Mirrors— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use 'looking at myself' and 'check my appearance'), avoid repetition like 'sometimes' and 'occasionally' together, and limit to about 2–3 supporting sentences. Use linking words (for example, 'so' or 'because') to explain frequency and reason.

Example: Yes — I often look at myself in the mirror. I check my appearance every morning and again before important events because I want to make sure my hair and clothes look tidy.

Suggestion: Improve verb forms and article use, and be more concise. Use past tense consistently for past events and include linking words like 'then' or 'later' to show sequence. Replace incorrect word 'Miller' with 'mirror' and correct 'as adult' to 'as an adult'.

Example: Yes, I have. When I was a child my parents gave me money to buy a small mirror for my school bag. Later, as an adult, I bought a large wall mirror for my bedroom because I needed something bigger to get ready.

Suggestion: Use clearer grammar and avoid redundancy. Say why you carry it and give one or two specific uses. Fix tense and phrasing ('it has helped me' or 'it helps me') and use linking words like 'for example' or 'so'.

Example: Yes, I usually carry a small compact mirror in my bag because I like to check my makeup and hair before meeting people. For example, I use it to make sure my lipstick is neat and my hair is in place.

Suggestion: Improve clarity and correctness. Remove fillers like 'uh', correct 'Miller' to 'mirrors', and say 'make the room appear larger' instead of 'bigger than the realistic'. Complete the sentence by explaining placement and reason. Use linking words such as 'so' or 'therefore'.

Example: Yes, I would use mirrors to decorate my room because they reflect light and make the space appear larger. Therefore, I would place a large mirror opposite the window to increase natural light and create a sense of openness.

× I enjoy looking myself in the mirror and I will shake my appearance before leaving the house and sometimes I occasionally use the Miller to check my appearance again before meeting or important event.

✓ I enjoy looking at myself in the mirror and I will check my appearance before leaving the house, and sometimes I occasionally use the mirror to check my appearance again before a meeting or an important event.

The verb 'look' requires the preposition 'at' when referring to examining oneself, so use 'looking at myself' (preposition error combined with verb + -ing). 'Shake my appearance' is incorrect word choice; 'check my appearance' fits the context. 'Miller' is a spelling error for 'mirror' (not in the provided list but corrected for meaning). Also include articles: 'a meeting' and 'an important event'. Use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× When I was young my parents gave some money to buy a small Miller to keep in my school bag.

✓ When I was young, my parents gave me some money to buy a small mirror to keep in my school bag.

The verb 'gave' requires an indirect object ('gave me some money'), not 'gave some money' alone in this context. Also 'Miller' should be 'mirror' (spelling). A comma after the introductory clause improves readability.

× Later as adult I bought a larger wall Miller for my bedroom because I need something bigger to get ready.

✓ Later, as an adult, I bought a larger wall mirror for my bedroom because I needed something bigger to get ready.

Missing article: 'an adult' is required. Tense mismatch: 'Later' and 'when I was young' indicate past, so use past tense 'needed' instead of present 'need'. 'Wall Miller' corrected to 'wall mirror' (spelling). Commas around the phrase 'as an adult' improve structure.

× Yes, I usually carry a small Miller compact in my bag because I like to check my appearance before meeting people and I use it to check my makeup, my hair design because I think it had helped me.

✓ Yes, I usually carry a small mirror compact in my bag because I like to check my appearance before meeting people, and I use it to check my makeup and my hairstyle because I think it has helped me.

Replace 'Miller' with 'mirror' (spelling). 'Hair design' is unnatural; 'hairstyle' is correct. Combine clauses with a comma and 'and'. Tense: 'had helped me' implies past perfect without a reference point; 'has helped me' (present perfect) is appropriate to indicate a past action with present relevance. Also remove redundant 'my' before 'hairstyle' for natural flow.

× Yes, I would consider using Miller to decorate my room because uh, they reflect light and make the room bigger than the realistic and I think I might place the bigger Miller opposite the window for.

✓ Yes, I would consider using mirrors to decorate my room because they reflect light and make the room look bigger, and I think I might place a bigger mirror opposite the window.

Plural and count noun errors: use 'mirrors' (plural) and 'a bigger mirror' (singular) correctly. Remove filler 'uh'. The phrase 'bigger than the realistic' is incorrect; use 'make the room look bigger' for intended meaning. 'Place the bigger Miller opposite the window for' is incomplete; use 'place a bigger mirror opposite the window.' Spelling 'Miller' corrected to 'mirror'.