Talents— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (what you draw, how often, or a brief example). Avoid repeating the word "creativity" and reduce redundancy. Use a linking word to connect ideas (for example, "also" or "for example").

Example: I am good at drawing and other visual arts. For example, I often paint murals on walls and create pencil portraits, which I find relaxing and satisfying. Also, art is one of my favorite hobbies because it helps me express ideas visually.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear time reference and link supporting details. Use correct tense and grammar (e.g., "I have had this skill since childhood"). Add one specific example of early practice or achievement and use linking words like "however" correctly to show contrast.

Example: I have had this skill since childhood; I used to practice drawing every weekend and often won class awards. However, after high school I chose to study subjects like mathematics and computer science to improve my job prospects.

Suggestion: Start with a direct short answer (Yes/No) then give one clear reason with a specific example. Improve grammar (e.g., "I quit drawing in high school"). Avoid long, repetitive explanations; use a linking word like "because" to connect reason and example.

Example: No, I don't think art will be very useful for my future career because I focused on mathematics and computer science to pursue more stable job opportunities. For instance, I am training for a software engineering role, so I prioritize technical skills over art.

Suggestion: Answer directly and provide one specific supporting detail or example. Correct awkward phrasing (e.g., "She can draw a person's likeness from memory"). Use one linking word like "for example" to add clarity and avoid redundant adjectives.

Example: Yes, my sister is also talented at drawing and is actually better than me. For example, she can draw a person's likeness from memory and often completes detailed portraits in just a few hours.

× Yes, I have creativity in drawing and arts.

✓ Yes, I am creative in drawing and art.

The original uses 'have creativity' which is awkward in English; a descriptive adjective 'creative' with 'be' is more natural for abilities or traits. Also 'arts' is plural here but 'art' as a field is more common. Use present simple 'am' to describe a current trait.

× I can draw any picture on the wall by hand.

✓ I can draw any picture on the wall by hand.

No grammatical change needed for tense or verb form. Sentence is acceptable; kept as is. (Included only if matching provided list - no correction required.)

× It gives me a sense of creativity and relaxation.

✓ It gives me a sense of creativity and relaxation.

Sentence is grammatically correct with present simple for a general truth; no change needed. (Included for completeness with explanation.)

× Art is one of my favorite hobbies.

✓ Art is one of my favorite hobbies.

Sentence is correct; 'art' as a singular field and 'hobbies' plural is fine. No change required.

× No, I have this skill since my childhood.

✓ No, I have had this skill since my childhood.

When expressing a state that began in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect 'have had' rather than simple present 'have'.

× I always got a plus grade in the drawing subject.

✓ I always got good grades in drawing.

'Got a plus grade' is nonstandard; 'got good grades' or 'received high marks' is natural. 'Drawing subject' is awkward; simply 'drawing' suffices. 'Always got' refers to repeated past action so simple past 'got' is acceptable.

× However, after high school I choose other subjects to get better job opportunities.

✓ However, after high school I chose other subjects to get better job opportunities.

The action occurred in the past, so use past simple 'chose' instead of present 'choose'.

× And as I mentioned earlier that during the high school I quit drawing and I choose other subjects such as mathematic and computer science that could lead to a good job opportunities.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, during high school I quit drawing and chose other subjects such as mathematics and computer science that could lead to good job opportunities.

Several issues: 'And' at the start is unnecessary; remove it. Use past simple 'quit' and 'chose' for past events. 'The high school' should be 'high school' without 'the'. 'Mathematic' should be 'mathematics'. 'A good job opportunities' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'good job opportunities' (no article).

× So to answer your question, I believe that arts cannot give me a variety of jobs in the future.

✓ So, to answer your question, I believe that art cannot provide me with a variety of jobs in the future.

Use 'art' (uncountable) rather than 'arts' here. 'Give me a variety of jobs' is awkward; 'provide me with a variety of jobs' or 'offer me various job opportunities' is more idiomatic. The future reference is fine with 'in the future'.

× Yes, one of my sisters has the same talent as me.

✓ Yes, one of my sisters has the same talent as I do.

'Same talent as me' is commonly used informally but 'same talent as I do' is grammatically purist. Either is acceptable; adjusted to match formal subject pronoun usage.

× Her drawing is far better than mine and she can draw anyone sketch without saying on the picture.

✓ Her drawings are far better than mine, and she can draw anyone's likeness without looking at a picture.

'Her drawing' (singular) versus plural 'drawings' depends on meaning; 'drawings' better expresses general ability. 'Anyone sketch' is ungrammatical; intended meaning likely 'anyone's likeness' or 'a sketch of anyone'. 'Without saying on the picture' is unclear; likely meant 'without looking at a picture'. Also split into two clauses with a comma.

× So she has a very great good creativity ability.

✓ So she has a very great creative ability.

Phrase 'very great good creativity ability' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'creative ability' or 'great creativity'. 'Very great' is awkward; choose 'very great' or 'great' — here 'great creative ability' is concise and natural.