Advertisement— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more concise and use correct sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and improve coherence by using linking words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details about the advertisement and why it impressed you.

Example: Yes, there was an advertisement that impressed me as a child. It was for Dairy Milk chocolate, which is very popular. The ad showed the chocolate as delicious and safe to eat, which made me eager to try it.

Suggestion: Your answer is repetitive and incomplete. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and finish your sentences properly. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, provide specific examples to support your answer.

Example: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and other public transport. For instance, there are ads for agricultural products like fertilizers, as well as promotions for various consumer goods. These ads are quite common and catch the attention of passengers.

Suggestion: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, explain your opinion with specific reasons and examples, using linking words to connect your points.

Example: Yes, I enjoy reading advertisements in my free time because they can be informative. However, I believe that not all ads are truthful; sometimes they exaggerate the qualities of a product, which can mislead people into buying unnecessary items.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, provide specific examples of educational advertisements you like and explain why.

Example: I prefer advertisements related to educational courses because they help students find useful learning opportunities. For example, ads for online classes or coaching centers guide students to improve their skills and perform better in exams.

× Well, I guess there is A1 advertisement that made an impression on my mind when I was a child.

✓ Well, I guess there is an A1 advertisement that made an impression on my mind when I was a child.

The article 'an' should be used before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'A1' instead of 'a'. This is a common article error in English.

× It was the advertisement of a chocolate on Dairy Milk.

✓ It was the advertisement of a chocolate called Dairy Milk.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used here. We say 'advertisement of a chocolate called Dairy Milk' to specify the product name. 'On' is not appropriate in this context.

× Dairy Milk is a chocolate which is very famous and in this advertisement it is shown very delicious and very safety so which craves my mind to try it.

✓ Dairy Milk is a chocolate which is very famous and in this advertisement it is shown as very delicious and very safe, which makes me want to try it.

The adjective 'safety' is incorrectly used; the correct adjective is 'safe'. Also, 'craves my mind' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'makes me want to try it'. Adverbs and adjectives must be used appropriately.

× Well, definitely I see a lot of advertisements on trains, on other transports.

✓ Well, definitely I see a lot of advertisements on trains and other transport.

The phrase 'on other transports' is incorrect because 'transport' is uncountable here and 'on' is not used with 'other transport' in plural. The correct phrase is 'on trains and other transport'.

× Uh, however, public transport like buses and trains are full of advertisement and there is a plethora of advertisement about different products like fertilizers and agricultural products.

✓ Uh, however, public transport like buses and trains are full of advertisements and there is a plethora of advertisements about different products like fertilizers and agricultural products.

The word 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads. This is a singular and plural issue.

× And apart from this, there is also advertisement of some of products that.

✓ And apart from this, there are also advertisements of some products.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' and 'some of products' should be 'some products'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and corrected accordingly.

× Definitely, I love to read advertisements in my spare time.

✓ Definitely, I love reading advertisements in my spare time.

While 'love to read' is not incorrect, 'love reading' is more natural in this context. This is a subtle issue of verb form and preposition usage.

× They show a product in a very impressive way, which influence the people's mind and they by the wrong things in a bulk.

✓ They show a product in a very impressive way, which influences people's minds and they buy the wrong things in bulk.

'Influence' should be 'influences' to agree with singular 'which'. 'The people's mind' should be 'people's minds' as it is plural. 'By' is incorrect; it should be 'buy'. 'In a bulk' should be 'in bulk'. These are pronoun and verb form errors.

× To be honest, I like advertisements that are based on some type of educational courses and study related.

✓ To be honest, I like advertisements that are based on some type of educational courses and study-related topics.

'Study related' should be hyphenated as 'study-related' to function as an adjective. Also, 'study related' alone is incomplete; adding 'topics' clarifies the meaning.

× The advertisement of study related and some type of this helps the students to approach different levels of study by which they can learn in a very easy method and achieve a higher score in their academics or examinations.

✓ The advertisements of study-related courses and similar types help students to approach different levels of study by which they can learn in a very easy way and achieve higher scores in their academics or examinations.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'some type of this'. 'Helps' changes to 'help' to agree with plural subject. 'A very easy method' is better expressed as 'a very easy way'. 'A higher score' should be 'higher scores' to be general. Pronouns and agreement errors are corrected.