Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically correct: give a clear topic sentence with correct tense, then one specific detail. Avoid repetition. Use linking words for clarity.

Example: I started using the internet when I was in elementary school because we had computer lessons as part of the curriculum. For example, in the third grade we learned basic skills like using a browser and searching for information, which helped me become comfortable online.

Suggestion: Correct grammar and use a clear frequency statement, then add one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases.

Example: I go online every day because most of my school resources and assignments are available on the internet. For instance, I usually log in each morning to check announcements and access reading materials for my classes.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give concise supporting details and specific examples. Fix grammar and avoid filler words.

Example: No, I have never been strictly forbidden from using the internet. As a child I simply wasn't interested in it, so I spent my free time playing outside with friends instead of using online games or social media.

Suggestion: State your opinion clearly and use linking words to organize reasons. Be specific about activities and give an example of time spent or a consequence to make it stronger.

Example: Yes, I think I spend quite a lot of time online, especially on social media, because I chat with family and friends and watch short videos. For example, I often spend about two hours each evening scrolling through reels and messaging, which sometimes distracts me from studying.

Suggestion: Give a clear conditional statement, then two specific activities as supporting details. Use linking words and correct grammar, avoid repetition.

Example: If I couldn't use the internet, I would talk more with my family and friends and spend time outdoors. For instance, I might go for walks, play sports with friends, or visit a café to have longer face-to-face conversations.

× I think I start using the Internet since when I was in elementary schools because we had the computer class in the the class curriculum so we learn how to use the computer during the class.

✓ I think I started using the internet when I was in elementary school because we had computer class in the curriculum, so we learned how to use the computer during class.

The speaker is referring to a past time ('when I was in elementary school') so the verb should be in the past tense ('started', 'learned'). 'Since' is used with perfect tenses and is unnecessary here; 'when' is correct. 'Elementary schools' should be singular ('elementary school') and 'the the' is a duplicate article. Use lowercase for 'internet' in general usage and remove redundant articles to improve clarity.

× These days I have so many assignment from the school so I go to I go online every single days because all the resource is related with the online so I have to do my assignment by the online.

✓ These days I have so many assignments from school, so I go online every single day because all the resources are online, so I have to do my assignments online.

Countable nouns must match plurality: 'assignment' -> 'assignments', 'days' -> 'day' when used with 'every single', and 'resource' -> 'resources'. Remove unnecessary prepositions ('from the school' -> 'from school', 'by the online' -> 'online'). 'Go online' does not need 'to' before it. These corrections fix number agreement and preposition misuse.

× I think I've never been strict restricted from the using the Internet because I wasn't very interested in in it.

✓ I think I've never been strictly restricted from using the internet because I wasn't very interested in it.

Use the adverb 'strictly' to modify 'restricted'. Remove the article 'the' before 'using' ('using the internet' or 'using the internet' — here 'using the internet' is acceptable but 'from using the internet' is correct structure). Also remove the duplicated 'in'. Keep 'internet' lowercase.

× As a child I didn't spend much time for the Internet.

✓ As a child, I didn't spend much time on the internet.

Use 'on' with 'spend time' (correct preposition). 'Internet' should be lowercase. The verb 'didn't spend' is correct past tense; only the preposition required correction.

× I didn't play any online games.

✓ I didn't play any online games.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. 'Any' is correctly used with the negative sentence to indicate zero quantity.

× I usually hang out with my friend, go to to the play bar.

✓ I usually hung out with my friends and went to the play bar.

The context is past habit, so past tense verbs ('hung out', 'went') are appropriate. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' if speaking generally, and there was a duplicated 'to'. Adjust verbs to past tense to match 'As a child' context.

× Uh, if the online included the social media as well, I think I quite spend a lot of time for the online because I chat with my friends and my family every day and then I watch the video and fun stories, fun reels when I have.

✓ If online activities include social media, I think I spend quite a lot of time online because I chat with my friends and family every day, and I watch videos and short entertaining clips when I have time.

Maintain present simple for habitual actions ('include', 'spend', 'chat', 'watch'). 'Quite spend' is incorrect word order; use 'spend quite a lot of time'. Use 'online' without article. 'The video' should be plural 'videos' and 'fun reels' can be described as 'short entertaining clips'. Add 'time' to complete 'when I have time'.

× If I cannot use the Internet, I might I might just conversation with my friends or my family, or I might just hang out with them to the outside to do activity things rather than just chatting or.

✓ If I could not use the internet, I might just have conversations with my friends or family, or I might hang out with them outside to do activities rather than just chat.

Use conditional modal correctly: 'If I could not use' (or 'If I couldn't use'). 'Might I might' duplicates modal; keep one 'might'. 'Conversation' should be the verb phrase 'have conversations' or 'talk'. 'To the outside' is incorrect — use 'outside'. 'Do activity things' should be 'do activities'. Use base form 'chat' after 'rather than'.