Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误，如"there is"应为"there was"，且代词使用不当（"her mom"应为"his mom"）。句子结构较为简单，缺少连贯的连接词，内容表达不够具体。建议注意时态一致性，代词准确使用，并增加连接词使表达更流畅。

Example: Yes, I remember a television advertisement from when I was about five years old. It showed a boy trying to help his mother wash her feet, which was very touching. This advertisement was quite popular among people at that time because it highlighted family love.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法和表达不够连贯的问题，如"and to umm promote"结构不完整，且缺少连接词。建议使用更准确的句子结构，避免口头语，增加连接词使表达更自然。

Example: Yes, I see many advertisements every day during my commute to work. Most of them are commercial ads, but some are public service announcements that promote health awareness or other social issues.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误，如"from Internet"应为"on the Internet"，且表达略显重复。建议避免口头语，使用更准确的介词，并简洁表达观点。

Example: Actually, I don't like all advertisements, especially those on the Internet that cannot be skipped. I find it frustrating to wait for them to finish before watching my shows.

Suggestion: 回答中语法错误较多，如"advertisements that is"应为"advertisements that are"，"it it can makes"应为"it can make"，且表达不够连贯。建议加强语法准确性，避免重复，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

Example: I like advertisements that are creative and funny. For example, ads that tell amusing stories about their products can make people laugh. I believe creativity is important for attracting people's attention.

Suggestion: 回答不完整，最后一句话未说完，且存在口头语"umm"。建议完整表达观点，避免口头语，并使用连贯的句子结构。

Example: Yes, advertisements are everywhere nowadays, especially on electronic devices. People often see ads when they open applications or watch TV shows online, usually before the content starts.

× Yes, I remember when I was about 5 years old, there is a television advertisement talking about a boy trying to help her mom with washing her feet.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was about 5 years old, there was a television advertisement talking about a boy trying to help his mom with washing her feet.

这里时态应该用过去时，因为描述的是过去的事情，'there is' 应改为 'there was'。另外，'her mom' 应改为 'his mom'，因为主语是男孩。

× there is a television advertisement talking about a boy trying to help her mom with washing her feet.

✓ there is a television advertisement talking about a boy trying to help his mom with washing her feet.

代词使用错误，'her mom' 应该是 'his mom'，因为主语是男孩，代词应与主语性别一致。

× And it's very moving and it's very popular among the people from that.

✓ And it's very moving and it's very popular among the people because of that.

介词使用错误，'among the people from that' 不通顺，应改为 'among the people because of that' 表示因果关系。

× every day I commute to my work place and I always see a lot of advertisements and most of them are commercial, but some of them are for the public.

✓ every day I commute to my workplace and I always see a lot of advertisements; most of them are commercial, but some of them are for the public.

'work place' 应合并为一个词 'workplace'。句子中逗号连接两个独立分句，应改为分号或句号。

× Umm service announcements and to umm promote public awareness of health or something else.

✓ Umm, service announcements and promotions to raise public awareness of health or other issues.

句子结构不完整，缺少谓语动词，需补充完整表达。

× Especially when I am watching a TV show from Internet.

✓ Especially when I am watching a TV show on the Internet.

介词使用错误，'from Internet' 应改为 'on the Internet'，表示在互联网上观看。

× There are some advertisements that cannot be skipped and I have to wait for it to come to the end.

✓ There are some advertisements that cannot be skipped and I have to wait for them to come to the end.

代词与先行词不一致，'advertisements' 是复数，代词应使用复数 'them'。

× I would like to watch some advertisements that is creative in the UMM.

✓ I would like to watch some advertisements that are creative in the UMM.

先行词 'advertisements' 是复数，关系代词后动词应使用复数 'are'。

× I would like to watch some advertisements that is creative in the UMM.

✓ I would like to watch some advertisements that are creative in the way.

'in the UMM' 不合适，可能是口误，应改为 'in the way' 或省略。

× some advertisements about their products, UMM telling us some funny things and it it can makes people, it can make people laugh.

✓ some advertisements about their products, telling us some funny things and they can make people laugh.

代词使用错误，'it it can makes' 应改为 'they can make'，主语复数，动词用原形。

× I think the create creativity is important for an advertisement to attract people.

✓ I think creativity is important for an advertisement to attract people.

'create creativity' 结构错误，应直接用名词 'creativity'。

× And people have to see an advertisement when they open an application or when they watch some TV shows and before the.

✓ And people have to see an advertisement when they open an application or when they watch some TV shows and before that.

句尾缺少指代词，'before the' 不完整，应改为 'before that'。