Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense and repetition errors and avoid redundant phrases.

Example: When I was a child, an advertisement for a video game on TV really impressed me. I felt excited and immediately asked my parents to buy it, but they refused because it was very expensive.

Suggestion: Answer directly, avoid vague phrases and unnecessary repetition. Use a linking word to explain the change in your situation and give a specific example of what you see.

Example: Yes, I often see many ads on buses and metro trains, such as posters for mobile phones and local restaurants. However, I rarely see them now because I usually travel by car.

Suggestion: Make your opinion clear and give structured reasons. Use linking words (for example, however, because) and correct pronoun and article errors. Keep to two or three sentences maximum.

Example: I like some advertisements because they can be interesting and informative; however, I find online ads frustrating when they appear repeatedly while I use social media because they interrupt what I'm doing.

Suggestion: Be specific and complete your example. Start with a clear statement of preference, give a reason, then provide a concise, finished example. Correct grammar and vocabulary (true → truthful, false description → misleading claims).

Example: I prefer truthful advertisements because some companies make misleading claims to sell products. For example, I bought a vacuum cleaner during a Black Friday sale last year that turned out to be much weaker than advertised.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid speaking in fragments. Use linking words to explain why ads are frustrating and give a specific action you take. Correct subject and verb agreement.

Example: Yes, I often see ads on apps like Instagram and YouTube, and they frequently interrupt videos. Because some of them look like scams, I usually report suspicious ads to the platform.

× Yes, I remember when I was young I saw an advertisement of a video game of on the the TV.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was young I saw an advertisement for a video game on the TV.

The sentence uses incorrect prepositions and has a duplicated article 'the the'. Use 'advertisement for a video game' and 'on the TV'. Also maintain past tense 'saw' which is correct; fix preposition and duplication.

× So I was very excited to get that video game.

✓ So I was very excited to get that video game.

The sentence is acceptable, but keep it as is. No grammatical correction needed; it correctly uses past tense and structure.

× I literally asked my parents however they refused to get me that one because it was a very expensive and my parents want me to wanted me to.

✓ I literally asked my parents; however, they refused to get it for me because it was very expensive and my parents did not want to buy it.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence and wrong verb forms. Insert a semicolon or period before 'however' and add commas. Use 'get it for me' rather than 'get me that one'. 'a very expensive' is incorrect—drop 'a'. 'want me to wanted me to' is incorrect repetition and tense; use 'did not want to buy it' to match past tense.

× Whenever I travel by metro or buses, I usually see some kind of posters of any kind of advertisements.

✓ Whenever I travel by metro or bus, I usually see posters or other kinds of advertisements.

Mixing 'metro or buses' with inconsistent count; use parallel nouns 'metro or bus' or 'metros or buses'. 'Some kind of posters of any kind of advertisements' is redundant. Use 'posters or other kinds of advertisements'.

× However, these days I do not travel by public transport.

✓ However, these days I do not travel by public transport.

This sentence is correct and fits the present habitual tense. No change needed.

× Yes, I do enjoy advertisements sometime, however not at all all time.

✓ Yes, I do enjoy advertisements sometimes, but not all the time.

Use the adverb 'sometimes' (plural form). 'However not at all all time' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'but not all the time' for contrast.

× For instance if the any at some time if I watch my cell phone and any open any social media app, if the any other advertisement keep coming on my address and it can get a little frustrating.

✓ For instance, if at times I use my cell phone and open a social media app, advertisements keep appearing and it can get a little frustrating.

This had many unnecessary words ('the any', repeated 'if'). Simplify: 'at times', 'use my cell phone and open a social media app', 'advertisements keep appearing'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'advertisements keep appearing'.

× However I once I see that advertisement if I'm not interested in it, I don't.

✓ However, once I see an advertisement I am not interested in, I close it or ignore it.

The original sentence is incomplete ('I don't' what?). Clarify the action: 'I close it or ignore it.' Also fix word order and add commas.

× I like the true advertisements because these days everyone want to sell their product quickly and sometimes they put the false description of the product.

✓ I like truthful advertisements because these days everyone wants to sell their products quickly and sometimes they give false descriptions of the product.

Use adjective 'truthful' rather than 'true advertisements'. Subject-verb agreement: 'everyone wants'. Use plural 'products' to match 'their'. Use 'give false descriptions' not 'put the false description'.

× For instance, last year I bought vacuum cleaner from the Fridays Black Friday sale and then I realized that it was not it was very.

✓ For instance, last year I bought a vacuum cleaner during the Black Friday sale and then I realized that it was not good/that it was poor quality.

Missing article: 'a vacuum cleaner'. 'Fridays Black Friday' is redundant; use 'the Black Friday sale'. The ending 'it was not it was very' is garbled; clarify meaning, e.g., 'it was not good' or 'it was poor quality'.

× Yes, whenever you open any social media apps such as Instagram or YouTube, advertisements are always pop up.

✓ Yes, whenever you open social media apps such as Instagram or YouTube, advertisements always pop up.

Do not switch to second person 'you' unless intentional; original context used first person 'I'. Also fix verb phrase: 'advertisements always pop up' (not 'are always pop up').

× It was. It's sometimes it's very frustrating because I always report the scam.

✓ Sometimes it's very frustrating because I always report the scams.

Remove the fragment 'It was.' and the repeated 'it's'. Place 'sometimes' at the start: 'Sometimes it's very frustrating.' Use plural 'scams' if referring generally. Ensure consistent tense and remove fragments.