Talents— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cevap daha doğrudan ve akıcı olmalı; gereksiz kelime tekrarları ve dolgu sözcükleri azaltılmalı. İlk cümlede yeteneğinizi netçe belirtin, ardından neden ara verdiğinizi kısa ve bağlantılı bir cümleyle açıklayın. Bağlaçlar (because, so, however) doğru yerde ve anlamlı kullanılmalı. Ayrıca dilbilgisi (tense ve kelime sırası) düzeltilmeli.

Example: Yes, I'm good at dancing. I used to take regular dance lessons, but I had to stop recently because of my exams.

Suggestion: Cümleler kısa, tutarlı ve mantıksal sıra ile olmalı. 'Professional' kelimesini dikkatli kullanın; eğer amatör seviyedeyseniz 'trained' veya 'took lessons' kullanın. Tekrar eden ifadelerden kaçının ve geçmişten bahsederken doğru zamanı kullanın. Bağlaçlarla neden ve gelecek isteğini net bağlayın.

Example: I started dancing when I was a child and trained for several years. I had to pause because of school, but I hope to resume lessons soon.

Suggestion: Cevap daha odaklı ve profesyonel olmalı; gereksiz tekrar ve dolgu seslerinden (umm, uh) kaçının. Bir ana düşünce ile başlayıp nedenlerini iki kısa destekleyici cümleyle belirtin (ör. CV, takım çalışması becerileri). Somut faydalar ve bağlantılar verin.

Example: Yes. Dancing could strengthen my college application and CV by showing commitment and teamwork. It also helps develop discipline and confidence, which are useful in any career.

Suggestion: Bu soruya cevap verirken daha nazik ve net olun. Kararsız ifadeler ve yanlış zamir kullanımı (he/she) düzeltilmeli. Ailenizin yeteneğini değerlendirirken kısa bir sebep veya örnek verin. Gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve tek bir görüşle bitirin.

Example: No, I don't think so. My mother enjoys dancing for fun, but she hasn't trained like I have, so I don't think she has the same level of skill.

× I think I have a strong aptitude in dancing and however I want dancing again but unfortunately I was.

✓ I think I have a strong aptitude for dancing; however, I want to dance again but unfortunately I had to stop.

The sentence mixes conjunctions and tenses incorrectly. Use 'aptitude for dancing' (correct preposition) and 'however' should be set off with punctuation. 'Want dancing again' is incorrect — use the infinitive 'want to dance.' 'Unfortunately I was' is incomplete; the intended meaning is 'I had to stop' or 'I had to quit.' Suggestions: use clear connectors ('however'), correct prepositions ('aptitude for'), and proper verb forms ('want to dance', 'had to stop').

× I have had to quit my dance lessons because of my exams.

✓ I had to quit my dance lessons because of my exams.

The original uses present perfect ('have had to') which is possible but in this context a simple past ('had to') fits better with the rest of the narrative about past events. Suggestion: use simple past for completed past actions tied to a specific time period ('because of my exams').

× Was it mastered recently or when you were young?

✓ Did you master it recently or when you were young?

'Was it mastered' is passive and awkward for asking about when someone developed a skill. Use active voice 'Did you master it...' with simple past to ask about the time when a skill was acquired. Suggestion: prefer active constructions for personal abilities ('Did you learn/master it...').

× Actually, I was a professional dancer when I was a child, but unfortunately, like I said, I had to take a break and dancing.

✓ Actually, I was a professional dancer when I was a child, but unfortunately, like I said, I had to take a break from dancing.

The phrase 'take a break and dancing' is ungrammatical. Use the preposition 'from' after 'take a break' and the gerund 'dancing' as the object ('a break from dancing'). Suggestion: remember the pattern 'take a break from + noun/gerund.'

× But actually I want to keep on dancing again, that's all.

✓ But actually I want to keep dancing again, that's all.

'Keep on dancing' is acceptable in some dialects, but 'keep dancing' is more natural. Also 'again' is redundant with 'keep' if the meaning is to resume; keep + -ing expresses continuation. Suggestion: use 'keep dancing' or 'dance again' depending on intended nuance.

× Yeah, because I want to improve my extracurricular and my umm, CV and college application.

✓ Yes, because I want to improve my extracurricular activities, my CV, and my college application.

'Extracurricular' used alone is incomplete; the noun 'activities' is needed. Also list items require commas and parallel structure. Suggestion: use full noun phrases and parallel structure in lists ('extracurricular activities, my CV, and my college application').

× And I think it will be beneficial for my college application in the future.

✓ And I think it will be beneficial for my college application in the future.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Explanation: The sentence correctly uses future modal 'will be' and noun phrase 'college application.' Suggestion: none.

× And I want to just because of that reason, I want to uh, uh, I hope, uh, keep going in dancing.

✓ And I want to, just for that reason, keep going with dancing.

The original has redundant phrases and filler words. Use 'just for that reason' and 'keep going with dancing' or better 'keep dancing.' 'Keep going in dancing' is unidiomatic. Suggestion: remove fillers and use natural collocations ('keep dancing', 'keep going with dance lessons').

× Umm, indeed, I don't think so and I'm not agree because uh, however my mom is always trying to dancing, uh, or uh, he's just loud dancing.

✓ Umm, indeed, I don't think so and I don't agree because my mom is always trying to dance, or she just dances loudly.

'I'm not agree' is incorrect; use 'I don't agree.' 'Trying to dancing' should be 'trying to dance.' Pronoun confusion: 'he's' is wrong for 'my mom' (she). 'loud dancing' should be 'dances loudly.' Suggestion: use correct verb forms after 'trying to' and matching pronouns, and use adverb form 'loudly.'

× Uh, I think he uh, hasn't, uh, she hasn't talent, uh, like me in dancing.

✓ I think she doesn't have the same talent for dancing as I do.

The original mixes pronouns 'he' and 'she' and incorrect verb phrase 'hasn't talent.' Use 'doesn't have' for negation with 'have' and compare correctly with 'the same ... as I do' or 'as I have.' Suggestion: maintain consistent pronouns and use 'doesn't have the same talent for dancing as I do.'