Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear, relevant and gives a brief personal detail which is good. To improve, make the answer more concise and use a linking phrase to connect age and activity, and vary vocabulary (e.g., use “played simple online games” or “enjoyed dress-up and educational games”). Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid small redundancies like repeating 'really'.

Example: I started using the internet at about six years old when I was in primary school. Back then I often played simple online dress‑up and educational games with my sister, which I enjoyed a lot.

Suggestion: Strong, natural answer with specific routines and reasons. To improve further, tighten linking between weekday and weekend habits using a clear transition (e.g., 'During the week... but at the weekend...') and replace brand name with 'short video apps' if you want more formal vocabulary.

Example: During the week I go online almost every evening for about an hour to watch short videos and unwind. At the weekend, however, I often stream TV dramas for longer periods to follow ongoing plots and relax.

Suggestion: Good structure and contrast between school and university life. Improve by using clearer linking words ('However' or 'Later') and correcting tense/number agreement ('whenever I needed'). Also avoid repeating 'far more' and 'fewer' together—choose concise phrasing.

Example: When I first got a smartphone in middle school, my parents limited my internet use to about three hours on weekends so I could focus on studies. Later, at university, I had much more freedom and could study online whenever I needed to.

Suggestion: You answer directly and give a problem and solution, which is good. Improve grammar ('at the evening' -> 'in the evening'; 'a strict screen time limit' pluralization) and reduce repetition. Use one or two linking words ('because' and 'therefore') carefully. Be specific about the measures you take.

Example: Yes, I spend too much time online and often stay up late watching short videos in the evening. Therefore, I’m setting a strict screen-time limit of one hour after 9 pm and trying to follow a consistent sleep schedule to improve my sleep quality.

Suggestion: Well-developed, specific and vivid answer with good examples. To polish, combine sentences with smooth linking words ('for example' already used—use 'also' or 'in addition') and avoid starting a sentence with 'And' in formal speech. Keep it concise to fit the 3–4 sentence guideline.

Example: I would spend more time outdoors. For example, I’d travel with my best friend to explore other cities, sample local cuisines and learn about their cultures. I’d also go hiking regularly to photograph spectacular sunsets, which I believe would benefit my physical and mental health.

× I started using the Internet when I was in primary school around age 6, and I often played basic online games with my sister.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in primary school around age 6, and I often played basic online games with my sister.

No change needed: nouns and plurals are correct. (Included only because sentence was fine.)

× We enjoyed virtual dress up games which I found really fun.

✓ We enjoyed virtual dress-up games, which I found really fun.

Hyphenate compound adjective 'dress-up' and add a comma before the nonrestrictive clause. This is punctuation/word-formation rather than verb form, but it improves clarity and correctness.

× I go online almost every day, usually for about an hour in the evening, to browse short videos on Tiktok and unwind after a busy day.

✓ I go online almost every day, usually for about an hour in the evening, to browse short videos on TikTok and unwind after a busy day.

Proper noun 'TikTok' needs correct capitalization. Tense and structure are appropriate for habitual actions, so no tense change is required.

× On weekends, when I have more free time, I often stream TV dramas to follow ongoing plots and relax.

✓ On weekends, when I have more free time, I often stream TV dramas to follow ongoing plots and relax.

Sentence is grammatically correct; present simple correctly describes habitual actions.

× When I was in middle school, I had my first smartphone, but my parents only allowed me to use the Internet on weekends for about 3 hours so I could concentrate on my studies.

✓ When I was in middle school, I had my first smartphone, but my parents only allowed me to use the Internet on weekends for about three hours so I could concentrate on my studies.

Change numeric '3' to the word 'three' for formal writing; past tense 'had' and 'allowed' are consistent and correct.

× Later at university I had far more freedom and fewer restrictions so I could study online whenever I need.

✓ Later at university I had far more freedom and fewer restrictions so I could study online whenever I needed.

Sequence of tenses: the main clause is in past tense ('had'), so the subordinate clause should use past tense 'needed' rather than present 'need'. Use past to indicate habitual ability in that past period.

× Yes, I always stay up late because I often browse short videos on Tiktok or watch TV dramas at the evening.

✓ Yes, I always stay up late because I often browse short videos on TikTok or watch TV dramas in the evening.

Correct preposition is 'in the evening' not 'at the evening'. Also correct capitalization of 'TikTok'. Present simple is appropriate for habitual actions.

× So I'm trying to set strict screen time limit and follow a healthier sleep routine because I know that looking at screens for long periods is bad for my sleep quality.

✓ So I'm trying to set a strict screen-time limit and follow a healthier sleep routine because I know that looking at screens for long periods is bad for my sleep quality.

Add the article 'a' before 'strict screen-time limit' and hyphenate 'screen-time' as a compound noun. The rest of the sentence is correct.

× I think I would spend more time outdoors.

✓ I think I would spend more time outdoors.

No change needed: conditional 'would' is appropriate for hypothetical future without internet.

× For example, I would travel more frequently with my best friend to visit other cities, try different cuisines, and learn about local cultures.

✓ For example, I would travel more frequently with my best friend to visit other cities, try different cuisines, and learn about local cultures.

Sentence is correct: 'would' properly expresses hypothetical actions; verbs after 'would' are base forms and the list is parallel.

× And I would go hiking often to photograph spectacular sunsets, which I think would be healthier for my mind and body.

✓ And I would go hiking more often to photograph spectacular sunsets, which I think would be healthier for my mind and body.

Add 'more' to make the adverbial phrase 'more often' idiomatic. The conditional 'would' is correct; 'go hiking more often' clarifies frequency.