Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Try to use more precise vocabulary and structure your response with clear linking words to enhance coherence.

Example: I started using the Internet when I was about 10 years old. At that time, I mostly played outside, but now I use the Internet daily for studying and keeping in touch with friends. In the future, I expect to rely on it even more as technology advances, because I believe the Internet will become essential for everyone.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more concise. Use linking words to organize your ideas and avoid repetition. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary related to online activities.

Example: I go online quite often, mainly because I need the Internet for my studies. Besides that, when I have free time, I enjoy using social media platforms like Facebook and Instagram to watch videos and connect with friends for entertainment.

Suggestion: Your answer needs clearer grammar and more precise vocabulary. Also, try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I remember when I was in 10th grade, our teacher assigned us an environmental project. I wanted to search for ideas on social media, but the teacher did not allow us to use the Internet for that assignment.

Suggestion: Your answer has good content but needs clearer sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague expressions. Try to express your opinion more clearly and support it with reasons.

Example: In my opinion, I usually use my phone for only two to three hours a day. Some of my friends use their phones for about eight hours, which I think is too much. I believe spending excessive time online might prevent them from enjoying the real world.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and detailed but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, try to avoid redundancy and organize your ideas clearly.

Example: Without the Internet, it would be difficult for me to manage daily tasks. However, when I don't have access, I usually spend time talking with friends and organizing hangouts. We often play outdoor sports like football or cricket to enjoy ourselves.

× In the future, I expected to rely on it even more as technology continues to develop.

✓ In the future, I expect to rely on it even more as technology continues to develop.

The sentence uses 'expected' which is past tense, but the context refers to a future expectation. The correct form is 'expect' to match the future context.

× So I think without Internet, no one can survive in future, so I will do that.

✓ So I think without the Internet, no one can survive in the future, so I will do that.

The sentence lacks the definite article 'the' before 'Internet' and 'future'. Also, the phrase 'so I will do that' is unclear and does not fit the context. Adding 'the' and clarifying the sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× It depends on my mood because as a student most of the time I have to go through online because of my study purpose or otherwise as a social person when I have my free time, I would like to spend my time on Facebook and watch some reels and also I use Instagram As for entertainment purpose.

✓ It depends on my mood because as a student, most of the time I have to go online for study purposes; otherwise, as a social person, when I have free time, I like to spend time on Facebook, watch some reels, and also use Instagram for entertainment purposes.

The phrase 'go through online' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go online'. 'Because of my study purpose' should be 'for study purposes'. Also, 'As for entertainment purpose' should be 'for entertainment purposes'. These preposition corrections improve the sentence's grammatical accuracy.

× So that time I try to search on social media to give me some ideas but that time that my teacher deny on it and didn't.

✓ At that time, I tried to search on social media to get some ideas, but my teacher denied it and didn't allow me.

The verb 'try' should be in past tense 'tried' to match the past context. 'Deny on it' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'denied it'. Also, the sentence was incomplete and unclear, so it was rephrased for clarity.

× But some of my friend told me that how can you manage the time that you didn't use phone more than us?

✓ But some of my friends told me, 'How can you manage your time that you don't use your phone more than we do?','

'Some of my friend' should be plural 'friends'. The pronouns and verb forms in the reported speech were incorrect and have been corrected to proper usage.

× Because they are engaged with more than me and they use phone almost 8 hours.

✓ Because they are more engaged than me and they use their phones for almost 8 hours.

The phrase 'engaged with more than me' is incorrect; it should be 'more engaged than me'. Also, 'use phone' should be 'use their phones' to correctly use the possessive pronoun.

× I think in future they can't able to see the beautiful world because of their.

✓ I think in the future, they won't be able to see the beautiful world because of that.

The phrase 'can't able to' is incorrect; it should be 'won't be able to'. Also, 'because of their' is incomplete and unclear; it was corrected to 'because of that' for clarity. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'future'.

× So without Internet it's hard for me to survive.

✓ So without the Internet, it's hard for me to survive.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'Internet' as it is a specific noun in this context.

× ...sometimes we make a arrangement of hangout and then we go to the field and play some kind of outdoor activities like football, cricket and that's the thing I do.

✓ ...sometimes we make an arrangement to hang out, and then we go to the field and play some kinds of outdoor activities like football and cricket, and that's what I do.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound in 'arrangement'. 'Make a arrangement of hangout' is incorrect; it should be 'make an arrangement to hang out'. Also, 'some kind of outdoor activities' should be 'some kinds of outdoor activities' to agree in number. 'That's the thing I do' is better expressed as 'that's what I do'.