Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details or a short reason. Avoid filler words (e.g., 'mmm', 'like', 'so') and unclear time references ('still a baby' vs 'when I was a child').

Example: Not really. I don't remember any advertisements that stuck with me from my childhood because I rarely watched TV then. For example, most of my memories are about family activities rather than specific commercials.

Suggestion: Keep the answer focused and use linking words for coherence. Correct small grammar errors and combine ideas into two clear sentences: a direct answer followed by one supporting reason with a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'so').

Example: Yes, I do. Because there is little else to do while commuting, I often read the posters and banners on buses and trains to pass the time.

Suggestion: State your opinion clearly, then give two specific reasons with examples. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'give false information', 'set unrealistic expectations') and linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Avoid repeating the same idea.

Example: No, I don't really like them because many ads make exaggerated claims. For example, some food ads promise unrealistic results, and I've bought products that turned out to be low quality.

Suggestion: Answer directly, use correct adjective forms and provide a specific example. Replace vague phrases ('at commercials', 'Thailand commercial') with clearer expressions and add a brief reason using a linking word like 'because'.

Example: I prefer funny, story-based commercials because they are entertaining and memorable. For instance, many Thai commercials use humour and short storylines to make products feel more relatable.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give a brief reason or example. Remove fillers and correct grammar (e.g., 'I see advertisements on my phone', 'even if I want to turn them off, I can't'). Use one or two concise sentences.

Example: Yes, I often see ads on my phone because many free apps display banner or video advertisements. Even if I try to disable them, some apps don't offer an option to remove the ads.

× MMM no I don't think so.

✓ No, I don't think so.

The original begins with 'MMM' which is a filler unsuitable for written responses and creates informal tone; remove it and add a comma after 'No' for clarity.

× I have like memories so about my childhood.

✓ I have some memories about my childhood.

'Like' and 'so' are unnecessary fillers and disrupt sentence structure. Replace with 'some' to correctly quantify 'memories' and place 'about my childhood' after it.

× I can't recall any memorable advertisement I saw when I was still a baby.

✓ I can't recall any memorable advertisement I saw when I was a child.

'Still a baby' is unlikely for remembering advertisements; 'child' is more appropriate and reads naturally. No tense change needed.

× So now.

✓ So I don't remember any now.

'So now' is a sentence fragment; expand to a complete sentence that conveys the intended meaning.

× Yes, I do, because there's not much to do when you're commuting on public transport.

✓ Yes, I do, because there is not much to do when you commute on public transport.

Mixed second-person 'you're commuting' shifts perspective; keep general statement with simple present 'you commute' or 'one commutes'. Also expanded 'there's' to 'there is' for formality.

× I look at advertisements, poster they hang on the window of buses as a way to pass the time.

✓ I look at advertisements and posters they hang on the windows of buses as a way to pass the time.

Missing conjunction and plural agreement: 'poster' should be 'posters' and 'window' should be 'windows'. Add 'and' to join nouns; adjust plurality for consistency.

× No, I find them to be very untrustworthy.

✓ No, I find advertisements to be very untrustworthy.

The pronoun 'them' is ambiguous; replacing it with 'advertisements' clarifies the subject.

× Most of the advertisements are giving false informations and said unrealistic expectations to the customers.

✓ Most advertisements give false information and set unrealistic expectations for customers.

'Most of the advertisements' can be simplified to 'Most advertisements'. Use simple present 'give' for habitual action. 'Informations' is uncountable and should be 'information'. Use 'set' rather than 'said' to express creating expectations and 'for customers' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Also their products are often low quality.

✓ Also, their products are often low quality.

Add a comma after 'Also' for clarity. 'Low quality' is acceptable; optionally 'of low quality' or 'poor quality' are alternatives.

× Probably the at commercials which are funny and entertaining in a way, especially those Thailand commercial.

✓ I like commercials that are funny and entertaining, especially those from Thailand.

Original has extra 'the at' and wrong noun forms. Use a full clause 'I like commercials that are...' and 'those from Thailand' to indicate origin.

× They have a very interesting way to promote their product through funny stories.

✓ They have a very interesting way of promoting their products through funny stories.

Use 'way of promoting' (correct preposition and gerund) and plural 'products' to match general reference.

× I have to see advertisement on my phone.

✓ I have to see advertisements on my phone.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to reflect multiple occurrences; present tense 'have to' is fine for necessity.

× I don't want to, but I have to because all of my apps are HA are showing those banners to me.

✓ I don't want to, but I have to because all of my apps are showing those banners to me.

Remove extraneous 'HA' which appears as a typo. 'All of my apps are showing those banners to me' is grammatically correct.

× Even I want to turn it off, I can't, so I have to.

✓ Even when I want to turn them off, I can't, so I have to live with them.

'Even I want' is awkward; use 'Even when I want' to introduce a subordinate clause. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'banners' or 'ads'. Add 'live with them' or similar to complete thought.