Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence stating when you began, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid awkward phrasing (e.g. “studied using the Internet”) and use correct word order and articles.

Example: I started using the internet in junior high school. For example, I used a popular PC messaging app called QQ to chat with classmates and look up study materials.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence about frequency, then one or two specific reasons. Keep sentences grammatical and avoid repetition of the same idea. Use linking words like “because” or “for” to connect reasons.

Example: I go online every day because I use the internet for work and studying. For instance, I regularly use WeChat and QQ to communicate with colleagues and access learning resources.

Suggestion: Provide a clear, direct answer and correct tense and grammar. Use one supporting detail explaining when and why the restriction happened. Avoid hesitations and repeated words.

Example: Yes. In high school our teachers banned mobile phones and computers during class to prevent distraction, so we couldn’t use the internet during lessons.

Suggestion: Answer directly and explain briefly why you think so, with correct subject references and grammar. Avoid unclear phrases like “a bad for her health.” Use one or two supporting reasons and a linking word.

Example: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I use messaging apps for work and study most of the day, which often leaves me tired and affects my sleep.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence about what you would do offline, then provide one or two specific activities. Keep sentences complete and avoid trailing fragments.

Example: If I didn’t have the internet, I would go for walks and do more physical exercise. I would also spend more time talking face-to-face with friends and family.

× I studied using the Internet when I was in junior high school.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in junior high school.

The student used 'studied using' which is awkward and incorrect in context; the examiner asked when they started using the internet. Use 'started using' to indicate the beginning of an action in the past. Replace 'studied using' with the past action verb phrase 'started using'.

× There was a popular message app on computer named the QQ.

✓ There was a popular messaging app on the computer called QQ.

Errors: article and word choice. Use 'a' or 'the' appropriately; 'on computer' needs 'on the computer' and 'message app' should be 'messaging app'. 'named the QQ' is unnatural; 'called QQ' is more natural. Also remove the extra definite article before QQ.

× Nowadays I use the Internet every day for both work and the study I.

✓ Nowadays I use the Internet every day for both work and study.

Word order and extra pronoun error: 'the study I' is incorrect. Use the noun 'study' without an article here. Keep parallel structure: 'for both work and study'.

× Use messaging apps such as WeChat and QQ everyday.

✓ I use messaging apps such as WeChat and QQ every day.

Sentence fragment missing subject: begin with 'I' to match previous sentence. Also 'everyday' should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase). The correction adds the subject and corrects 'everyday' to 'every day'.

× When I was in high school, I would. Teacher forbidden us to use any mobile phones or computers when we are we we.

✓ When I was in high school, our teachers forbade us from using mobile phones or computers during class.

Multiple errors: 'I would.' is an incomplete sentence and should be removed. 'Teacher forbidden us' uses wrong verb form and subject; use plural 'teachers' and past tense 'forbade' (irregular). 'forbidden' is past participle; incorrect here. 'to use any mobile phones or computers when we are we we' is ungrammatical and repetitive; clarify as 'during class' or 'in class'. Use 'us from using' or 'forbade us from using'.

× Yes, I use messaging apps such as WeChat and QQ every day for my work and study and it is a bad for her health.

✓ Yes, I use messaging apps such as WeChat and QQ every day for my work and study, and it is bad for my health.

Pronoun and article errors: 'a bad for her health' is incorrect. Use 'bad for my health' to refer to the speaker. Remove the unnecessary article 'a'. Ensure pronoun matches the speaker 'my'.

× I usually take a walk on the street and then do some exercise when I. Am not online, I also like to talk to.

✓ I usually take a walk and do some exercise when I am not online. I also like to talk to friends.

Punctuation and fragmentation issues: 'when I. Am not online' incorrectly splits the verb and capitalizes 'Am'. Combine into 'when I am not online'. 'I also like to talk to' is incomplete—add the object 'friends' to complete the sentence. 'take a walk on the street' is wordy; 'take a walk' is more natural.