Art— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'because' repeated, 'some of the character there is really pretty').

Example: No, I don't really enjoy drawing. I can only manage simple shapes and basic designs, and I struggle to draw detailed characters. For example, I can sketch a house or a tree, but I can't create lifelike portraits.

Suggestion: Organise your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then support with specific reasons and one example. Improve coherence by using linking words (for example, 'because', 'so', 'then'). Correct word choices: 'reader' → 'artist' or 'creator'.

Example: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries because I like viewing different photographs and drawings. By looking closely, I try to guess what the artist is trying to convey, and then I usually search online afterwards to see the artist's explanation. This comparison makes the visit more interesting and educational.

Suggestion: Be specific about what you want to learn and why. Avoid filler words ('uh', 'actually') and grammatical errors. Use one or two supporting points with linking words ('because', 'for example').

Example: Yes, I would like to learn more about painting because it has always been a dream of mine to paint well. For example, I want to learn about colour mixing and brush techniques, as these help to create contrast and express ideas more clearly.

Suggestion: Give a concise past-tense account with a clear reason and one specific detail. Avoid long, run-on sentences and correct tense/grammar mistakes. Use linking words like 'but' or 'so' to show contrast or result.

Example: Yes, I took a drawing class when I was about seven, but I only stayed for about a month because I wasn't interested. Instead of practicing, I often played with my friends, so I didn't improve and found drawing boring at the time.

× Well, I don't really like drawing because I'm not really good at drawing because my drawing skill is just normal where I can only draw some simple like shape and design, but I cannot draw like some of the character there is really pretty.

✓ Well, I don't really like drawing because I'm not very good at it; my drawing skill is just average, so I can only draw simple shapes and designs, and I cannot draw characters that look really pretty.

This sentence has multiple conjunction and sentence structure issues (Grammar Problem Type ID:16). Using 'because' twice creates a run-on; replace with a semicolon and 'so' to show cause and result. 'Drawing' repeated is clumsy; replace with 'it'. 'Some simple like shape and design' is incorrect word order and extra filler 'like'—use 'simple shapes and designs'. 'Some of the character there is really pretty' is ungrammatical; use 'characters that look really pretty'. Suggestions: break long sentences into clearer clauses, avoid repeating words, and choose correct relative clause structure.

× Yes, I enjoy going to the galleries because of I love seeing different kind of photos and also the drawings.

✓ Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because I love seeing different kinds of photos and drawings.

This uses an incorrect prepositional phrase 'because of I' and incorrect noun phrase 'different kind of'. 'Because of' should be followed by a noun phrase, not a clause; use 'because' plus clause. 'Different kind of' should be 'different kinds of' to match plural noun 'photos'. Also 'the galleries' is acceptable but 'galleries' is more natural here. Suggestion: use 'because' for clauses and ensure noun-number agreement ('kinds of photos').

× And this is because by seeing the different kind of the drawing I can I like to guess what is the reader trying to convey.

✓ By seeing the different kinds of drawings, I like to guess what the artist is trying to convey.

This has sentence structure problems (Grammar Problem Type ID:26) and incorrect word choices. 'This is because by seeing' is wordy; begin directly with the participial phrase 'By seeing'. 'Different kind of the drawing' should be 'different kinds of drawings'. 'I can I like to guess' repeats subjects; use one phrase 'I like to guess'. 'Reader' is wrong in visual art context; 'artist' is appropriate. Suggestion: simplify sentence structure, fix noun plurality, and use the correct noun for the creator of artworks.

× And after this I will usually search online to compare with my initial guessing.

✓ After that, I usually search online to compare with my initial guesses.

This has tense and noun form issues (Grammar Problem Type ID:6). 'After this I will usually search' mixes future with habitual meaning; use present simple 'I usually search' for habitual actions. 'Compare with my initial guessing' uses gerund incorrectly and 'guessing' should be the noun 'guesses' (plural). Suggestion: use present simple for routines and pluralize 'guess' when referring to multiple or general instances.

× So we make it very interesting.

✓ So it becomes very interesting.

This sentence structure is awkward (Grammar Problem Type ID:26). 'We make it very interesting' implies the speaker and listener actively create interest, which is likely not intended. 'It becomes very interesting' fits the intended meaning: the process makes the experience interesting. Suggestion: choose verbs that reflect passive change ('becomes') if the subject is the experience rather than the people.

× Yes, actually I would like to learn more about art, especially the painting because it's always my one of my dream to learn how to paint nicely and I really love to see the drawing with a different kind of painting because it, uh, not only it emphasise on the colour contrast, but I think it's actually compare the meaning that, uh.

✓ Yes, actually I would like to learn more about art, especially painting, because it has always been one of my dreams to learn how to paint well, and I really love seeing drawings with different painting styles because they not only emphasize color contrast, but also convey different meanings.

Multiple article and phrasing issues (Grammar Problem Type ID:22). 'The painting' should be 'painting' when speaking generally. 'It's always my one of my dream' is ungrammatical; correct is 'it has always been one of my dreams'. 'Paint nicely' -> 'paint well'. 'See the drawing with a different kind of painting' -> 'seeing drawings with different painting styles'. 'Not only it emphasise' needs subject-verb agreement and structure; use 'they not only emphasize... but also convey...'. Suggestions: use correct articles for general nouns, proper verb forms for perfect aspect, and parallel structure with 'not only... but also'.

× Yes, when I was around 7 years old I attended a drawing class, but that time I only learned for around like one month because I'm actually not really interested in it.

✓ Yes, when I was around seven years old, I attended a drawing class, but I only took it for about one month because I wasn't really interested in it.

This mixes past and present tense incorrectly (Grammar Problem Type ID:5). 'I'm actually not really interested' should be past 'I wasn't' to match 'attended' and the past time context. 'Learned for around like one month' is awkward; use 'took it for about one month'. Suggestions: keep past-tense consistency for past events and avoid filler words like 'like'.

× And every time when I in the drawing class I will just try to escape it or just playing with friend instead of drawing so because to me drawing is really boring and I couldn't draw the perfect drawing which would make it.

✓ Whenever I was in the drawing class, I would try to avoid it or just play with my friends instead of drawing, because to me drawing was really boring and I couldn't draw perfect pictures.

This contains incorrect -ing forms and verb tense issues (Grammar Problem Type ID:8). 'When I in the drawing class' needs 'was in' for past tense. 'I will just try to escape it or just playing' mixes future/habitual 'will' with 'playing' (gerund). Use past habitual 'would' and base verb 'play'. 'Playing with friend' should be 'play with my friends'. 'Couldn't draw the perfect drawing which would make it' is vague; 'couldn't draw perfect pictures' is clearer and matches past tense. Suggestions: use consistent past habitual forms, correct verb forms after auxiliaries, and pluralize nouns as needed.