Talents— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Speak more clearly and directly answer the question with one topic sentence, limit to 3–4 short sentences, use correct grammar and specific details. Start with a clear statement of the talent (e.g. “Yes, I can rap and I love K-pop.”), then add one or two supporting details (how you practised, languages you rap in) using linking words (for example, and, because). Reduce repetitions and avoid unclear phrases.

Example: Yes, I can rap and I love K-pop. I practised rapping for about ten minutes every day, so I can perform songs in English, Korean and Chinese. Because I listen to many K-pop tracks, I learned rhythm and pronunciation quickly.

Suggestion: Give a clear time reference and connect reasons with linking words. Use past tense correctly when talking about childhood and present perfect or simple past for recent events. Keep to two or three sentences: state when you learned it, then explain why it started recently using a reason.

Example: I mastered it recently. When I was young I didn’t have a smartphone, so I rarely heard K-pop; only in the last few years, after I got internet access, I started watching idols and practising rapping.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give a concise reason. Start with a topic sentence (Yes or No), then give one clear reason and one concise example of how the skill might help (transferable skills like confidence or teamwork). Avoid vague phrases and correct word choice (e.g. 'related to' not 'related about').

Example: I don’t think it will be directly useful for my future job because my career will be in aviation, not music. However, rapping has improved my confidence and teamwork, which could help me give presentations or work with colleagues.

Suggestion: Respond directly and clearly, use correct pronouns and simpler vocabulary. Begin with a clear answer (Yes/No/Not sure), then give a specific observation about your family member and one short supporting detail. Avoid unclear or negative words like 'poor' unless you mean financial context.

Example: I'm not sure, but my younger sister also likes K-pop like me. She watches the same groups and sometimes sings along, though she hasn’t said she wants to perform professionally.

× I'm not sure for this but I just know I love K pop.

✓ I'm not sure about this, but I just know I love K-pop.

Use of preposition 'for' is incorrect with 'sure'; 'about' is correct. Also add comma before 'but' for clarity and hyphenate K-pop. Improve: 'sure about this' and punctuation.

× I noticed myself I I can rap by spend time fly to 10 minutes no matter what in English language Korea or China.

✓ I noticed that I can rap after practicing for about ten minutes, whether in English, Korean, or Chinese.

Multiple issues: missing conjunction 'that' after 'noticed', repeated 'I', incorrect verb forms 'spend' and 'fly' used incorrectly, and unclear time expression. Correct structure: 'noticed that I can rap', use 'after practicing for about ten minutes' and parallel language names 'English, Korean, or Chinese'. This addresses pronoun redundancy and verb form errors.

× I think maybe this is the Thailand that I good at.

✓ I think maybe this is the talent that I am good at.

Incorrect noun 'Thailand' used instead of 'talent' and missing verb 'am' for 'I am good at'. Subject-verb structure requires 'I am' before adjective. Also 'this is the talent that I am good at' is clearer.

× It was *********** recently because when I was young I don't have smartphone, I never see K Pop Idol or never heard about K pop song before.

✓ It was mastered recently because when I was young I didn't have a smartphone; I never saw K-pop idols or heard K-pop songs before.

Tense inconsistency: 'don't have' should be past 'didn't have'. Use past simple 'saw' and 'heard'. Add article 'a' before 'smartphone' and pluralize 'idols' and 'songs'. Replace 'never see' with 'never saw'.

× I don't think like that because my talent and my future work is not related about aviation between K pop song.

✓ I don't think so because my talent and my future work are not related; my work is in aviation, which is different from K-pop singing.

Incorrect preposition 'related about' should be 'related' or 'related to'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'talent and my future work' is plural so use 'are'. The phrase 'between K pop song' is wrong; clarify contrast with 'different from K-pop singing'.

× But it's not that deep.

✓ But it's not that serious.

'Deep' is awkward here; native speakers use 'serious' to mean 'not significant'. Maintain present tense but choose appropriate adjective.

× I can show my tolerance to my friend or my family when they have party or something like that.

✓ I can show my tolerance to my friends or my family when they have a party or something like that.

Number agreement: 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match general meaning. Include article 'a' before 'party'. Verb tense 'can show' is fine.

× I'm not sure for this but I see my poor sister also like K pop song the same me but I never heard they talk about their talent.

✓ I'm not sure about this, but I see my younger sister also likes K-pop songs like me, though I have never heard her talk about her talent.

Use 'about' with 'sure'. 'Poor sister' is odd; likely 'younger sister' or omit 'poor'. Subject-verb agreement: 'sister ... likes' (third person singular). Use 'K-pop songs' plural. 'the same me' -> 'like me'. 'I never heard they talk' -> 'I have never heard her talk' (correct pronoun and present perfect to indicate experience up to now).