Talents— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize facts clearly. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I am good at chess.”), then give specific achievements with correct tense and numbers. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and unclear phrases like “4C.” Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I am good at chess. I have won my national championship twice and finished first on both occasions. I also placed fourth in an international junior event. These achievements show I have strong strategic thinking and competitive experience.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear time reference, correct grammar, and concise supporting detail. Use a topic sentence like “I learned it when I was very young,” then add how you progressed. Remove hesitations and ensure correct age expression.

Example: I learned to play chess when I was four years old. After that, I practiced regularly and began entering local competitions at primary school, which helped me improve quickly.

Suggestion: Prefer a clear, direct answer and explain with concise reasoning. Use linking words to contrast (e.g., “Although…,” “however…”). Avoid unclear abbreviations like “UH.” Consider mentioning transferable skills (e.g., concentration, decision-making) even if the talent isn’t directly related.

Example: I don't think chess will directly help my career in midwifery because the work is medical and practical. However, chess has improved my concentration and quick decision-making, which could be useful in stressful clinical situations.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, then provide specific supporting details with correct grammar. Replace unclear words (“Von”) and avoid hesitations. State who, their achievements, and briefly explain influence on you.

Example: Yes. My father and grandfather were both strong chess players. My grandfather won two regional championships, and my father competed at that level too, which inspired me to start playing when I was young.

× I get 2 times Republic championship for the 1st place and I got 4C.

✓ I won the national championship twice and I got 4th place.

The student mixes present tense 'get' with past achievement; use past simple 'won' for completed actions. Also clarify 'Republic championship' as 'national championship' and '4C' likely means '4th place'. Use consistent past-tense verbs for events that happened in the past. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed achievements and write ranks clearly (e.g., 'won twice', 'got 4th place').

× Actually, I played chess, uh, from the young age when I four year old and from here I started, uh, to. Compete in championships.

✓ Actually, I played chess from a young age when I was four years old, and from there I started to compete in championships.

This sentence has tense and verb form errors. The phrase 'when I four year old' lacks the auxiliary 'was' and correct plural 'years'. 'From here' is incorrect in context; use 'from there'. Also remove unnecessary periods. Use simple past 'played' and past continuous context with 'was'. Suggestion: Use 'when I was four years old' and 'from there' to indicate starting point; keep verbs consistent.

× In my opinion, I would say no because my field is midwifery which is related to the UH, gynecology in medicine, UH and chess cannot help me with it.

✓ In my opinion, no; my field is midwifery, which is related to gynecology in medicine, and chess cannot help me with it.

The original has extraneous 'UH' fillers and punctuation issues. The relative clause needs commas around 'which is related to gynecology in medicine'. Also 'help me with it' is acceptable but ensure conjunction 'and' connects clauses correctly. Suggestion: Remove fillers and use commas to set off the relative clause; connect ideas with 'and'.

× Yes, of course yes. My father and my grandfather used to play chess and they played very good uh, so they. Von Regional championships 2 times.

✓ Yes, of course. My father and grandfather used to play chess and they played very well; they won regional championships twice.

Problems: duplicated 'yes', misused adjective 'good' (should be adverb 'well' for 'played'), 'Von' is incorrect—use 'won', and word order/spacing errors. Also 'my grandfather' can be simplified to 'grandfather'. Use past simple 'won' for completed events and 'twice' for frequency. Suggestion: Use 'played very well' and 'won regional championships twice'.