Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ rõ ràng: sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (advertisement -> advertisements, app -> ad, occasional -> catchy/occasional?), và cấu trúc câu để trả lời trực tiếp hơn. Giữ câu ngắn gọn (tối đa 5 câu), thêm liên từ phù hợp và chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ mô tả màu sắc, giai điệu, khẩu hiệu).

Example: A memorable advertisement from my childhood was a Vietnamese TV ad for "Strawberry Sweet". It stayed with me because of its vivid pink and red colors and a very catchy jingle. Also, the slogan "Sweetness in every bite" was repeated at the end, which made it easy to remember. Overall, its music and visuals made it stand out.

Suggestion: Sửa lỗi phát âm/viết và ngữ pháp: câu mở đầu không rõ nghĩa nên trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) rồi giải thích. Sử dụng liên từ (for example, because) đúng vị trí, sửa động từ số nhiều/số ít (ads, companies, commuters). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất hoặc vị trí các quảng cáo để phong phú câu trả lời.

Example: Yes, I often saw advertising on public transport when I was at university. Most ads were placed on the sides of buses and inside coaches, and they usually promoted medical services or educational programs. I think companies choose buses because they can reach many students and commuters during rush hour.

Suggestion: Cần rõ ràng và kiểm soát cảm xúc: tránh vận dụng từ quá mạnh như "hate" nhiều lần; sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc (pop-up ads, they interrupt what I'm doing, make me annoyed). Nên đưa lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn thay vì cảm xúc mơ hồ. Giữ dưới 5 câu.

Example: I generally dislike many online advertisements because pop-up ads on sites like YouTube often interrupt whatever I'm watching. For example, a sudden video ad can break my concentration and make me annoyed. I prefer ads that are unobtrusive or clearly relevant to my interests.

Suggestion: Cải thiện từ vựng và trật tự câu: dùng cụm từ chính xác (in terms of, billboard advertising), sửa thì và cấu trúc (it keeps my attention, it is placed on major roads). Thêm liên kết logic và một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại nội dung trên billboard) để câu tự nhiên và cô đọng hơn.

Example: In terms of advertising, I prefer billboards because they catch my attention while I'm driving or waiting at traffic lights. Since they are large and placed on busy roads, I can often read a full message when I stop at a red light. I especially like billboards with simple, bold images and short slogans.

Suggestion: Chỉnh ngữ pháp và độ mạch lạc: sửa cụm từ (these days), dùng linking words rõ ràng (because, so), và sửa danh từ/động từ (platforms use targeted advertising). Bổ sung một ví dụ cụ thể về loại quảng cáo hoặc cách chúng xuất hiện để tăng độ chi tiết.

Example: These days I often see advertisements unexpectedly on my phone and computer. They usually pop up while I'm browsing social media or using apps, because platforms use targeted advertising based on users' interests. For instance, I frequently see ads for online courses and streaming services that match my recent searches.

× Yes, when I was little I saw many television advertisement, but the most memorable one was Vietnamese app promoting Strawberry Sweet.

✓ Yes, when I was little I saw many television advertisements, but the most memorable one was a Vietnamese app promoting Strawberry Sweet.

Incorrect noun number: 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'many'. Also missing article before 'Vietnamese app' — add 'a' to indicate one app. Suggestion: Use 'many' with plural nouns and include articles before singular countable nouns.

× It impressed me because of its vivid colors and occasional and I can still remember the tune and the slogan now.

✓ It impressed me because of its vivid colors and music, and I can still remember the tune and the slogan now.

The word 'occasional' is incorrect here; likely intended 'occasion' or 'music'/'jingles'. Also sentence run-on: add 'and' properly to connect clauses. Suggestion: replace 'occasional' with the correct noun like 'music' or 'jingle' and ensure connectors are used correctly.

× I haven't had the chance to you change much, but when I was at university I often saw ad on the side of buses.

✓ I haven't had the chance to change much, but when I was at university I often saw ads on the sides of buses.

Multiple issues: unnecessary words 'to you' should be removed. 'ad' should be plural 'ads' with 's' and 'side' should be plural 'sides' if referring to multiple buses. Suggestion: remove extra words and match plural forms when speaking generally.

× For example, there were many ads for medical services or educational programs because company use buses to reach a lot of students and commuter.

✓ For example, there were many ads for medical services or educational programs because companies use buses to reach many students and commuters.

Quantifier and noun number errors: 'company' should be plural 'companies' to match generalization; 'a lot of students and commuter' is inconsistent — use 'many students and commuters'. Suggestion: use plural nouns with general statements and consistent quantifiers.

× No I would say that I hate advertisement a lot especially when I use social media like YouTube or Facebook.

✓ No, I would say that I hate advertisements a lot, especially when I use social media like YouTube or Facebook.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when speaking generally. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use plural form for general references and punctuate clauses.

× The pop up advertisement on what happened and it strikes me a lot.

✓ The pop-up advertisements that appear suddenly bother me a lot.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear: 'on what happened' is incorrect; 'it strikes me a lot' is awkward. Suggestion: rephrase to 'pop-up advertisements that appear suddenly bother me' for clarity and correct structure.

× I was I always feel confused and or even aggressive whenever I saw advertisement.

✓ I always feel confused or even angry whenever I see advertisements.

Tense inconsistency: mixing past 'was' and 'saw' with 'always feel'. Use present tense 'feel' and 'see' for habitual actions. 'Aggressive' used for behavior; 'angry' is better for emotions. Also 'advertisement' should be plural. Suggestion: keep tenses consistent for habitual statements and choose appropriate emotion words.

× In term of mean of advertising, I would say that I'm addicted to billboard advertisement because it kept my attention a lot and it always take places in a big road and when I have time, when I spend time waiting for the red light, I can see the whole every time.

✓ In terms of means of advertising, I would say that I'm attracted to billboard advertisements because they keep my attention a lot and they are always placed on large roads; when I have time waiting at a red light, I can see them every time.

Multiple errors: 'In term of mean' should be 'In terms of means'. 'Billboard advertisement' -> plural 'billboard advertisements'. Tense agreement: use present 'keep' and 'are placed' for general facts. 'Take places' incorrect; use 'are placed'. 'The whole' unclear; replace with 'them'. Suggestion: correct fixed expressions and ensure subject-verb agreement and clear references.

× This day, I often see advertisement unexpectedly whenever I use my phone or my computer.

✓ These days, I often see advertisements unexpectedly whenever I use my phone or my computer.

'This day' is incorrect for current general frequency; use 'These days'. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' for general occurrences. Suggestion: use 'these days' for present frequent actions and plural nouns for general statements.

× They pop up whenever I use social media or other apps and I think it's because platform use targeted advertising and people spend more time online.

✓ They pop up whenever I use social media or other apps, and I think it's because platforms use targeted advertising and people spend more time online.

Subject-verb agreement: 'platform' should be plural 'platforms' to match 'use'. Also add comma before 'and' for readability. Suggestion: ensure subjects and verbs agree in number when referring to plural entities.