Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to give a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like 'umm', and explain why the advertisement impressed you with specific details. Also, avoid negative phrases like 'brainwashing' without explanation and clarify your point about 'people dead'.

Example: One advertisement that really impressed me as a child was for a nutrition product. The catchy music made it memorable, and the visuals showed how the product could improve health, which stuck in my mind.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but a bit disorganised and contains some awkward phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to add details. Avoid vague phrases like 'some specific product or services' and be more precise.

Example: Yes, I often see advertisements on trains and other transport. For example, there are many ads for teaching organisations, which I notice frequently since I am a teacher. Additionally, there are adverts for food products and various services, so advertising is quite common in these places.

Suggestion: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear opinion and explain it with specific reasons using linking words.

Example: I like advertisements only if they provide useful information about products that interest me. However, I dislike ads that are repetitive and annoying because they waste my time.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but contains hesitations and some grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently and clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain why you find such advertisements effective.

Example: I like advertisements that tell a real story, such as many Indian ads do. For example, when selling shampoo, they include touching stories that make the product more relatable and memorable.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words. Also, try to avoid informal phrases like 'pop out' and explain your opinion more fully.

Example: Yes, I frequently see advertisements on my phone, especially when I open apps. These ads often promote food or various products and services, appearing almost daily. I find them quite annoying because they interrupt my activities and waste my time.

× Well, umm, cause the music, it's so re repetitive and you can remember it clearly 'cause it's brainwashing you and you will see people dead.

✓ Well, umm, because the music is so repetitive and you can remember it clearly because it's brainwashing you and you will see people dead.

The phrase 'cause' is informal and should be replaced with 'because' for clarity and correctness. Also, 're repetitive' is a typo and should be 'repetitive'. The sentence structure is improved by removing the comma after 'music' and connecting the clauses properly.

× It's not uncommon to see advertisements such as teaching organizations because I work as a teacher and might notice this advertisement quite often and some products about food or some specific product or services and you can see them everywhere and they would just immerse in.

✓ It's not uncommon to see advertisements from teaching organizations because I work as a teacher and might notice these advertisements quite often, as well as some products related to food or some specific products or services, and you can see them everywhere and they just immerse you in them.

The phrase 'advertisements such as teaching organizations' is incorrect; it should be 'advertisements from teaching organizations' to indicate the source. Also, 'products about food' should be 'products related to food'. The sentence is long and confusing; breaking it up and clarifying pronouns improves understanding.

× If those con. If those are advertisements are something that I'm interested in, like it helps me to get more details or information about specific products, then I will happy to watch.

✓ If those advertisements are something that I'm interested in, like if they help me to get more details or information about specific products, then I will be happy to watch them.

The phrase 'If those con.' is incomplete and should be removed. 'I will happy to watch' is missing the verb 'be' and the object 'them' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'advertisements are something' should be followed by a conditional clause for clarity.

× However, if those advertisement are just repetitive and brainwashing and just watch.

✓ However, if those advertisements are just repetitive and brainwashing, I just watch them.

The plural form 'advertisements' should be used instead of 'advertisement'. The sentence is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb in the second clause; adding 'I just watch them' completes the thought.

× Well, this question reminds me of an Indian advertisement, 'cause every time Indian people trying to sell something they want to, yeah, for example, shampoo or specific product, they will integrate the product into a true story, a real story.

✓ Well, this question reminds me of an Indian advertisement, because every time Indian people try to sell something, for example, shampoo or a specific product, they integrate the product into a true story, a real story.

The phrase 'every time Indian people trying' should be 'every time Indian people try' to use the correct verb form. 'They want to, yeah,' is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow. 'A specific product' needs the article 'a' before 'specific product'.

× Yeah, I often see advertisements on my phone, especially when I open an app and the advertisement just pop out.

✓ Yeah, I often see advertisements on my phone, especially when I open an app and the advertisements just pop out.

The singular 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to agree with the plural subject 'advertisements' seen frequently. Also, 'pop out' is correct but should agree in number with the plural subject.

× I think they're kind of time wasting.

✓ I think they're kind of a waste of time.

The phrase 'time wasting' is an adjective form but is awkward here. The correct expression is 'a waste of time' to describe something that wastes time.