Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating what you do and using correct grammar. Also, avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

Example: I usually celebrate my birthday with my close friends at college. Since I stay on campus during that time, we often gather and go out together to enjoy the day.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and has repetition and grammatical mistakes. Make sure to complete your sentences and provide specific details about the foods or activities. Avoid repeating words and keep your answer clear and natural.

Example: When I was a kid, we always had a home party and spent time enjoying a special dinner with many delicious dishes, such as homemade cakes and traditional meals.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and irrelevant information. Focus on directly answering the question with clear reasons why your birthday is important to you. Avoid unrelated details and incomplete sentences.

Example: Yes, definitely. Celebrating my birthday is important because it marks a special day in my life and gives me a chance to reflect and spend time with loved ones.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but it can be improved by using smoother linking words and slightly more natural phrasing. Also, avoid listing ideas without connecting them well.

Example: In China, I believe Chairman Mao's birthday is the most important to celebrate because he was a crucial historical figure whose leadership and ideas had a lasting impact on our nation's history and development.

× I usually celebrate my birthday with my close friends in college, but because I always have stayed on campus at that time and we gather to go out.

✓ I usually celebrate my birthday with my close friends in college, but I always stay on campus at that time and we gather to go out.

The phrase 'have stayed' is present perfect tense, which is incorrect here because the sentence describes a habitual action in the present. The correct tense is simple present 'stay' to match 'usually celebrate'. Also, the sentence structure was unclear; adding 'I' before 'always stay' clarifies the subject.

× Alright, when I was a kid, we always had a home party and spend spend some time to have a special dinner with a lot of delicious foods like.

✓ Alright, when I was a kid, we always had a home party and spent some time having a special dinner with a lot of delicious food.

The verb 'spend' should be in past tense 'spent' to agree with 'had' and the past time frame. Also, 'spend spend' is a repetition error. 'Having' is used instead of 'to have' to correctly express the activity. 'Foods' is corrected to 'food' as 'food' is an uncountable noun here.

× Yes, definitely, because it is very meaningful special day for me and of course. It it was my parents ceremony, anniversary day, you know.

✓ Yes, definitely, because it is a very meaningful and special day for me. Of course, it is my parents' anniversary day, you know.

The phrase 'meaningful special day' needs an article 'a' and the conjunction 'and' to connect adjectives properly. 'It it was' is a repetition and tense error; 'it is' fits better as the day is currently meaningful. 'Parents ceremony' is incorrect; it should be 'parents' anniversary day' with possessive apostrophe and correct noun.

× In our country, I believe Chairman Mao is one of the most crucial historical figures for us. Therefore, I think his birthday is the most significant occasion to celebrate because he had a lasting impact on our nation's history and development, his leadership and idea.

✓ In our country, I believe Chairman Mao is one of the most crucial historical figures for us. Therefore, I think his birthday is the most significant occasion to celebrate because he had a lasting impact on our nation's history and development through his leadership and ideas.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'his leadership and idea' which is incomplete. Adding 'through his leadership and ideas' completes the thought and improves sentence structure. Also, 'idea' should be plural 'ideas' to match the context.