Part 1
Examiner
Do you like drawing?
Candidate
So to be honest, I can say that I'm not really keen on creating painting because for me it's very difficult and unreal. However, in my future I'm going to drawing classes, class and then I want to.
Examiner
Do you like to go to the gallery?
Candidate
So I can say that I really like to go to the gallery because I live in Saint Petersburg which can provide a lot of historical destination like gallery of art which is located of on center on my city. And there are a lot of interesting arts paintings called.
Examiner
Do you want to learn more about art?
Candidate
So actually I can say yes, because I want to deeper go to art, because nowadays we have a lot of artists who provide a lot of modern art like sculpture, maybe paintings or just some interesting.
Examiner
Did you learn drawing when you were a kid?
Candidate
Of course, I I remember that when I was a child, my mom gave me a lot of opportunity. For instance, my mom went to the drawing classes with me, and there are a lot of there were a lot of information about popular artists, famous artists, famous art and other one.
Do you like drawing?
Score: 52.0Suggestion: Сократите и упорядочьте ответ: начните с ясного утверждения (Yes/No + краткое объяснение), затем добавьте одно специфическое уточнение и завершите планом или примером. Избегайте лишних слов и ошибок с формой глаголов (например, «going to take drawing classes»). Используйте связки (because, but, so) корректно и не более чем 3–4 предложений.
Example: I don't really enjoy drawing because I find it difficult and unrealistic for me. However, I plan to take drawing classes next year to improve my skills because I want to learn basic techniques.
Do you like to go to the gallery?
Score: 60.0Suggestion: Сделайте вступление коротким и добавьте конкретные детали: укажите название или тип выставок, опишите, почему они вам нравятся (атмосфера, история, авторы). Уберите повторения и исправьте порядок слов (e.g. «located in the centre of my city»). Используйте связки (because, for example, such as) для логичности и не более 3–4 предложений.
Example: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries. I often go to galleries in Saint Petersburg because they display many historical and contemporary paintings. For example, the city centre galleries host exhibitions of Russian masters, which I find inspiring.
Do you want to learn more about art?
Score: 55.0Suggestion: Ответьте прямо и поясните одной-двумя конкретными причинами, избегайте некорректных выражений («deeper go to art» → «learn more about art»). Приводите примеры жанров или техник, которые вы хотите изучить, и используйте связки (because, for example, such as) для плавности. Не больше 3–4 предложений.
Example: Yes, I would like to learn more about art because modern artists work in many media such as sculpture and mixed-media painting. For example, I want to study contemporary techniques and the history behind them to better understand artists' ideas.
Did you learn drawing when you were a kid?
Score: 58.0Suggestion: Сформулируйте ответ в прошедшем времени чётко: начните с короткого утверждения и добавьте один конкретный пример (когда, кто, что вы делали). Избегайте повторов («a lot of» несколько раз) и неверных выражений; используйте связки (for example, so) для связности. Ограничьте ответ 2–4 предложениями.
Example: Yes, I did. When I was a child my mother took me to drawing classes, and we often read books about famous artists together. Those experiences helped me learn basic techniques and appreciate different styles.
× So to be honest, I can say that I'm not really keen on creating painting because for me it's very difficult and unreal. However, in my future I'm going to drawing classes, class and then I want to.
✓ So to be honest, I can say that I'm not really keen on creating paintings because for me they are very difficult and unrealistic. However, in the future I'm going to drawing classes and then I want to improve.
Ошибка связана с использованием формы сказуемого после 'keen on' – после 'on' должен следовать герундий (verb+ing) или существительное; 'creating painting' неверно: нужно 'creating paintings' или просто 'painting'. Также 'unreal' в данном контексте лучше заменить на 'unrealistic'. Фраза 'in my future' неверна — правильнее 'in the future'. 'I'm going to drawing classes' требует существительного 'drawing classes' без 'to' или конструкцию 'I'm going to take drawing classes'. Рекомендация: использовать 'keen on painting' или 'keen on creating paintings', 'in the future', и 'I'm going to take drawing classes'.
× So I can say that I really like to go to the gallery because I live in Saint Petersburg which can provide a lot of historical destination like gallery of art which is located of on center on my city.
✓ So I can say that I really like to go to galleries because I live in Saint Petersburg which has many historical sites, like the art gallery which is located in the center of my city.
Ошибка в предлогах и словосочетаниях: 'provide a lot of historical destination' неверно — следует 'has many historical sites' или 'provides many historical attractions'. 'Which is located of on center on my city' содержит лишние и неверные предлоги; правильно 'located in the center of my city' или 'in the city center'. Рекомендация: использовать 'located in the center of my city' и 'historical sites' вместо 'historical destination'. Также 'gallery of art' лучше заменить на 'art gallery'.
× And there are a lot of interesting arts paintings called.
✓ And there are a lot of interesting paintings.
Фраза 'interesting arts paintings called' грамматически неверна: слово 'arts' не требуется перед 'paintings', и 'called' здесь лишнее без уточнения того, что называется. Рекомендация: упростить до 'interesting paintings' или 'interesting works of art', и если использовать 'called', то завершить фразу: e.g. 'paintings called [name]'.
× So actually I can say yes, because I want to deeper go to art, because nowadays we have a lot of artists who provide a lot of modern art like sculpture, maybe paintings or just some interesting.
✓ So actually I can say yes, because I want to dive deeper into art, because nowadays we have many artists who create a lot of modern art like sculptures, paintings, or other interesting works.
'want to deeper go to art' неправильная структура: после 'want to' используется инфинитив, но 'deeper go' невалидно; правильно 'dive deeper into art' или 'go deeper into art'. 'Provide' лучше сменить на 'create' или 'produce' для художников. 'Sculpture' во множественном — 'sculptures'. Законченная фраза должна иметь существительное после 'interesting' — 'interesting works'.
× Of course, I I remember that when I was a child, my mom gave me a lot of opportunity.
✓ Of course, I remember that when I was a child, my mom gave me a lot of opportunities.
Слово 'opportunity' во множественном требуются, если имеется в виду множество возможностей: 'opportunities'. Поскольку предложение в прошлом ('when I was a child') глагол 'gave' в прошедшем верно. Рекомендация: использовать множественное число 'opportunities'.
× For instance, my mom went to the drawing classes with me, and there are a lot of there were a lot of information about popular artists, famous artists, famous art and other one.
✓ For instance, my mom took me to drawing classes, and there was a lot of information about popular artists, famous art, and other topics.
'went to the drawing classes with me' лучше выразить 'took me to drawing classes' или 'attended drawing classes with me'. Повтор 'there are a lot of there were a lot of' смешивает времена; нужно выбрать past: 'there was a lot of information'. 'Information' неисчисляемое, поэтому нельзя использовать 'a lot of informations' или 'other one' — правильно 'other topics' или 'other subjects'. Рекомендация: использовать 'there was a lot of information' и 'other topics'.