Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clear and directly answer the question with a correct time reference, use simple past tense, and avoid unclear fragments. Keep it to 1–2 sentences and add one specific detail. Use linking words if you add a reason. For example, say the year or your age and mention how your family got online (e.g. dial-up) to be specific.

Example: I started using the internet around 2000 when I was about eight years old. My family used a dial-up connection, so we often had to wait for the connection to establish.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear frequency statement, then add one or two specific activities with a linking phrase like because or for example. Use correct grammar (e.g. 'everything needs to be done online'). Keep it concise (max 3 sentences).

Example: I go online every day because most tasks require it. For example, I send emails, message friends, and watch short videos on social media.

Suggestion: Start with a direct yes/no and give one clear reason and a specific detail about the restriction. Use correct verb forms (e.g. 'my mom restricted my screen time') and linking words like 'so' or 'therefore' to show result. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes. When I was in elementary school my mother restricted my internet use to help me focus on homework, so I was allowed online for only about an hour each day.

Suggestion: Directly answer and give a specific measure and how you control it, using correct vocabulary and grammar. Replace unclear phrases (e.g. 'use an update blogs') with clear actions like 'use apps' and link ideas with 'so' or 'therefore'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I do. I limit my screen time to three hours a day and use an app that blocks social media and sends reminders when I reach my limit, which helps me cut down my usage.

Suggestion: Answer directly with one main activity and give a specific reason or example. Use correct phrasing (e.g. 'I would read more because I have many unread books') and avoid trailing sentences. Use a linking word like 'so' to show consequence. Keep it to 2 sentences.

Example: Without the internet, I would read more because I have many books I bought but never finished. So it would be a good opportunity to make time for new and unread books.

× Well, I don't remember the exact time but I think it's wrong 2000 and it's I my family got off connection.

✓ Well, I don't remember the exact time, but I think it was around 2000 when my family lost our connection.

The original sentence has incorrect word order, wrong tense and incorrect word choices ('wrong 2000', 'it's I my family got off connection'). This is a sentence structure error: reorder clauses, use past tense 'was' for a past event, and use proper verbs 'lost our connection' to convey meaning. Suggestion: break into clear clauses: 'I think it was around 2000 when my family lost our connection.'

× You know the one BBB and need to wait.

✓ You know, the one with the bandwidth limit where you had to wait.

The sentence lacks a clear subject and misuses pronouns and nouns ('the one BBB and need to wait'). This is an incorrect use of pronouns/nouns and omitted words. Clarify the reference ('the one with the bandwidth limit') and match verb forms ('had to wait' for past context). Suggestion: provide the noun phrase describing 'the one' and use correct verb tense.

× I'd say every day as everything is need to do online nowadays, no matter you want to send e-mail or send text message or watch some short video on social media.

✓ I'd say every day, as everything needs to be done online nowadays, whether you want to send an e-mail, send a text message, or watch a short video on social media.

This sentence uses incorrect verb forms and modal structures ('is need to do'). This is a present tense/verb form issue. Use 'needs to be done' (passive structure) for general present truth, and use 'whether' to introduce alternatives. Also use articles ('an e-mail') and parallel verb forms.

× Yes, there was a time couldn't use the Internet.

✓ Yes, there was a time I couldn't use the internet.

The original omits the subject 'I' before the modal 'couldn't', causing an incomplete clause. This is an incorrect use/omission of pronouns. Insert the subject to form a correct sentence. Also lowercase 'internet' is acceptable.

× When I was in elementary school, my mom, my mom restrict me to restrict our screen time to help us concentrate on homework.

✓ When I was in elementary school, my mom restricted our screen time to help us concentrate on our homework.

The sentence duplicates 'my mom' and uses incorrect verb form 'restrict' instead of past 'restricted'; pronoun reference is inconsistent ('me' vs 'our'). This is an incorrect use of pronouns and tense. Use past tense 'restricted' and consistent plural 'our' for shared screen time and 'our homework.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and match subject, verb, and pronoun number.

× So I was only allowed online for a short period each day.

✓ So I was only allowed to be online for a short period each day.

The phrase 'allowed online' is missing the infinitive 'to be' after 'allowed', making the structure unnatural. This is a sentence structure error. Use 'allowed to be online' to correctly link permission with the verb.

× Yes, definitely. That's why I try to limit my screen time to three hours per day and I use an update blogs, social media and send reminders when I've reached my limit.

✓ Yes, definitely. That's why I try to limit my screen time to three hours per day, and I use update apps, social media, and set reminders when I've reached my limit.

Original has wrong noun forms and verb choices ('an update blogs', 'send reminders'). This mixes singular/plural and uses incorrect articles. It's an article/quantifier and noun form issue. Use 'update apps' or 'app updates' and parallel verbs 'use... and set...' Suggestion: keep parallel structure and correct noun forms.

× Hopefully it's truly helpful.

✓ Hopefully that is truly helpful.

While understandable, starting with 'Hopefully' plus a pronoun reference is informal; adding 'that' clarifies the referent. This is a mild sentence structure/clarity issue. Suggestion: use 'that' to refer to the action (using reminders) for clarity.

× I think there's all many things I can do, but the thing I do the most is reading because I have many books I've never read since I bought it.

✓ I think there are many things I can do, but the thing I would do most is read because I have many books I haven't read since I bought them.

The original misuses 'there's' with a plural noun and has tense/pronoun agreement issues ('I've never read since I bought it'). This is a 'there be' issue and plural/tense errors. Use 'there are' for plural and correct present perfect 'haven't read' and plural pronoun 'them' for 'books.' Suggestion: match 'there are' with plural nouns and keep pronoun number consistent.

× So it it is a good timing to read the new book and.

✓ So it is a good time to read my new books.

The original repeats 'it', uses awkward collocation 'good timing', and ends with an incomplete clause. This is a sentence structure/error of word choice. Use 'good time' and pluralize or specify 'new books' and remove the trailing conjunction. Suggestion: use 'good time' not 'good timing' and complete the sentence.