Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete, which affects clarity and coherence. Try to avoid repeating words and ensure your sentences are complete. Also, provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples.

Example: No, there wasn't any advertisement that made a strong impression on me as a child because I usually found them annoying and distracting from my favourite TV shows.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but the phrase 'quiet, innovative idea' is a bit unclear. Try to use more precise vocabulary and add linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, definitely. I often see many advertisements on trains and other public transport such as buses and trams. They use bright colours and catchy slogans, which effectively attract a wide audience, making this a creative and successful advertising method.

Suggestion: Your answer is repetitive and contains some grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, provide specific reasons to support your opinion.

Example: No, I don't really like advertisements because they can be repetitive and often interrupt my favourite TV shows, which I find quite annoying.

Suggestion: Your answer shows good ideas but is a bit hesitant and unclear in places. Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and structure your sentences more clearly. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

Example: Personally, I like innovative advertisements that start without revealing the product and end with a surprising twist. These creative and memorable ads capture my attention effectively.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and contains hesitations. Try to complete your sentences fully and avoid filler words. Also, explain your points clearly with linking words for better coherence.

Example: Yes, definitely. I often see many advertisements on my phone, especially on social media and while browsing the internet. These ads usually target me based on my search history and preferences.

× I have seen lots of advertisements displayed on trains and other public transports like buses and trams.

✓ I have seen lots of advertisements displayed on trains and other public transport like buses and trams.

The word 'transport' is an uncountable noun when referring to the system or means of transportation in general, so 'public transport' is correct rather than 'public transports'. Using 'transports' as a plural noun is incorrect in this context.

× No, not really. When I was a child I did not pay much attention attention to advertisements because they were quite annoying and distracted my favorite TV shows.

✓ No, not really. When I was a child I did not pay much attention to advertisements because they were quite annoying and distracted my favourite TV shows.

The word 'attention' is uncountable and should not be repeated. The original sentence has 'attention attention' which is a repetition error. Removing the duplicate 'attention' corrects the sentence.

× So I found them I find.

✓ So I found them annoying.

The sentence 'So I found them I find.' is incomplete and unclear. It seems the speaker intended to say that they found advertisements annoying in the past. Correcting it to 'So I found them annoying.' provides a clear and grammatically correct sentence.

× No not really. I found them quite annoying and distracting mainly because they they sometimes they are repetitive and basically distract our favorite shows.

✓ No, not really. I find them quite annoying and distracting mainly because they are sometimes repetitive and basically distract our favourite shows.

The original sentence has repeated words ('they they') and mixes past and present tense inconsistently. Since the question is about current feelings, present tense 'I find' and 'they are' is appropriate. Removing repeated words and correcting tense improves clarity and correctness.

× So and based on those.

✓ So, based on those,

The phrase 'So and based on those.' is incomplete and awkward. Removing 'and' and adding commas makes the phrase clearer and grammatically correct as a sentence fragment leading to further explanation.