 'were'. Remove repeated phrase and complete the list with parallel prepositional phrases 'on TV and on my mobile phone'.

× In the past I saw a lot of advertisement advertising on the bus, but you know we live in a modern area and it's don't they don't allow the any adverse sites on the train or the bus on like that.

✓ In the past I saw a lot of advertisements on the bus, but now, because we live in a modern area, they don't allow any ads on trains or buses.

Use plural 'advertisements' for 'a lot of'. Remove duplicated 'advertising' and incorrect contractions 'it's don't'. Use 'they don't allow any ads' for correct subject-verb agreement and clearer vocabulary. Use 'trains or buses' for parallel nouns.

× Actually, yes, because they, uh, when I need something, uh, I just, uh, that word science must help, uh, helped me to choose the right one and also I, uh, they helped me to know the, uh, something, uh, and.

✓ Actually, yes, because when I need something, advertisements help me choose the right product and they also help me learn about new products.

Original mixes tenses and uses incorrect words like 'that word science must help'. Maintain present simple 'help' for habitual action (when I need something). Use clear nouns 'advertisements' and 'products'. Avoid unnecessary fillers and ensure parallel verbs 'help me choose' and 'help me learn'.

× I like the cosmetic products at vessels and then electronic ones because I need them and when I, uh, need them and I umm, and also courses.

✓ I like cosmetic products and electronic products because I need them, and I am also interested in courses.

Original has wrong preposition 'at vessels' and repetition. Replace with 'cosmetic products and electronic products' for clarity and parallel structure. Use 'I am also interested in courses' to form a complete clause.

× Actually when I scroll my phone, I see a lot of advertisements on my phone, but computer I couldn't see any anything because I hate I don't like to see advertisements on my computer.

✓ When I scroll my phone, I see a lot of advertisements, but on my computer I don't see many because I don't like seeing advertisements on my computer.

Use present simple 'see' for habitual actions and 'don't' for negative present. Remove contradictory 'couldn't see any anything' and align tense to present. Use 'don't like seeing' (gerund) after 'like' to express preference.