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Suggestion: 回答时应避免语法错误，如“his vivid picture”应为“its vivid picture”，并且用词更准确。可以增加连接词使描述更连贯，同时丰富细节，使表达更自然。

Example: Yes, there was an advertisement for a candy called Rainbow Candy that impressed me deeply. It featured a vivid picture of a giraffe eating a rainbow, which then transformed into many colorful candies. I found this imagery magical and very memorable.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法和表达不准确的问题，如“Sun is about promoting”应更清晰。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并具体说明广告内容。

Example: Yes, I often see many advertisements on public transport, especially on the subway. For example, some ads promote the beauty of the local city, while others advertise products like beer and wine. These ads are usually displayed on screens above the seats.

Suggestion: 回答中重复使用“irrelevant”，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并用更地道的表达方式说明感受。

Example: No, I don't like advertisements, especially when they appear during TV shows because they interrupt the program and annoy me.

Suggestion: 回答中语法不够准确，如“something introduces”应为“something that introduces”。建议使用连接词和更自然的表达，丰富细节。

Example: I like advertisements that are creative and innovative because they feel refreshing. For example, I enjoy ads that introduce new technology or relate to everyday life.

Suggestion: 回答较为自然，但“all the times”应为“all the time”。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并稍微丰富细节。

Example: Yes, definitely. I see advertisements all the time when I watch short videos on TikTok or other apps, so I usually try to skip them to have a better experience.

× What left a deep impression on me was his vivid picture.

✓ What left a deep impression on me was its vivid picture.

这里的代词应指代广告（it），而不是人（his），所以应使用its。

× There was a picture about a giraffe which was eating the rainbow.

✓ There was a picture of a giraffe which was eating the rainbow.

英语中通常用'picture of'表示某物的图片，而不是'picture about'。

× Then the rainbow became a lot of candies with various color.

✓ Then the rainbow became a lot of candies with various colors.

'color'应为复数形式'colors'，因为有多种颜色。

× I always see many advertisements on transport, especially on subway.

✓ I always see many advertisements on transport, especially on the subway.

'subway'前应加定冠词'the'，表示特指地铁。

× When I take subway to school, I can see many interesting advertisements playing on the top screen of the subway.

✓ When I take the subway to school, I can see many interesting advertisements playing on the top screen of the subway.

'take subway'应为'take the subway'，因为地铁前需要定冠词。

× Sun is about promoting the beauty of local city and others are advertising some products like beer and wine.

✓ Sun is about promoting the beauty of the local city and others are advertising some products like beer and wine.

'local city'前应加定冠词'the'，表示特指某个城市。

× No, I don't like it, especially when I see them during the time of watching TV shows because I feel I'm disturbed by irrelevant, irrelevant things and it is annoying for me.

✓ No, I don't like them, especially when I see them during the time of watching TV shows because I feel I'm disturbed by irrelevant things and it is annoying for me.

'advertisements'是复数，代词应使用'them'而不是'it'。另外，'irrelevant'重复，应去掉一个。

× I like some advertisements with creativity and innovation which bring me a sense of refreshingness.

✓ I like some advertisements with creativity and innovation which bring me a sense of refreshment.

'refreshingness'不是常用词，正确表达应为'refreshment'。

× I'd like something introduces the new technology or related to our real lives.

✓ I'd like something that introduces new technology or is related to our real lives.

缺少关系代词'that'，且动词形式需完整，'something introduces'应改为'something that introduces'。

× I see them all the times when I watch short videos on TikTok or other apps.

✓ I see them all the time when I watch short videos on TikTok or other apps.

固定短语为'all the time'，不是'all the times'。