Birthday— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is honest and clear, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and using simpler expressions. Also, consider adding a linking phrase to improve coherence.

Example: Usually, I prefer to spend my birthday alone at home because getting older makes me feel a bit anxious. So, I like to relax quietly without any celebrations.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use past tense consistently and improve sentence structure. Adding linking words can also help the flow of your answer.

Example: When I was young, I liked to have birthday parties where I invited all my friends and relatives to celebrate. However, my attitude has changed a lot since then.

Suggestion: Your answer repeats ideas and has some grammatical mistakes. Try to be more concise and clear, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific reasons.

Example: I believe celebrating birthdays is important because they mark special days in our lives and remind us of our age. Celebrations help us appreciate these moments.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and incomplete, and you hesitate a lot. Try to prepare a direct response with specific details. Avoid filler words and finish your sentences clearly. Use linking words to organize your ideas.

Example: In China, I think the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of ancestors or gods. People often hold special ceremonies and prepare offerings to honor them.

× To be honest with you, on my birthday I will get very depressed because I think I get older and this scares me a lot and I prefer to be alone at home and do nothing on my birthday.

✓ To be honest with you, on my birthday I get very depressed because I think I am getting older and this scares me a lot, so I prefer to be alone at home and do nothing on my birthday.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'will get' to describe a habitual feeling on birthdays, which should be in the present tense to indicate a regular occurrence. Also, 'I think I get older' is better expressed as 'I think I am getting older' to show the ongoing process. The sentence is corrected to present tense to reflect habitual actions and feelings.

× As I remember when I was young, I like to have a celebration party for my birthday and I invited all of my friends and relatives to have a special an celebration.

✓ As I remember, when I was young, I liked to have a celebration party for my birthday and I invited all of my friends and relatives to have a special celebration.

The sentence refers to past habits and events, so the verbs should be in the past tense. 'Like' should be 'liked' to indicate past habitual action. Also, 'an celebration' is incorrect; 'a celebration' is correct because 'celebration' starts with a consonant sound.

× As I remember when I was young, I like to have a celebration party for my birthday and I invited all of my friends and relatives to have a special an celebration.

✓ As I remember, when I was young, I liked to have a celebration party for my birthday and I invited all of my friends and relatives to have a special celebration.

The phrase 'an celebration' is incorrect because 'celebration' begins with a consonant sound, so the correct article is 'a'. The correction removes the incorrect article to fix the error.

× At all, If we want to talk about celebration for birthday, I think it is important to celebrate every events, especially birthday, because it's a very important days of your calendar and it shows you your age.

✓ Actually, if we want to talk about celebration for birthdays, I think it is important to celebrate every event, especially birthdays, because they are very important days on your calendar and they show your age.

The sentence has several present tense and pluralization issues. 'Every events' should be 'every event' because 'every' is followed by a singular noun. 'Birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to match the context. 'It's a very important days' is incorrect; 'they are very important days' is correct to agree in number. Also, 'shows you your age' is better as 'show your age' for clarity and correctness.

× At all, If we want to talk about celebration for birthday, I think it is important to celebrate every events, especially birthday, because it's a very important days of your calendar and it shows you your age.

✓ Actually, if we want to talk about celebration for birthdays, I think it is important to celebrate every event, especially birthdays, because they are very important days on your calendar and they show your age.

The original sentence incorrectly uses plural forms with singular quantifiers and mismatched verb agreement. 'Every events' should be 'every event' because 'every' requires a singular noun. 'Birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to match the general statement. 'It's a very important days' should be 'they are very important days' to agree in number.

× That's an tricky question because I'm not sure about my answer, but I think, uh, they like to celebrate their God's birthday and they will prepare different celebrations for their God and I think they've got.

✓ That's a tricky question because I'm not sure about my answer, but I think they like to celebrate their gods' birthdays and they prepare different celebrations for their gods.

The sentence has pronoun and article errors. 'An tricky' should be 'a tricky' because 'tricky' starts with a consonant sound. 'Their God's birthday' is incorrect because 'God' is singular and possessive; if referring to multiple gods, it should be 'gods' birthdays'. Also, 'they will prepare' is changed to 'they prepare' to reflect habitual action. The incomplete phrase 'I think they've got' is removed for clarity.