Part 1
Examiner
When did you start using the internet?
Candidate
And when I was only four years old, I started to use Internet to see some famous films in this world or searched some information from some horror events. And actually I used it all to.
Examiner
How often do you go online?
Candidate
Every day, because in these contemporary modern society, everyone has their mobile phone. Of course, me, I always use my Internet and to buy some things online or sending some messages to my friends to connect our relationships or find some interesting information.
Examiner
Can you remember a time you weren’t allowed to use the internet?
Candidate
Of course, I can remember that when I was in my junior high school, I have to. I had to study hard to ensure I I could have a lightning filter. So my mother didn't allow me to use any phones or any Internet exercises. So I can't use.
Examiner
Do you think you spend too much time online?
Candidate
Yes and I'm very confused about using Internet correctly because I used most of my time. Maybe one day I will use more than 10 hours online to shopping or to say some films. I think that is very that is one of the tips to waste of my time.
Examiner
What would you do without the internet?
Candidate
I can't imagine that because everyone has mobile phones these day. MMM but I think if if I don't have Internet maybe I will read more and and study more. Maybe I will go to study some things I'm interested in like math or literacy.
When did you start using the internet?
Score: 56.0Suggestion: 表达要更自然、简洁并注意语法时态和冠词。回答应以主句开头,然后用一两句具体细节支持,避免重复或含糊的结尾。例如说明第一次上网做了什么、父母是否允许等。
Example: I started using the internet when I was about four years old. At first I mainly watched popular children’s films online and sometimes searched for information about scary stories that interested me. My parents usually supervised me while I was watching.
How often do you go online?
Score: 62.0Suggestion: 回答要直接并用一两句具体例子支持,注意句子结构和动词形式(例如 buy / send / find)。使用连接词使表达更连贯,如 'because', 'so' 或 'for example'。
Example: I go online every day because almost everyone now has a smartphone. For example, I use the internet to shop, message friends to stay in touch, and look up interesting news or videos.
Can you remember a time you weren’t allowed to use the internet?
Score: 50.0Suggestion: 回答需更清晰、语法正确并提供具体时间与原因。避免不完整或重复的句子,解释家长禁止的具体措施和你当时的感受或结果。
Example: Yes. I remember in junior high my mother banned me from using the internet during exam periods so I could study without distractions. She took away my phone for two weeks, which helped me focus on revision.
Do you think you spend too much time online?
Score: 52.0Suggestion: 要给出直接判断并解释原因,提供具体例子和频度,使用准确表达(例如 'I sometimes spend more than 10 hours a day online')。避免重复和模糊词汇,提出可能的解决办法会更好。
Example: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. For instance, some days I spend over ten hours watching films or shopping, which wastes time. I am trying to limit myself by setting a daily time limit for social media and streaming.
What would you do without the internet?
Score: 64.0Suggestion: 回答要更自然并给出具体替代活动,说明原因和具体安排,避免重复俗语和填充音。用一两句支持细节,让回答更完整。
Example: I can't fully imagine life without the internet, but I think I would read more books and study subjects I enjoy, such as math or literature. I might also spend more time going to the library or joining local study groups.
× I started to use Internet to see some famous films in this world or searched some information from some horror events.
✓ I started using the Internet to watch some famous films and to search for information about some horror events.
原句中 started 后面接不定式 "to use" 虽然可接受,但更自然且符合“start”常见搭配的是动名词形式 "started using"。此外,动词搭配和并列结构不一致("to see" 与 "searched" 混用不定式和过去式),需统一为动词不定式或动名词形式并保持时态一致;将 "see" 改为更常用搭配 "watch",并把 "searched some information from" 改为更地道的 "search for information about"。建议:学习常见动词(如 start, begin, continue)后常接动名词,注意并列动词形式一致。
× I started to use Internet to see some famous films in this world or searched some information from some horror events.
✓ I started using the Internet to watch some famous films and to search for information about some horror events.
原句中缺少定冠词或不定冠词,正确表达是 "the Internet",而不是单独的 "Internet"。建议:固定搭配记忆,例如 'the Internet',表示特定的网络。
× And actually I used it all to.
✓ And actually I used it all too.
原句中最后的词写成了 "to"(介词或不定式标记)但应为副词 "too"(也)。建议:区分 'to' 与 'too' 的用法:'too' 表示也或过于,'to' 用于不定式或表示方向。
× Every day, because in these contemporary modern society, everyone has their mobile phone.
✓ Every day, because in this contemporary modern society, everyone has their mobile phone.
原句中冠词使用不当("these ... society")与时态本身无关,但属于当前句子的语法错误,应该使用单数可数名词前的指示代词 'this' 来指代当前的社会。建议:'society' 作为不可数或可数名词时前面用 'this' 表示当今社会。
× Of course, me, I always use my Internet and to buy some things online or sending some messages to my friends to connect our relationships or find some interesting information.
✓ Of course, I always use the Internet to buy things online, send messages to my friends to keep in touch, or find interesting information.
原句中 'me, I' 的用法不正确,主语应为 'I';动词并列时形式应一致(都用不定式或都用动词原形),例如 'to buy' 与 'sending' 混用不当。还修正了 'my Internet' 为惯用表达 'the Internet',并将 'connect our relationships' 改为更地道的 'keep in touch'。建议:主语位置只用 'I',并列动词保持形式一致。
× Of course, I can remember that when I was in my junior high school, I have to.
✓ Of course, I can remember that when I was in junior high school, I had to.
句子讲过去发生的事情,时态应一致使用过去时:'I have to'(现在时)错误,正确为过去时 'I had to'。建议:在描述过去的经历时使用过去时态。
× I had to study hard to ensure I I could have a lightning filter.
✓ I had to study hard so that I could have better self-discipline / so that my parents would allow me to have a phone with a web filter.
原句结构混乱且重复了 'I'("I I"),'ensure I could have a lightning filter' 表达不清。可能意思是为了让父母允许使用手机并设置过滤器,或为了自律。需重构句子使逻辑明确,并用合适词汇(如 'web filter' 或 'parental controls')。建议:写句子前先理清因果关系,使用 'so that' 引导目的状语从句。
× So my mother didn't allow me to use any phones or any Internet exercises. So I can't use.
✓ So my mother didn't allow me to use any phones or the Internet, so I couldn't use them.
原句中 'Internet exercises' 用法不当,且 'So I can't use' 时态与前句不一致(过去时应为 couldn't)。建议:将 'use any phones or the Internet' 作为并列宾语,并在后句使用过去时 'couldn't'。
× Yes and I'm very confused about using Internet correctly because I used most of my time.
✓ Yes, and I'm very confused about using the Internet correctly because I use most of my time on it.
原句时态混乱:'I'm ... confused'(现在)后跟 'I used most of my time'(过去)不一致,应改为现在时 'I use most of my time on it' 来表示习惯性现在情况。并补上 'the Internet' 的定冠词。建议:保持句子时态一致,表达习惯性动作用现在时。
× Maybe one day I will use more than 10 hours online to shopping or to say some films.
✓ Maybe one day I will spend more than 10 hours online shopping or watching films.
原句中 'use ... to shopping' 结构错误,动词搭配不当。正确表达应为 'spend ... online shopping' 或 'spend ... watching films'。同时 'to say some films' 应为 'watching films'。建议:记住 'spend time doing something' 的固定结构,动名词用于表示正在进行的活动。
× I think that is very that is one of the tips to waste of my time.
✓ I think that is one of the reasons I waste my time.
原句重复且结构混乱('very that is')、'tips to waste of my time' 用法不当。应重构为简洁表达,例如 'one of the reasons I waste my time'。建议:避免无谓重复,使用自然的固定搭配如 'one of the reasons'。
× I can't imagine that because everyone has mobile phones these day.
✓ I can't imagine that because everyone has mobile phones these days.
原句中 'these day' 单复数错误,正确为复数 'these days' 表示当今这些天。建议:'these days' 用于表示现在的时期。
× but I think if if I don't have Internet maybe I will read more and and study more.
✓ but I think if I don't have the Internet, maybe I will read more and study more.
原句中重复 'if' 和 'and and' 为笔误,此外 'have Internet' 应为 'have the Internet'。没有明显的 -ing 问题,但为保持一致性将并列动词用原形。建议:注意打字错误并保持定冠词使用。
× Maybe I will go to study some things I'm interested in like math or literacy.
✓ Maybe I will go study subjects I'm interested in, like math or literature.
原句中 'go to study' 可简化为 'go study' 或直接 'study';'literacy'(识字能力)用作学科不当,应为 'literature'(文学)。建议:区分 'literacy' 与 'literature' 的含义,并使用自然的短语 'study subjects'。