Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng cần tự nhiên hơn, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và tránh từ thừa. Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, hạn chế từ thừa như “actually” hoặc “up in for”, và dùng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc hơn. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn (ví dụ tuổi hoặc ví dụ thông tin đã tìm) sẽ cải thiện điểm.

Example: I started using the internet when I was about eight years old. My father showed me how to search for information to help with my primary school homework, such as finding explanations for math problems or English vocabulary. Since then, I have used it mostly for studying and simple research.

Suggestion: Trả lời rõ ràng nhưng cần rút gọn và mạch lạc. Tránh bắt đầu bằng những từ đệm như “Well” hoặc “Hmm”, sửa lỗi nhỏ (everyday → every day). Dùng một câu chủ đề nêu tần suất, rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ bằng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

Example: I go online every day because I need it for both work and study. I usually check news articles in the morning and join online meetings, and I also use social media to keep in touch with friends and family.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời tốt: trực tiếp, có ví dụ cụ thể và ngữ pháp đúng. Tuy nhiên có thể làm ngắn gọn hơn và dùng từ chính xác hơn (e.g. “banned me from using my phone for a week” là tốt). Bạn có thể thêm cảm xúc hoặc hậu quả ngắn để làm phong phú câu trả lời.

Example: Yes. Once my parents found out I was playing online games without permission, so they banned me from using my phone for a week. I felt frustrated but it helped me focus more on my studies.

Suggestion: Nội dung đúng nhưng có lỗi từ vựng và cấu trúc (“short my last video” không chính xác). Cần diễn đạt gọn hơn, sửa lỗi, và bổ sung cụ cụ thể như thời lượng hay thói quen để thuyết phục hơn. Dùng liên từ để nối lý do và kết quả.

Example: Yes, I do. I often spend too much time scrolling through short videos late at night and chatting with friends, which can waste an hour or two. This usually happens when I'm bored after studying and it affects my sleep.

Suggestion: Ý hay nhưng câu có cấu trúc lẫn thì và một vài lỗi (ví dụ “with Internet I wouldn't” nên là “without the internet I wouldn’t”, “draw up information” không tự nhiên). Bắt đầu trực tiếp, sửa lỗi phủ định, dùng liên từ và thêm 1 ví dụ hoạt động cụ thể sẽ tốt hơn.

Example: Without the internet, I wouldn't be able to find information quickly or message my friends instantly. On the bright side, I would feel freer and probably spend more time exercising, such as going to the gym or playing basketball with friends.

× How I actually started using the Internet when I was a child.

✓ I actually started using the Internet when I was a child.

The original sentence lacks correct word order for a declarative sentence. The subject 'I' must come before the verb 'started'. Suggestion: use subject-verb-object order: 'I actually started...'.

× so I could search up in for information for my studies, for example my homework and my math or English.

✓ so I could search for information for my studies, for example my homework and my math or English.

The phrase 'search up in for' uses incorrect verbs and prepositions. The correct verb + preposition is 'search for' when looking for information. Remove unnecessary words 'up in'. Suggestion: use 'search for information'.

× Well, I actually go online everyday because I often need to search for information for my work and studies.

✓ Well, I actually go online every day because I often need to search for information for my work and studies.

The adverb 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'ordinary'; the correct adverbial phrase is 'every day' (two words). Place it where it modifies the verb 'go online'. Suggestion: use 'every day'.

× I also use the Internet to keep in touch with my friends and family, for example.

✓ I also use the Internet to keep in touch with my friends and family.

'For example' is unnecessary and incomplete here; it suggests an example should follow. Remove it or provide actual examples. Suggestion: delete 'for example' or add specific examples after it.

× I usually read new articles or join meetings in the morning.

✓ I usually read new articles or join meetings in the morning.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable. No change needed. (No applicable error from the provided list.)

× Yes, there were several occasions when my parents restricted my Internet usage.

✓ Yes, there were several occasions when my parents restricted my Internet usage.

Sentence uses 'there were' correctly to indicate past occurrences. No change needed. (No applicable error from the provided list.)

× I remember once I was playing online games without their permission and when they found out, they eventually banned me from using my phone for a week.

✓ I remember once I was playing online games without their permission, and when they found out, they banned me from using my phone for a week.

Use consistent past tense. 'Eventually banned' is acceptable but 'eventually' is redundant when recounting a specific consequence; remove for clarity. Ensure comma before 'and' joining clauses. Suggestion: keep past simple 'banned'.

× Yes, I do think I spend an excessive amount of time online, especially scrolling through short my last video late at night and chatting with friends for no real purpose.

✓ Yes, I do think I spend an excessive amount of time online, especially scrolling through short videos late at night and chatting with friends for no real purpose.

'short my last video' has incorrect word order and noun form. Use plural 'videos' or 'short video clips' and remove 'my last'. 'Short' modifies 'videos'. Suggestion: 'scrolling through short videos'.

× Well, with Internet I wouldn't be able to draw up information as quickly as before or message my friend instantly.

✓ Well, without the Internet I wouldn't be able to find information as quickly as before or message my friends instantly.

Several issues: 'with Internet' should be 'without the Internet' (contrasts hypothetical), and 'draw up information' is incorrect collocation; use 'find information'. Also 'message my friend' may be singular/plural mismatch with context; 'friends' is more natural. Include definite article 'the' before 'Internet'. Suggestion: 'Without the Internet I wouldn't be able to find information...'.

× On the bright side, I feel more free and would probably spend more time on relaxing activities like going to the gym or playing basketball with my friends.

✓ On the bright side, I would feel freer and would probably spend more time on relaxing activities like going to the gym or playing basketball with my friends.

'Feel more free' is understandable but non-idiomatic; use comparative adjective 'freer' with 'would'. Matching conditional 'would' in both clauses is natural. Suggestion: 'I would feel freer'.