Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答中语法和表达存在一些错误，且句子结构较为简单，缺少连贯的连接词。建议注意时态使用，避免冗余表达，并尝试使用更多连接词使回答更自然流畅。

Example: When I was a child, I saw a TV advertisement for the iPhone 3, which was famous for its advanced features and technology. I was fascinated by it because the brand seemed innovative and impressive.

Suggestion: 回答中存在词汇使用不当（如chains应为trains），句子结构不够自然，且缺少连接词。建议注意词汇准确性，使用连接词使句子更连贯，并避免重复表达。

Example: Yes, when I take public transportation such as buses, subways, and trains, I often see many advertisements on the walls and floors. These ads usually promote products like medicines and online platforms.

Suggestion: 回答内容较完整，但句子较长且略显重复。建议分句表达，使用连接词使句子更简洁自然，同时注意冠词和复数形式的正确使用。

Example: Yes, I like advertisements because they provide useful information and helpful guidance. This helps me make wise decisions about what and where to buy, which is very beneficial in daily life.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整（如'Sean'应为'seen'，句子未完成）。建议注意拼写和句子完整性，使用连接词使表达更连贯，并丰富细节。

Example: I like advertisements that tell a short story because the plots convey emotions and feelings, which fascinate me. This type of advertising leaves a deep impression and is a creative idea for companies.

× When I was a child, I had ever seen an advertisement of a smartphone on TV.

✓ When I was a child, I had seen an advertisement of a smartphone on TV.

这里使用过去完成时态（had ever seen）不合适，因为句子中没有与之对应的过去时间点。应使用过去完成时的简单形式had seen，表示在过去某一时间之前已经看过。

× Yes, when I take some public transportation like buses, subway as well as chains, I can see a lot of advertisements on the wall or on the floor.

✓ Yes, when I take some public transportation like buses, subway as well as trains, I can see a lot of advertisements on the wall or on the floor.

chains应为trains，chains是连锁店的意思，语境中应指火车，故应使用复数形式trains。

× And these advertisements are usually the propaganda of some products like medicine and some Internet platform.

✓ And these advertisements are usually the propaganda for some products like medicine and some Internet platforms.

propaganda通常搭配介词for，表示“为……做宣传”，而不是of。同时，Internet platform应为复数形式platforms，表示多个平台。

× Yes, I like advertisements since these ads provide me with a great number of useful information as well as helpful guidance for me to choose the best merchandise so I can make a wise decision on what to buy and where to buy.

✓ Yes, I like advertisements since these ads provide me with a great deal of useful information as well as helpful guidance for me to choose the best merchandise so I can make a wise decision on what to buy and where to buy.

information是不可数名词，不能用a great number of，应使用a great deal of来修饰不可数名词。

× I like some advertisements Sean in a small story since the plots of the stories convey emotions and feelings which I will be fascinated by and this type of advertisement will leave a good and deep impression on me.

✓ I like some advertisements seen in a small story since the plots of the stories convey emotions and feelings which I am fascinated by and this type of advertisement will leave a good and deep impression on me.

Sean应为seen，表示“看到的”；此外，which I will be fascinated by时态不合适，改为which I am fascinated by更符合语境。