Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Use past tense consistently and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'I often watched Jollibee commercials in high school' instead of 'I often watch'. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'made me strong impressions on me'.

Example: When I was a child, there were few TV advertisements because we didn't have electricity at night. However, in high school, I often watched Jollibee commercials. These ads left a strong impression on me because they were cheerful and memorable, reminding me of happy family moments.

Suggestion: Use plural forms correctly and improve coherence by linking ideas more smoothly. For example, say 'advertisements' instead of 'advertisement'. Also, clarify your points with linking words like 'however' or 'because'.

Example: I often see advertisements on buses, but they are usually quite limited. For example, some buses have digital screens that only work when there is Wi-Fi available, so the ads are not always visible. Therefore, you need to travel for a long time, like 7 to 8 hours, to see the full range of ads.

Suggestion: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Correct phrases like 'when word entertaining, informative' to 'when they were entertaining and informative'. Also, avoid unnecessary words and improve sentence flow.

Example: Honestly, I used to enjoy watching advertisements when they were entertaining and informative. However, nowadays I prefer to learn about products through online reviews, especially on popular shopping platforms like Lazada or Shopee, because I find reviews more trustworthy and detailed.

Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary and grammar. For example, 'food advertisements' instead of 'food advertisement', and 'brands that have good reviews' instead of 'paradox that have a good reviews'. Also, ensure subject-verb agreement and article usage.

Example: I usually enjoy food advertisements the most because I love trying different kinds of food. I'm not very particular about brands, but I tend to trust brands that have good reviews or recommendations. Also, food ads often look very appealing and make me curious to try new dishes.

Suggestion: Improve clarity and coherence by organizing your ideas logically. Use correct verb forms and avoid filler words. For example, say 'Advertisements often pop up on YouTube or Facebook when I use my phone or iPad.' Also, avoid unclear phrases like 'advertisement food, Uh, peanuts or dress'.

Example: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my phone or computer. They frequently pop up on platforms like YouTube and Facebook. The ads vary widely, including food products, clothing, and other items.

× When I was a child, there weren't many TV advertisement because we didn't have electricity at night.

✓ When I was a child, there weren't many TV advertisements because we didn't have electricity at night.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads in general. Using the singular form here is incorrect when talking about more than one.

× However, when I was in high school, I often watch Jollibee commercials.

✓ However, when I was in high school, I often watched Jollibee commercials.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was in high school'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'watched' instead of the present tense 'watch'.

× These ads made me strong impressions on me because they were very cheerful and memorable, and they reminded me of happy family moments.

✓ These ads made strong impressions on me because they were very cheerful and memorable, and they reminded me of happy family moments.

The phrase 'strong impressions' is plural, so 'impressions' is correct. Also, 'made me strong impressions on me' is redundant; 'made strong impressions on me' is the correct form.

× Well, I often see advertisement on buses, but they are usually quite limited.

✓ Well, I often see advertisements on buses, but they are usually quite limited.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads seen on buses.

× Also I think you need to travel for a long time, like 7 to 8 hours to see the full range.

✓ Also, I think you need to travel a long time, like 7 to 8 hours, to see the full range.

The preposition 'for' is unnecessary here; 'travel a long time' is the correct expression. Also, commas improve sentence clarity.

× Honestly, I used to enjoy watching advertisement when word entertaining, informative.

✓ Honestly, I used to enjoy watching advertisements when they were entertaining and informative.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads. Also, the phrase 'when word entertaining, informative' is incorrect; it should be 'when they were entertaining and informative'.

× Honestly, I used to enjoy watching advertisement when word entertaining, informative.

✓ Honestly, I used to enjoy watching advertisements when they were entertaining and informative.

The adjectives 'entertaining' and 'informative' should be connected properly with 'and' and placed after the subject 'they' to form a correct clause.

× However, nowadays I prefer to learn about products to through online reviews, especially on popular shopping platforms like Lazada or Shopee because I find reviews more trustworthy and detailed.

✓ However, nowadays I prefer to learn about products through online reviews, especially on popular shopping platforms like Lazada or Shopee because I find reviews more trustworthy and detailed.

The preposition 'to' before 'through' is incorrect and should be removed to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× Well, I usually enjoy food advertisement the most because I love to try different kinds of food.

✓ Well, I usually enjoy food advertisements the most because I love to try different kinds of food.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads.

× I'm not very particular about brands, but I tend to trust paradox that have a good reviews or recommendations.

✓ I'm not very particular about brands, but I tend to trust products that have good reviews or recommendations.

The word 'paradox' is incorrect here; it should be 'products'. Also, 'a good reviews' is incorrect because 'reviews' is plural and should not have the article 'a'.

× Also foods ads often looks very appealing and make me curious to try new dishes.

✓ Also, food ads often look very appealing and make me curious to try new dishes.

'Foods ads' is incorrect; it should be 'food ads' (food as an adjective). Also, 'ads' is plural, so the verb should be 'look' instead of 'looks'.

× Also foods ads often looks very appealing and make me curious to try new dishes.

✓ Also, food ads often look very appealing and make me curious to try new dishes.

The plural subject 'ads' requires the plural verb 'look' instead of 'looks'.

× Honestly yes, because it always pop up either in YouTube or Facebook and whenever I use phone or iPad I use.

✓ Honestly, yes, because ads always pop up either on YouTube or Facebook, and whenever I use my phone or iPad, I see them.

The verb 'pop' should be 'pop up' in plural form 'pop up' to agree with plural subject 'ads'. Also, prepositions 'on YouTube or Facebook' are correct. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.