Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer needs to be more natural and grammatically correct. Use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid redundancy. Also, try to make your sentences clearer and more concise. For example, say "An advertisement for shampoo impressed me when I was a child because the model had long, shiny, healthy hair. I used to imagine myself having hair like hers."

Example: An advertisement for shampoo impressed me when I was a child because the model had long, shiny, healthy hair. I used to imagine myself having hair like hers.

Suggestion: Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, say "Yes, I often see many advertisements on buses and trains. For instance, this morning while going to my office by bus, I noticed several ads displayed on the vehicle."

Example: Yes, I often see many advertisements on buses and trains. For instance, this morning while going to my office by bus, I noticed several ads displayed on the vehicle.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to express your opinion clearly and avoid repeating phrases. For example, say "I don't pay much attention to advertisements because I prefer to research products myself to ensure they are worth the money. Therefore, ads don't influence me much."

Example: I don't pay much attention to advertisements because I prefer to research products myself to ensure they are worth the money. Therefore, ads don't influence me much.

Suggestion: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to organize your ideas and use correct grammar. For example, say "I like advertisements that honestly describe their products, including both advantages and disadvantages. Such ads help me make informed decisions."

Example: I like advertisements that honestly describe their products, including both advantages and disadvantages. Such ads help me make informed decisions.

Suggestion: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Try to speak more naturally and clearly. For example, say "I often see many advertisements pop up on my phone or laptop when I am online. Sometimes, these ads are annoying because they appear everywhere."

Example: I often see many advertisements pop up on my phone or laptop when I am online. Sometimes, these ads are annoying because they appear everywhere.

× Yes, the advertisement of a shampoo left their impression on me when I was child.

✓ Yes, the advertisement of a shampoo left its impression on me when I was a child.

The word 'advertisement' is singular, so the possessive pronoun should be 'its' instead of 'their'. Also, 'a child' needs the article 'a' before it.

× The model had super growing healthy shiny long hair and whenever I closed my eyes I would love to reconsider myself as the model who has those hair that.

✓ The model had super healthy, shiny, long hair growing, and whenever I closed my eyes, I would love to imagine myself as the model who has that hair.

The phrase 'super growing healthy shiny long hair' is awkward; 'super healthy, shiny, long hair growing' is clearer. 'Reconsider myself' is incorrect here; 'imagine myself' fits better. 'Those hair' should be 'that hair' because 'hair' is uncountable.

× Yes, whenever I go with public transportation, I saw many advertisement written on the on the buses or trains.

✓ Yes, whenever I go by public transportation, I see many advertisements written on the buses or trains.

'Go with public transportation' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go by public transportation'. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'many'. The tense should be present 'see' to match 'whenever I go'.

× For example, last morning I was going for my office by taking bus and there I saw many advertising written on it.

✓ For example, yesterday morning I went to my office by bus, and there I saw many advertisements written on it.

'Last morning' is unnatural; 'yesterday morning' is better. 'Was going for my office by taking bus' is awkward; 'went to my office by bus' is correct. 'Advertising' should be 'advertisements' as countable nouns.

× Well, it's not that much important for me 'cause whenever I want a product to buy, I rather I rather search their product which can value for my money more than the advertisement they do.

✓ Well, it's not that important for me because whenever I want to buy a product, I prefer to search for products that offer better value for my money than the advertisements they make.

'That much important' should be 'that important'. 'I rather I rather' is repetitive; 'I prefer to' is better. 'Search their product' is incorrect; 'search for products' is correct. 'Which can value for my money' is incorrect; 'that offer better value for my money' is correct. 'Advertisement they do' should be 'advertisements they make'.

× Uh, the advertisement, we who are honest by their product describe their product in details and give an explanation, advertisement and disadvantagement of their product.

✓ Uh, I like advertisements where the producers honestly describe their product in detail and give explanations of the advantages and disadvantages of their product.

'We who are honest by their product' is unclear; 'producers honestly describe' is clearer. 'In details' should be 'in detail'. 'Advertisement and disadvantagement' is incorrect; 'advantages and disadvantages' is correct.

× Computer well not by my heart but definitely whenever I am online many advertisement have pop up on my screen whether it's phone or laptop.

✓ Well, not by choice, but definitely whenever I am online, many advertisements pop up on my screen whether it's on my phone or laptop.

'Many advertisement' should be 'many advertisements' (plural). 'Have pop up' is incorrect; 'pop up' is correct in present tense. 'Computer well not by my heart' is unclear; 'not by choice' is clearer.

× The advertising are real headache nowadays if you doesn't want to see but they becomes available in on your eyes.

✓ Advertising is a real headache nowadays if you don't want to see it, but it becomes unavoidable in your eyes.

'Advertising' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. 'You doesn't' should be 'you don't'. 'They becomes' should be 'it becomes' to agree with singular 'advertising'. 'Available in on your eyes' is incorrect; 'unavoidable in your eyes' is better.