Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Apni answer e beshi uh, erokom filler use korchen, ja natural English e kom dekhte hoy. Apnar uttor ta direct hote hobe ebong sentence structure clear rakha dorkar. Apni jodi specific date ba age mention korte paren, seta aro bhalo hobe. Example hisebe, apni bolte paren, "I started using the internet in 2023, mainly to search for important information related to my studies."

Example: I started using the internet in 2023, mainly to search for important information related to my studies.

Suggestion: Apnar answer e kichu grammar error ache, ebong sentence structure onek bar repeat hocche. Apni 'weekday weekend day' er jaygay clear distinction dite paren. Linking words use kore sentence ke aro logical korte paren. Example: "I don't have much time to go online on weekdays, but during weekends, I often go online several times to watch cartoons and dramas."

Example: I don't have much time to go online on weekdays, but during weekends, I often go online several times to watch cartoons and dramas.

Suggestion: Apni past tense use korte giye kichu bhul korchen, jemon 'weren't' er jaygay 'wasn't' hobe. Apnar sentence gulo aro clear korte hobe ebong repetition komate hobe. Apni linking words use kore sentence ke smooth korte paren. Example: "Yes, I remember when I was in 4th grade, I wasn't allowed to use the internet because I didn't know much about it, but I was very curious to learn."

Example: Yes, I remember when I was in 4th grade, I wasn't allowed to use the internet because I didn't know much about it, but I was very curious to learn.

Suggestion: Apnar answer e grammar ebong clarity er problem ache. Apni 'in online' er jaygay 'online' use korben. Sentence gulo short ebong clear rakhen. Linking words use kore contrast dekhate paren. Example: "I don't spend much time online during weekdays because I am busy, but on weekends, I spend more time online."

Example: I don't spend much time online during weekdays because I am busy, but on weekends, I spend more time online.

Suggestion: Apnar answer bhalo, kintu sentence gulo aro smooth korte paren. Apni linking words use kore sentence gulo ke logically connect korte paren. Example: "Without the internet, I would spend more time with my family, enjoy my hobbies like cooking and trying new dishes, and hang out with my best friends."

Example: Without the internet, I would spend more time with my family, enjoy my hobbies like cooking and trying new dishes, and hang out with my best friends.

× I think I started using Internet uh, since 2023.

✓ I think I started using the Internet since 2023.

In English, 'Internet' is a unique noun and requires the definite article 'the' before it. Omitting 'the' is incorrect here.

× I uh, first time I use Internet for searching, uh, important question of my.

✓ I, uh, the first time I used the Internet was for searching, uh, important questions of mine.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verb should be in the past tense 'used' instead of 'use'. Also, 'important question of my' is incorrect; it should be 'important questions of mine' to show possession and plural form.

× I uh, first time I use Internet for searching, uh, important question of my.

✓ I, uh, the first time I used the Internet was for searching, uh, important questions of mine.

'Question' should be plural 'questions' because it refers to multiple items. Also, 'of my' is incorrect; the correct possessive pronoun is 'of mine'.

× Honestly in weekday I don't have so much time to uh go on online, but in my weekday weekend day I usually go online for many times to uh see cartoons, dramas or.

✓ Honestly, on weekdays I don't have much time to go online, but on my weekend days I usually go online many times to see cartoons, dramas, or other things.

'Weekday' should be plural 'weekdays' when referring to general days. 'So much time' is better as 'much time' for uncountable nouns. 'Go on online' is incorrect; correct is 'go online'. 'Many times' does not need 'for' before it.

× Yes, I can remember the time I weren't allowed to use the Internet.

✓ Yes, I can remember the time I wasn't allowed to use the Internet.

The subject 'I' requires the singular past tense form 'wasn't' instead of 'weren't'.

× I think it was it was the time when I was in my 4th grade and I don't have so much idea about Internet, but I I was very fond of knowing.

✓ I think it was the time when I was in 4th grade and I didn't have much idea about the Internet, but I was very fond of learning.

'4th grade' does not need 'my' before it. 'Don't have so much idea' should be 'didn't have much idea' to match past tense and uncountable noun usage. 'Internet' needs 'the'. 'Fond of knowing' is incorrect; 'fond of learning' is appropriate.

× Honestly, I don't think I spend too much time in online because in my weekday I don't have many time to uh, spend time in online.

✓ Honestly, I don't think I spend too much time online because on weekdays I don't have much time to spend online.

'In online' is incorrect; correct is 'online' without preposition. 'Weekday' should be plural 'weekdays'. 'Many time' is incorrect; 'much time' is correct for uncountable nouns.

× But in my weekend stay I usually use not too much but use much.

✓ But on weekends I usually don't use it too much, but I do use it.

'Weekend stay' is incorrect; 'weekends' is appropriate. The sentence is unclear; rephrased for clarity. 'Use much' is not idiomatic; 'don't use it too much' is better.

× Honestly, I would spend time with my family members and I think I would. Spend my time in my hobby like cooking or trying new dishes and also hanging out with my best friends.

✓ Honestly, I would spend time with my family members and I think I would spend my time on my hobbies like cooking, trying new dishes, and also hanging out with my best friends.

The sentence was fragmented with a period after 'would'. 'Spend my time in my hobby' is incorrect; correct preposition is 'on my hobbies'. Also, 'hobby' should be plural if listing multiple activities.