Teamwork— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetitions, and correct common errors (e.g. "a team player", "what it means to be a member of a team"). Keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy teamwork because I have been a water polo player since childhood, so I understand what it means to be a member of a team. Consequently, I have learned to share responsibilities and cooperate with others, which I believe will help me in future jobs.

Suggestion: Provide a direct, grammatical answer with a specific detail and use correct tense. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one concrete example and a linking word to connect ideas. Avoid repeating previous statements unnecessarily.

Example: Yes, I have. I am a member of the Anchor Sports Club water polo team, and I have played on teams since I was seven or eight. For example, last season I worked closely with a defensive partner to improve our coordination and reduce goals conceded.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence followed by two specific, connected points using linking words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g. "support teammates", "communication skills", "take responsibility") and avoid fragmentary sentences.

Example: Working in a team teaches me to support my teammates and communicate clearly. For instance, I often cover a team-mate in defence, which requires good verbal signals and a willingness to take responsibility for the overall result.

Suggestion: Begin with a succinct topic sentence stating one or two dislikes, then explain with a specific example and a linking word. Use correct nouns and plural forms (e.g. "people", "voices") and avoid hesitation words. Keep it to two or three sentences.

Example: I dislike when teams have too many conflicting opinions because that can slow decision-making. Also, if someone puts their ego before the group, it harms cooperation; for example, a teammate once ignored a better tactic and insisted on their own idea, which cost us the match.

× I like teamwork, of course, because I am also team player.

✓ I like teamwork, of course, because I am also a team player.

Missing the indefinite article 'a' before the noun phrase 'team player' makes the noun phrase ungrammatical; this is related to pronoun/article use. Add 'a' to form the correct noun phrase. Use: 'a team player'.

× I'm at that.

✓ I feel that way.

'I'm at that' is not a correct English sentence; the intended meaning is probably 'I feel that way' or 'I am like that'. This is a sentence structure error: replace with a standard English expression to convey the idea.

× I have been playing water polo since childhood and I know what is mean to be member of team and it's very important and it's very good thing for the future and the life because you learn sharing and, uh, doing something with together.

✓ I have been playing water polo since childhood and I know what it means to be a member of a team; it's very important and a good thing for the future and for life because you learn to share and to do things together.

Multiple present-tense and form errors: 'what is mean' should be 'what it means' (subject + verb agreement and correct pronoun), 'to be member of team' needs articles: 'a member of a team', 'it's very good thing' needs an article: 'a good thing', and 'you learn sharing and ... doing something with together' is ungrammatical: use infinitives 'to share' and 'to do things together'. These are present-tense and sentence-structure corrections to form natural English.

× Yes, I am also team member of Anchor Sports Club water polo team.

✓ Yes, I am also a team member of the Anchor Sports Club water polo team.

Missing articles: 'a team member' and 'the Anchor Sports Club water polo team' require the definite article for the named club. This is a present-tense/state description needing correct article use and noun phrase formation.

× Like I said I have playing water policy since childhood and I team up with someone when I was 7 or 8.

✓ Like I said, I have been playing water polo since childhood and I teamed up with others when I was seven or eight.

'have playing' is incorrect; the present perfect continuous 'have been playing' is needed for an action continuing from the past. 'water policy' is a wrong word choice; it should be 'water polo'. 'I team up with someone when I was 7 or 8' mixes present and past; use past simple 'teamed up' and spell out numbers in speech 'seven or eight'.

× Sometimes you need to cover your teammates and of course, you need to improve your communication skills.

✓ Sometimes you need to cover your teammates and, of course, you need to improve your communication skills.

This sentence is mostly correct; only punctuation is improved by adding commas. Subject-verb agreement is fine. Provide the corrected punctuation to improve clarity.

× You need to learn sharing and you need to learn. Give your maximum and do as much as you can.

✓ You need to learn to share, and you need to give your maximum and do as much as you can.

'learn sharing' should be 'learn to share' (use infinitive after 'learn'). 'You need to learn.' is an incomplete fragment; combine ideas into one sentence. 'Give your maximum' is a calque; better: 'give your maximum effort' or 'give your best'. Adjusted to natural English.

× Eagle because teams are generally more than one people and there are so many voice, so many ideas.

✓ Well, I dislike that teams usually have more than one person and there are so many voices and so many ideas.

The original begins with 'Eagle' (probably 'Well' or 'Actually') and misuses plural/singular: 'more than one people' should be 'more than one person' or 'more than one person' -> better 'many people'. 'so many voice' should be plural 'voices'. This is an article and pluralisation error; also fixed opening word to a natural filler.

× And of course there could be someone, uh, who is put his ego in front of the team and that's very negative impact of the team, of course, and I don't like these things.

✓ And of course there could be someone who puts his ego ahead of the team, and that's a very negative impact on the team, and I don't like those things.

Pronoun and verb form errors: 'who is put his ego' should be 'who puts his ego' (third person singular). 'in front of the team' is acceptable but 'ahead of the team' sounds more natural. 'that's very negative impact of the team' needs an article and preposition: 'that's a very negative impact on the team.' 'these things' changed to 'those things' to match distance from speaker. Fixed subject-verb agreement and preposition/article use.