Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, one advertisement that impressed me as a child was for a washing detergent. I still remember the catchy jingle and how the actors spoke clearly, which made it memorable for me.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure to sound more natural.

Example: Yes, I often see many advertisements on public transportation such as buses and trains. For example, there are colourful posters for restaurants, colleges, and summer coaching classes by gym trainers, all aiming to attract customers.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, improve grammar and vocabulary for clarity.

Example: Yes, I sometimes like advertisements because they provide useful information. For instance, when I want to buy a new mobile phone, advertisements help me learn about the latest models and features.

Suggestion: Your answer is on topic but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use clear sentences with linking words and specific details to explain your preference naturally.

Example: I especially like technology advertisements because they introduce new products, explain how they work, and show their prices. This helps me compare different products from various companies easily.

× I mostly was day one advertisement early to do the washing bottle and that I'm it was the lyric for me to how they speak how they spoke in the advertisement.

✓ I mostly saw one advertisement early about washing bottles and that was the lyric for me about how they spoke in the advertisement.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'advertisement' in singular form without an article and has unclear phrasing. 'Advertisement' should be preceded by an article when singular. Also, 'was day one advertisement' is unclear and likely a misuse of words. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects singular/plural usage.

× I see many advertisement on public transportation, bus and trains, I see it the color folder advertisement, some later to the restaurant, some college and I see specially about the summer coaching of a gym trainer and they try to attract the many customers.

✓ I see many advertisements on public transportation, buses and trains. I see colorful folder advertisements, some related to restaurants, some to colleges, and especially about summer coaching by a gym trainer who tries to attract many customers.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when referring to multiple ads. Also, 'bus' should be plural 'buses' to match 'trains'. The sentence is also fragmented and unclear, so it was restructured for clarity while correcting plural forms.

× I see specially about the summer coaching of a gym trainer and they try to attract the many customers.

✓ I especially see advertisements about summer coaching by a gym trainer who tries to attract many customers.

The phrase 'specially about' is incorrect; 'especially' is the correct adverb. Also, 'the many customers' should be 'many customers' without 'the' as it is a general quantifier.

× I see many advertisement on public transportation, bus and trains, I see it the color folder advertisement, some later to the restaurant, some college and I see specially about the summer coaching of a gym trainer and they try to attract the many customers.

✓ I see many advertisements on public transportation, buses and trains. I see colorful folder advertisements, some related to restaurants, some to colleges, and especially about summer coaching by a gym trainer who tries to attract many customers.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'the color folder advertisement' which should be 'colorful folder advertisements' to correctly quantify and describe multiple advertisements.

× So like if I want to buy a new mobile phone without the advertisement, I never know which model is the currently launched by the company and they help us the people to go through for this.

✓ For example, if I want to buy a new mobile phone without advertisements, I would never know which model is currently launched by the company, and they help us people to understand this.

'The advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' as a general concept. 'They help us the people to go through for this' is awkward; 'help us people to understand this' is clearer. Also, 'which model is the currently launched' is incorrect; 'which model is currently launched' is correct.

× So like if I want to buy a new mobile phone without the advertisement, I never know which model is the currently launched by the company and they help us the people to go through for this.

✓ For example, if I want to buy a new mobile phone without advertisements, I would never know which model is currently launched by the company, and they help us people to understand this.

The pronoun 'they' refers to advertisements, which is acceptable, but the phrase 'help us the people to go through for this' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'help us people to understand this' for clarity.

× I obviously like the advertisement later to the technology because it will help us to introduce new products and how they working and what's the price of that advertisement and we can easily compare the products through the advertisement with other products of different companies.

✓ I obviously like advertisements related to technology because they help us learn about new products, how they work, and their prices. We can easily compare products through these advertisements with those of different companies.

'Advertisement later to the technology' is incorrect; it should be 'advertisements related to technology'. 'How they working' should be 'how they work'. 'What's the price of that advertisement' is unclear; it should refer to the product's price. Also, plural forms are needed for consistency.